| "The Lucky Ones" Reviews/Comments [ 1108 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kestrel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2007 08:31 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just love this story. I've read it at least a dozen times since discovering first few chapters and have followed it to the end. Definetly my most favorite story. Thank you again for writing it.
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Reviewed By: Chase65 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2006 21:03 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! No Inu/Kag story has ever affected me like this one. Many, many tears were shed during the last handful of chapters. Miroku, Sango, Kohaku & family showing up at the wedding made me weep the most(& started me crying yet again as I write this). You have a truly special gift and have deeply touched me with your writing. I especially liked how you touched on points in history & how everyone reacted (i.e. leaving Japan before the bombs). Words cannot truly express just how much I love this story!! Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
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Reviewed By: Totally Kawaii [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 09:54 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is very brilliantly written! I love the whole plot and the characters... especially Yukio as both baby and adult. Keep on writing!
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Reviewed By: Catticus [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2006 22:43 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
While I'm not entirely sure you will manage to read this, I feel compelled to write it anyway. Firstly, I love this story. I have read it numerous times, and never get tired of it. With this in mind, I would like to point some things out. You are a great story-teller, but every author has room to improve. I know a fair bit about good writing techniques, (mind you, this doesn't mean I'm great at writing stories), and I would like to share one with you. It is called "showing, not telling", which you actually do a lot of. Unfortunately, you also back it up with "telling". You provide a large amount of information within this story, but in the narrative, rather than through the chracters' actions, words or thoughts. I believe that you could improve by editing this, by changing some things that could be said differently to show the reader how characters feel/think/act/behave and their personalities, rather than telling them. One instance is describing the relationship between Eri (Inu/Kag's daughter) and Yukio. You directly state that when push comes to shove, they stand by and love each other. If you took that statement out of the story, your readers would still understand that the two siblings are fiercly loyal to each other and love each other, because you show it very well through their actions, words and thoughts. That's all. Again, I adore this story, I wished it didn't end...But that's what side stories are for, right? ;) Ciao.
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Reviewed By: Inusbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2006 13:04 PST
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Hey I came back and read it like I said I would. Loved it again I don't know why you don't have more reviews. This story should have over 2000 reviews I don't understand how I good story gets so many reviews and a GREAT story gets only a handful, maybe it is because when this story was new the review process was a pain in butt.
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Title: whoops
Reviewed By: kleptokitty [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2006 10:54 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh noes I meant to comment on Coyote Child. How'd I end up here?!
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Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: kleptokitty [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2006 10:50 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You made my day and I was having a really bad one. Thank you SO much for updating. I fell in love with this and Lucky Ones immediately and I am SO happy to see you have added a new chapter! You just can't find this kind of inu/kagome storyline anywhere else. Nothing else has compared!
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Reviewed By: Daemion [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2006 21:02 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Read this when it was new, read it again, and it still rocks. Two thumbs up plus another 8 from the hands I stole. Woot. Go Terri Botta!
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Reviewed By: dreamer789 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2006 18:44 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i absolutly love it! it was an awsome story definatly one of my new favorites! unlike alot of long storys i read this one accually kept me interested the whole time. never once did i get bored or was not into it. it was all wonderful you are a great writer, keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: luvofanhanyouandmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2006 19:45 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved this story! its like my 3rd time reading it but my first time reviewing *blushes* hehe. any way plzz continue on with your sequel cus its just as good so far! ja ne!
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Reviewed By: Relyssa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2006 21:11 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an awesome fic, easily the best fanfiction I've ever read. It's damn near impossible to find stories this good! Keep updating your other fics, please!
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Title: Can't get the thought out of my mind
Reviewed By: ladykurichan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 10:36 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic! I'm looking forward to reading the sequel. I've read this fic abotu a dozen times and I still love it!! My favorite part is actually a line from the first chapter that has Kagome thinking about having to coax "a nervous virgin hanyou" out of the God Tree! That is hilarious! You should really have a picture drawn up of that moment!!! I would put that on my desktop!!! Anyway, I look forward to reading many more stories from you. Great job!!
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Title: you inspire me
Reviewed By: vkp23 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2006 09:03 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really got motivated to write my own fic by rading your story. It was no less than beautiful! I can only hope to be as good a writer as you. maybe some time you could look my fic up and give me your input? I've read some of your lucky ones continuations and they are just as wonderful! Never stop writing. You could really go some where.
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Reviewed By: Snazzygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2006 18:03 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is definitely the best fanfiction I have ever read! =D I wish you'd update the Coyote Child too!
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Reviewed By: Anime Lady PIMP [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 06:26 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just dont get tired of reading this.
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