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| "Freeport" Reviews/Comments [ 194 ] | | Pages (13): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 › » ] | Reviewed By: DirtyD On: February 13, 2005 17:23 CST
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ACK! Mediaminer is getting more and more fustrating by the day. While I was reading the chapter there was no spaces between the setences! I got through it but, damn. That was quite compelling. Wufei using his skills at a crime scene. Someone has been watching CSI! Joke, crappy joke. The way you left it off, ooowww your so bad. I absolutely revere this exceptional piece of work!
| Title: ch 13
Reviewed By: Ice-is Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2005 17:06 CST
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Yay for expanding vocabulary. I had to look up 'crèche.' The plot's definitely starting to pick up the pace. Or rather, the adrenaline is starting to really pump, as the plot pacing has been fine. The ideas Duo presents at the beginning of the chapter about Freeports values about life are interesting. And the comment he makes, regarding the end-result of his war activities, is poignant... especially when taken into comparison with Wufei's actions and beliefs since that time. I'm imagining that Duo's pretty steamed at Wufei's lack of discretion there at the end... or for other reasons (the naming of which I'd have to re-read that part again). On the other side of the coin, I think Wufei will be annoyed at Duo for not letting him know earlier that there's an Elder around for a contact. Even though the Elder wouldn't really have any reason to be bending-over accomadating to any of Wufei's requests, I think Wufei would have preferred to know that he did have the chance of getting round-about access to 'official' Freeport records. :D Marketing and deadlines... yukk! I'm with you on that.
| Reviewed By: vox dei On: January 30, 2005 20:06 CST
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Thus far your story has been a great pleasure to read. As I've said before, you paint the characters in a new light. No surprise that Duo is a control freak, in spite of his "what me, worry?" attitude. So his reaction to Wufei's coming out was a priceless moment when the masks came down. That followed by the intimacy of Wufei's workout- some of your very best writing by the way. Wufei of course is seeing through it all, but his biggest enemy in all this is himself. Best of luck on the new job, but regardless of how fullfilling it is, please don't abandon your loyal readers. Thank you and great job, D (aquononascendet-AT-yahoo.com)
| Reviewed By: Pixie Smith (nsi) On: January 30, 2005 05:37 CST
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It was amusing how Wufei was thinking that Duo didn't meet his standards. Oh boy, I think Duo's going to have his work cut out for him trying to get Wufei to see him as a bed-warming candidate. Although I know Duo probably won't actually work towards it but they'll kinda drift together somehow. Still, this was as usual an interesting chapter. I liked how you slowed down the pace a little but I'm also excited to see some more action in the next chapter. I think with Wufei, you just can't not have action and throw some Duo into the mix and you've just gotta have action! Can't wait to see what happens next since it seems that they're gonna have some trouble on their hands.
| Reviewed By: DirtyD On: January 29, 2005 18:38 CST
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I was ready to send you an e-mail to beg you for another chapter. Understandable. Zechs was the wild card of the show. Never stayed in one place. Once he was finished or found a more "noble" goal to achieve he change sides. Come to think of it, other then his wish to fight Heero what was he trying to accomplish? Maybe he was just there to look good. (And look good he did, quite good.) Even without him you make great stories, think about it, I didn't even notice his absence until last review! Though I would have liked to see how you did his character. You have this way with your writing where you take their personalities and explain them in ways we "little people" never thought of, it fits to. I suppose that's why so many people agree you should do this as a career. I'd say to myself, but making it in the business requires more then just talent. (Why do you think some romance novels pale in comparishment to your stories? By public opinion of course.) Besides who wants mandatory deadines? I can't even update, how about you? Well that's enough enough of that. You've ruined me, I want more politics! Though the sence with Duo watching Wufei was cute, my favorite chapter in this was chapter 8. Heated discussions about law and order with great massages is what I want to see!
| Title: Ch 12
Reviewed By: Ice-is Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2005 13:42 CST
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I loved the intensity that build up while Wufei was doing his forms and Duo watched. As Wufei noted, there was an intimacy involved... moreso than if Duo had simply joined him in a shower. Loved Duo's flush and the thigh-slaps later (which I'm sure were subconscious flirtations rather than deliberate provocations... the first time it happened, anyway). The bit about the choosing of the Reds was interesting.... Since I seem to share Duo's view of politicians and I'm sure others do too... you might have more than a few converts to Freeport's form of Anarchism by the time the fic's run its course. The train ride to Kropotkin... I think Wufei watching Duo reining in his bitter hatred was a lovely parallel to Duo watching Wufei 'exercise'. My reviews are always disjointed, I'm realizing. Meh. Now... as I recall, there's no law against murder, so the person who's been killed should be important, ne?
| Title: NeNa
Reviewed By: NeNa [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 20:54 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm a horrible reader, just horrible! I apologize for not reviewing in 10 chapters... Well, where to start, first I commend you on your Freeport (the colony that is)! I love how it's its own little piece of anarchy that's not even supposed to even have managed this long but because it's contained within said colony, it's thrieving! I love how Wufei is trying to reason with himself that this piece of doom waiting to happen is happening! Lolz I'm loving it! Also I would like to state that it was a serious adrenaline rush when Wufei fought those men! I mean I was felt like jumping up and down and become their cheerleader *shudder* it was that... intoxicating... yeah that's the word for it. Oh now Mako... one word... Wow! I think that he is a fascinating side character, and his description... I think I melted... those lips seem to have caught our Wufei's attention. Also Duo's reaction on confronting Wufei's "Doe-eyed" look and the fact that he is playing for the home team and didn't even now it hahahahah... I love how Freeport... er the situation with Mako brought out the Sensual side of Wufei. I have always thought that Wufei is a hell of a lot more sensual then other people give him credit for... but that's for another time, if at all. I thought that it was oddly refreashing that they talk about Heero, a mutual friend. I dunno why, it's like they both care for him and worry about him, but don't know much about his private life and it's prefectly reasonable... ~*+NeNa+*~
| Title: Freeport Ch. 11
Reviewed By: Kagero13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2005 13:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I so did not see that coming. Flirty Wufei would have never entered my mind, but now that you wrote a 'dangerous' flirty Wufei it fits just fine. I didn't see them walking away from the confrontation, nor the whole 'Heero' conversation. The whole chapter was a suprise. I LOVE suprises!! And you are right, Mako is fun. Who doesn't love a man with sharp objects?
| Reviewed By: D On: January 19, 2005 07:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I finally caught up on your fics, and I must say that I'm enjoying this one as much as I enjoyed The Arrangement. I had also read your Darkside Tales, somewhere else I guess since I didn't see it here, and I know you can pull off dark 2x5x2 very, very well. I look forward to reading more of this "lighter" 2x5x2 fic. I also have to agree. I think I like Mako a bit more than I should. I'm almost sad you're not going to have him show up more, especially after Wufei's -ahem- "seduction."
| Title: can't blame u
Reviewed By: Rude02 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 20:41 CST
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tension, tension! uuuuuu I like Mako too, sounds like a hottyyyyy *^^* Don't kill him of in the end, pwease?
| Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: Talyssa_ On: January 18, 2005 18:35 CST
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YAY! new maldorer! i wasn't sure how I'd feel about switching to a new story and pairing and things when i was so involved with the whole cast set up around the 1x5 thing, but this is making me feel the same way i felt about that. GOOD! I waited a long time to start reading it so i'd have a nice little chunk to go into. It makes me sad that there isn't more. Why isn't there more? I require more! Like your wufei and your duo here. lots.
| Reviewed By: Talia Maxwell [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 01:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You do realize your fics are positively addictive, yes? Last weekend, I spent two whole days reading The Arrangement, and now, this lovely little thing has caught my attention! It is my honest opinion that you should take some time to use your insane talent for writing to do some purely original work so more people can read your work! (Not to mention you'd probably make a mint! I have no doubt you'd get published in a heartbeat.) I feel as though I've just finished reading a particularly good chapter in a favorite book. It's so rare to get that anymore, even from professional authors! (And just to give you another warm-fuzzy, because all authors know good reviews are warm-fuzzies, I picked out surprisingly few typos, and I've been known to find them in novels on a regular basis. Your spelling-slash-grammar is getting better, even with all that last minute tweaking you lay claim to!)
| Reviewed By: DirtyD On: January 17, 2005 23:15 CST
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Geez, sounds like you had a winner with that Mako character, because I liked him too! Amazing, finally an OC that didn't make you run screaming for the hills. I loved that scene, Wufei seducing his way outta danger. Sounds like Duo is rubbing off on him. The plot thickens, what does Mako suspect about Wufei? I have to tell you, your doing so well with this story I kind of missed all the politics. It happened! The day hell froze over! Your writing actually makes me feel smart to read, imagine that. Though one last question until next time. Do you not like using Zechs/Millardo? I hardly ever hear about him in your stories and never see him. Even Treize gets more limelight and he's always dead.
| Reviewed By: PhoenixMageFire On: January 17, 2005 20:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know, they should have a 12 rating for overall enjoyment, just so people could use it on your fics. But I would pay blood to see Wufei in drag. Such a funny thought...
| Reviewed By: Pixie Smith (nsi) On: January 16, 2005 18:22 CST
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Ha, ha! The truth comes out. This just gets better and better. I wasn't expecting Duo to find out that Wufei was gay. You integrated it into the story so nicely. It was cute how Duo teased Wufei --0-- Tempted by the candy.--0-- And Wufei's comeback --0--Duo, I could chop you down to size in my sleep.--0-- Tee, hee, hee. Honestly though, this is getting, really, really, really interesting! And yeah, I like Mako quite a lot too. He sounds like a rather attractive character, except for the fact that he's a criminal.
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