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Title: Chapter 31
Reviewed By: Veglma [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2005 20:11 EST
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*Twitch*...Nappa.... I AM GOING TO FREAKING KILL YOU IF I EVER GET MY HAND ON YOU!!!!!! May you rest in... pieces, King Vegeta! Hey... there that phase again.... Interesting. Hm...
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Title: YES
Reviewed By: harmony23 On: April 01, 2005 17:28 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another wonderful chappie.....great writing......i can't wait to read the next one.....update when you can
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Reviewed By: Vegetaslindalou On: March 31, 2005 14:30 EST
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I am so glad you updated. I kept coming back to see if you did. Thanks. now only one little thing... I read it all, could you please update again??? :)
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Title: VenusLegacy
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 14:13 EST
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well one thing i like about alternate universe fics is the originality and the fact that you don't know what to expect. That was some twist you gave to the story i'm still trying to figure out what happened. Is Bulma appearing on Vegetasei a part of the bonding process, which would mean that both vegeta and bulma are both asleep on Earth. And what is the significance of Sonat-sei and the fact that Vegetasei is at the brink of war with them? I'm beginning to think it is a part of the bonding process, since vegeta uttered sonat in his meditative mantra when they were back on Earth. And why is their marking black? Black seems like a sign for something bad, like an ominous warning but what could have gone wrong to cause that mark?
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Title: VenusLegacy
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 14:05 EST
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Chap 8 i'm undecided about the way you've depicted the bond between Bulma and Vegeta for it seems a bit ramdom as if anyone could have walked into Vegeta's room, touched his energy, and become bonded to him. I wonder what would have happened if Dr Briefs or Mrs Briefs did the same thing. It just seems a bit quick that i find myself agreeing with Vegeta when he says: "Vegeta grunted. He didn't like where this was going. They may have been bonded, but a part of him knew that all that was happening was most likely a direct result of the attracting energies between them. If something ever did happen, he wanted it to be out of free will. Not because their bodies, at the moment, were chemically drawn to one another" Has Vegeta also accepted Bulmas energy or is it just Bulma who recieved Vegeta's?
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Title: VenusLegacy
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 12:54 EST
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Chap 8 i'm undecided about the way you've depicted the bond between Bulma and Vegeta for it seems a bit ramdom as if anyone could have walked into Vegeta's room, touched his energy, and become bonded to him. I wonder what would have happened if Dr Briefs or Mrs Briefs did the same thing. It just seems a bit quick that i find myself agreeing with Vegeta when he says: "Vegeta grunted. He didn't like where this was going. They may have been bonded, but a part of him knew that all that was happening was most likely a direct result of the attracting energies between them. If something ever did happen, he wanted it to be out of free will. Not because their bodies, at the moment, were chemically drawn to one another" Has Vegeta also accepted Bulmas energy or is it just Bulma who recieved Vegeta's?
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Title: up to chap 5
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 12:30 EST
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I don't think i will ever tire of a Bulma and Vegeta fic this one is particularly interesting as its an alternate universe. You have built up the similarities in their personalities very well; for instance the almost obsessive workaholic tendencies evident in Vegeta are also prevalent in Bulma. I found it funny the way Vegeta would try to get a rise out of Bulma by leaving muddy tracks in her kitchen or blowing up the house bots. He almost seems like a little child desperately wanting attention, accept he uses extreme measures. I felt that the following sentence poignantly summed up Vegeta's frustration at Goku being a super saiyan: "The power Kakkarot wields yet does not understand" And the last scene in chapter 5 was absolutely beautiful the way you portray Vegeta meditating over the balcony, uttering his dead saiyan language, with the blue light surrounding him creates an intimate setting especially when Bulma enters his room.
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Title: Chapter 30
Reviewed By: Veglma [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 18:11 EST
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*Twitch* Must...not...kill...Nappa....*Twitch* MUST NOT STAB HIM IN THE EYE WITH A SHARP DAGGER!! GR! Hm... I wonder what will happen in the meeting of Father and Son... Well, It will be interesting. Keep up the good work!
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Title: Chapter 29
Reviewed By: Veglma [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2005 17:31 EST
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Hm... So Zarbon know she is Vegeta's mate... and he know what happen to the 'Prophecy' in that dimension. Great... Freiza know... well, somewhat... *Read the dream* Hm... Interesting. Komachi Ayako: ...I agree with Zarbon.
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Reviewed By: Veglma [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 21:40 EST
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Zarbon!? HE IS ON THE SAIYAN SIDE!?!?! Earth.... May thee rest in peace! And what has begun? The Prophecy?
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Title: woohoo!
Reviewed By: blue dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 17:44 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah! I was searching for new fics to read, and my eyes fell on this one. I'm hooked!!!! Can't wait to see if Bulma can make Vegeta remember..... Update please??? ^__^ Great story!!!!!
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Title: Review Response
Reviewed By: Abbi (theblueone) On: March 06, 2005 21:42 EST
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I'm sorry about that. I know that I haven't even had any time to update in the past few months so it doesn't even really apply anymore. Thank you for your honesty. I'll try not to put that in any more of the chapters. :-) Abbi (theblueone)
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Reviewed By: jenbater On: March 06, 2005 19:02 EST
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You know, I really do like this fic, but this: "Please try to remember: YOU + REVIEW = UPDATE. I need feedback people!" doesn't really make me want to review.
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Reviewed By: animesexbabe On: January 10, 2005 22:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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i want more very soon plezzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz....... pleessssssssssssssssssssssss pleezzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz......
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Title: Bwahahahaha
Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2004 23:24 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evil story, I love it! I just wish that I had a freaking clue what was going on! Lol. Anyhow...just wondering why you haven't updated in a couple months. you mentioned school...but with how short your chapters are, surely it doesn't take that long to write it! It would take me like two hours at the max to write them, lol. Oh, and I also noticed that you like, took an almost 2 year break from this story. Either you had SEVERE writer's block or something, lol. Anyway, please please please please please please updated SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON because I really enjoy this story, and I really need to know what happens! I have no clue where you are going with this!!!! UPDATE SOON!!!!!!! Sincerely, Gohan's Onna PS: Check out my stories!
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