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| "LOVE POISON" Reviews/Comments [ 202 ] | | Pages (14): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 › » ] | Title: Buyo MUST weigh more than 7 pounds!
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2005 14:25 EST
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Its great to see how much work you've done on this since I beta'ed it. Awesome job! Kagome's dream sequence was well done and well thought out, what a great way for her to find out what happened to Inuyasha at the village, even if she doesn't fully remember the dream. The writing for that part was excellent too, so descriptive with wonderful imagery. Again, you portray Mrs. Higurashi expertly, and have really honed in on her character. You summed her up in one sentence so well: "Her mother had a knack for seeing the kindness in other people and was the most open-minded being on the face of the earth" That, and her slipping... 'something' into Kagome's backpack was just awesome. I can see the woman doing just that. You also did a great job with the angst Inuyasha went through as he contemplated the approach of his human night, and the reminisence of his human nights as a pup. As always, your Inuyasha/Shippou banter is right on and a great break to all the emotions flying around. Can't wait to read the next half and the exciting lemon to come!
| Reviewed By: cynbad146 On: February 16, 2005 22:08 EST
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I think your work is really good. The story line and the writing seem to be wonderful. You have my attention and interest. Keep up the great work! Thank You, Cynbad146
| Reviewed By: naughty angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2005 15:11 EST
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Once again I have to say I am completly in love with your story. And the whole "Kagome is My Bitch." is classic. Keep up the great work and update soon.
| Title: Waiting for the Next Chapter!
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 14:36 EST
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Hard to believe I finally make it to your last posted chapter of this epic! I'm glad to see that Inuyasha is owning up to his mistake by rebuilding the village, and I espeically liked the image of the little girl hugging his knees. Inuyasha has a long way to go before the villagers can fully accept him again and I'm glad that you decided to focus on that, and especially the fact that their perception of Inuyasha is important to him. "He did, because Inuyasha believed he had earned these people's trust. He had secretly liked it when the children of the village talked about him like he was this big, powerful demon who would always protect them." I was also interested with what you've done with Naraku and Kikyou, now that she has asked him for the help that he offered, asked him to give her a body that feels. I could feel the sexual tension between them. Naraku must be torn between his own twisted desire for her and his desire to destroy her and Inuyasha at the same time. Let me know if you need help with the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 10:52 EST
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Wow. Again, great descriptions and word usage in your writing. I simply love your style. Now we finally know the WHY and the HOW behind alot of what happened in previous chapters. I must say, I think this would have flowed better if you had written the story in a more chronological time line as opposed to keeping the bit about Naraku a secret for later. I feel that if you had revealed this before hand, you would have had many less upset readers! :) Also, Inuyasha's zombie-like acceptance of Kikyou's orders would have made more sense. Still, I like what you've done, and its still great. I particuarly liked the angst between Naraku and Kikyou and I like the way Naraku turns things around with Kikyou. Now who is not worthy of who? "Are you worthy of a filthy hanyou's love?" Very nice line. I'm eager to see your next chapters, to see how Naraku implements his plan to further destroy all three of them: Kikyou, Inuyasha, and Kagome too. I assume his motivation to do this (other than just being a mean man who gets off on destroying people) is to further corrupt the Shikon? You've really capitalized on Naraku's cold, calculating personality. Great job!
| Reviewed By: Mangomoo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2005 23:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOUR STORY IS SO... WOW! I just discovered it yesterday and I have gone crazy! Four about hours I just read from the first chapter until this last one and this story is so amazing I can't get it out of my head! I kicked people off of the computer to read it, I suddenly recall the story in my head at any point in the day. I'm just... addicted!! You have got some serious talent girl and you *must* post another chapter and soon! This is the best story that I'm reading out there right now and I need more!!! Do your thing an keep writting them fanfics! Your biggest fan, (bigger than a fat pig big) Ren!
| Reviewed By: naughty angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 14:23 EST
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I still love what you're doing. Please update soon.
| Reviewed By: frenchdiamond_1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 08:20 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a great story! The limes are so well done! I really like their first kiss ::did someone turn the heat up?::. I am a huge Inu/Kag fan so when I read what Kikyou was doing to poor Yash, I was horrified. Eventually, I got over it (with counseling) (just kidding, lol). When I read the part about Naraku and the insect bite, I felt much better. Anyways, I think your story rocks and I hope you update soon with good chappies. Later.
| Title: Best Plot Bunny EVAR!
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 15:03 EST
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Congratulations, Jesse, I finally hit your plot bunny. "Perhaps you were hurt...your human side, that is. Perhaps it was wounded...somehow..." Now I see how the mistake with Kikyou ties in, and I commend you for completing such a difficult task, in not only writing that scene, but having as complicated a plot bunny to explain it later on. Its truly original and a great plot device. Now, we just need to work on your confidence, ne? On another note, good work with writing Shippou in the beginning of this chapter, and as always, you write him, Sango, Miroku, and Kirara very well, it feels more like you are watching an episode than reading a work of fiction. Now I just have to wait for the new moon so Inuyasha can finally talk to Kagome about his mistake. Again, good job!
| Title: Flood the Old Hag's hut!
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 10:05 EST
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Ah, another great chapter down. I really like what you've done with Inuyasha's youkai side/split personality. The way he creeps into Inu's mind and makes him doubt himself, makes him crave death and destruction, is purely primal. I like the way his youkai's thought process works. Upon the detection of Miroku, it said: "Male. Human. Not mate. Didn't matter" this seems like the true essence of a youkai. What I didn't understand was his youkai's insistance that if he mated Kagome instead of the hanyou side of him, that Kagome would be honored as the mate of a full youkai. I was under the assumption that any human that mated with a youkai/hanyou was frowned upon? On a lighter note, I like Inuyasha's line to Shippou: Feh. "Youkai don't cry, whelp. Stop that, you'll flood the old hag's hut." and I like Kaede's reaction to Kagome falling on her neck. That is a great running line you have. Of course, your lemon slice at the end of the chapter was awesome. Poor Inu though... Anyway, I'm eager to read the next chapter!
| Title: Sexual Tension Abound!
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2005 12:49 EST
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Sexual Tension, innuendo, and a driving desire for Inuyasha to come to a conclusion about his mistake with Kikyou sum up this chapter. The witty dialogue was great. I especially like Kagome's answer for her hickey, and the following response; "You fell on your neck? Your neck hit a rock?" Indeed, you really captured both Sango and Miroku in this chapter. I'm glad to see that Inuyasha is finally going to seek some answers, even if he has to push Kagome back to her time to do so. Lets just hope he doesn't screw things up.
| Title: Bravo, Bravo!
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2005 12:05 EST
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Jesse, by far, next to your first chapter, this is the best chapter you've written yet. You really make your reader feel Inuyasha and Kagome's feelings: the needing, the longing, the raw emotions. You've kept them so well in character, and I think you're right on that Kagome, though she doesn't know exactly what it is that is bothering Inuyasha, is prepared to forgive him for whatever it is, even if it hurts her. I particuarly liked the corolation you made regarding the fact that Tessaiga is likely only to keep it's seal on Inuyasha's youkai blood only in a case where he is near death, not necessarily when he is in the throes of passion. I also liked this description of how Kagome feels after her kiss with Inuyasha: "And now he seemed so far away...and Kagome felt more empty and alone than she had ever felt in her entire life." Again, awesome job with this chapter. I felt like you could have ended the story right here had you wanted to, and left the reader wondering. Yet, I'm glad you've got more left to read.
| Title: Inu's Inner Youkai
Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2005 09:29 EST
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Very nice. Besides the build up you have in the lemon, I particuarly like Inuyasha's fight with his inner youkai. I like the way he argued within his mind, the way his youkai pointedly called him "hanyou". It really made me think that his split personality he has when he struggles on the verge of transformation could be a fic in and of itself, don't you think? Anyway, I'm anxious to see the coming angst and find out what happens between Kagome and Inuyasha.
| Title: Chapter 7
Reviewed By: xfiledino [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 03:12 EST
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First of all let me say that I love where you are going with this story! I've only made it to Chapter 7, thus far, but don't you worry, I will be keeping up with this one!! I think you've captured exactly what goes on in InuYasha's mind on a daily basis. That guy is so confused that it's not funny. I'm not too sure what else to say besides that I'm stunned. Not to many people can write like this, or have the virtue to put it into words. Keep up the great work! Can't wait to see what happens next!
| Title: great fic
Reviewed By: Miroku_girl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 19:07 EST
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wow. this awsome. how can you posible think that you're not? so what happens next? please update soon!!!
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