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| "LOVE POISON" Reviews/Comments [ 202 ] | | Pages (14): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 ] | Reviewed By: Zelix [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2005 15:19 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So it's here as well now, one of the best fics i've ever read, good to see you here too, i have no doubts this fic will be a huge success here as well, it's is just not possible for it not to be a success.
| Reviewed By: cynbad146 On: January 29, 2005 21:09 EST
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I really like the chemistry, that you write, between Inu Yasha and Kagome. I am definitely checking in on this story as you write it. I can tell from this chapter that it is going to get even more interesting, shortly. Do you plan your storyline out, or, do you have an idea how many chapters you might want to write? Keep up the good work. Thank You. Cynbad146
| Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 12:56 EST
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Another very good chapter. Your portrayal of Inuyasha as he tries to sort his feelings out is exactly how I picture what goes on in his mind: a jumbled mess of warring emotions. Your writing as always is emotional and hits you with a punch, really making you feel what the characters are going through. I also really like the way you portray Inuyasha as naieve in the ways of physical acts such as kissing and the like, seeing as he is very inexperienced. I'm glad that Inuyasha has finally told Kagome his feelings for her, yet I hope you have him tell Kagome what happened with Kikyou. I expect that his consciouness will bear on him heavily until he tells her what happened.
| Title: Review for 2 & 3
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 12:13 EST
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Two more great chapters. I like Inuyasha's reaction to seeing Kikyou's shinidamachuu, the fact that Kikyou makes him feel like nothing, and his reaction to being around Kikyou, unable to control himself even though his mind tells him otherwise. I also like the way you write Inuyasha's thoughts the way a real person thinks, a steady stream of conciousness that leaps from one thought to another, and yet sometimes swings right back around full circle. I thought Kikyou going down on Inuyasha was a little strange and a bit out of character, but not wholly uncalled for. I finally warmed up to the idea when Inuyasha saw Kagome instead of Kikyou going down on him. That was a great plot device. I'm interested to see where you take this in the next chapter, if Kagome will find out, what Kikyou's reaction will be, and how Inuyasha deals with his feelings of self-loathing.
| Title: Beautiful
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 11:43 EST
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Without a doubt, your style of writing is beautiful, poetic even, and it is a pleasure to read your words. Beyond your flowing style and gramatical correctness, your characters are completely in-character and beyond believeable. Your explainations for Inuyasha's feelings for Kikyou versus his feelings for Kagome are well thought out and well written. Your lemon scenes are hot and steamy, and not marred by cliche. I can't believe you don't have many more reviews. I look forward to seeing where you are taking this fic, and I look forwards to reading the next chapters!
| Reviewed By: ~Darkflameangel~ On: January 22, 2005 02:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story is so awesome...you are a great writer, and dont you forget it! you have a great way of describing their thoughts and feelings along with moving the story along. honestly keep up the great work that you do, and if you get any flames...id beat thosed bakas up for you!lol. if you ever get the idea to write another Inuyasha fanfic, might i suggest an alternate pairing such as a Sango/Sesshoumaru or something with Kouga? Ive read one Sango/Sesshoumaru fic and loved it, so with your writing style and wonderful ideas...i think you could write one really awesome story...well shoot....i have alot more comments, but im running out of space to compliment you in, and its getting to late to write a "novel" of compliments, so i shall take me leave...keep up the AWESOME work!{hehehee, id like to chain atleast one of the inu-brothers to my bed too!, either one, but making sesshoumaru show some "emotion"(*snicker) would sure be fun!!!;) )
| Reviewed By: cynbad146 On: January 20, 2005 21:04 EST
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Hey! I just wanted to let you know that I think you have a really good story/plot going. I am really enjoying it. You are definitely keeping my attention. Lots of angst, fluff, and excitement. Thank You, Cynbad146
| Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 20:25 EST
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AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!!! Love it!!! Kikyo must die!! Please update soon!!!!!
| Title: First time reader
Reviewed By: nymphminxgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 20:14 EST
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This is the first time I read this fic and I'm loving it. I just added it to my favs and I can't wait for you to update again. Stupid dead bitch...Grrrr...I hope Inuyasha tells Kagome the truth. She'll forgive him! She has too! lol
| Reviewed By: thoughts On: January 20, 2005 12:21 EST
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This is a wonderful story. This story shows why writing will always be popular -- you get a view of what the characters are thinking. Your Kagome and Inuyasha are beautifully written. It is lovely to be able to read the conflicts in their heads and to understand the reasons for their actions. Your struggles with the story aren't showing in your writing. I hope you will continue with your story. I'm intrigued with your characters and where you are going with them. I've only watched first 50 or so episodes of Inuyasha so I don't know if the characters you have introduced are ones from later in the series or your own characters. There is certainly nothing in the writing to give any indication either way since they have been so well introduced and are being rounded out beautifully. Thanks for your time and for the effort you have obviously put into your writing. It is a pleasure to read your work.
| Reviewed By: naughty angel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 11:07 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's really really great please continue updating quickly. I love it!
| Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 08:53 EST
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Argh! I just realized it's Ch 4 "Trust..." that I'm utterly in love with! Of course, I think all of your writing is terrific...but that's the one where you express Inu's thoughts about Kikyo and Kagome so beautifully! :)
| Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 08:45 EST
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Thought I'd leave you a review here to "welcome" you :) Unfortunately I'm not too sure about how to navigate mm.org's posting section myself. Sorry! But I took a quick look at your chapters and thought that things seemed to be in place...nothing looked horrible! But the important thing is your CONTENT! You know this already...I've told you oodles and oodles of times already, but your writing is fantastic! First of all, you have an original plot - and it's hard to come up with a good Inu-Kag plot that hasn't been done already! Second, your command of the english language is so impressive (esp b/c it's a second lang for you)! Wonderful imagery...accurate characterizations. The only character I thought had been OC originally was Kikyou (and I've already told you that)...but as I've continued to read your story...I've come around ot your theory of her suppressed desire. I also happenend to watch "Kagome's voice, Kikyo's Kiss" again the other day, and could see your point. At any rate...this story lacks for nothing! You have the readers in suspense...we know that there's a ticking time bomb with Inu-Kag's relationship...all because of Naraku's spell and Kikyou's lust! More people will find this story, you'll see! I can't praise it enough...especially your Chapter 5!! Sigh. That's so what I would want to write!! :)
| Reviewed By: dark pheonix On: January 20, 2005 03:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this fanfiction but I really hope that it ends with kagome and Inuyasha being together happily. I just saw this fiction today and was interested to see what it was exactly like so I began reading it and I just could not stop!!! I really like ALL kagome and Inuyasha fics and this one is very interesting because of the things Inuyasha is going through. I am excited for the next chapter and I really want to know why inuyasha is having so much trouble. I hope you update soon. you are a very good writer!! believe me I do not review unless the story is important to me. Just please make the ending happy I have read one to many fanfictions that are not fun to read at all because they are just to sad. I LOVE INU YASHA AND KAGOME!!!!!!!! I also REALLY LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!! Take my word for it my sister has published a few books. you have ALOT of potential!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Title: Heyla!
Reviewed By: DarklessVasion - not signed in On: January 19, 2005 20:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just found this story yesterday, and though a bit crude in the *cough* descriptive area, I like how the characters are interacting. InuYasha's current dilemma is heartbreaking. To not trust one's self...agonizing. (and yes frustrating, especially after his nighttime visit to Kagome, LoL) I hope he finds the answers he's looking for. --- I find it a shame that so many of the villagers still hate and fear him considering how many times he's protected the village. Oh well, extenuating circumstances. --- Sesshoumaru's appearance seemed rather sudden, but then he comes and goes often without an obvious reason. --- InuYasha's internal struggle with his 'inner youkai' is facinating. He can't be sure that his youkai will hurt Kagome, but with it's apparant bloodthirstyness, he can't be sure that it won't hurt her. He definately needs to find Myouga. Then again, Bouksenou the 1000 year old magnolia tree has often had answers to difficult questions. Bouksenou is the one who explained the danger of InuYasha's youkai blood to Sesshoumaru when he wanted to know why his brother's smell and youki had changed, becoming more like a full youkai. --- Keep on going, lets bring this baby home!
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