| "The Price You Pay" Reviews/Comments [ 187 ] |
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Reviewed By: Moonshine On: December 16, 2002 13:13 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story, can't wait for more. Please update SOON!!! |
Reviewed By: silverwings [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2002 07:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
COME ON! YOU GOTTA UP DATRE!
NOWW!
Please
Dawn |
Reviewed By: Vampkestrel On: December 15, 2002 02:49 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
waiiiiiiii that was excellent please get the next chapter out soon....... ohhhhhhhhhh |
Reviewed By: Susan On: December 13, 2002 11:12 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man that was so sexy. I loved it. Those words at the end, I hope you let us know in the next chap what they mean. Great chap!! |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2002 01:42 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I last read this story in September (when I found it I couldn't stop reading it [it's one of my fav V/B AU's!!] until the "last" chapter... which obviously wasNOT the end) ... so I may not remember everything about this story, but I remember that it had me addicted and wanting more. (btw, I love the pictures you've drawn to accompany this story)
During this chapter, everything was described so well that a reader could almost feel what they were feeling. What I mean is, when they were apart, you felt the tug to get them back together and when they finally touched ... well, at least I found my breath had escaped me.
Um ... I could GUESS what the symbolism of the candles burning out means (I'm not sure if you mentioned that in the previous chapters or not--it's been awhile) ... when the two candles burnt out, it was like the 2separte beings became one(with the ritual and all). And when the final candle burnt out, it was like the one became all and nothing--the full bonding was complete. Uh ... does that make any sense? Anyway, it's what it made me think of. *shrugs*
I admit that after waiting as long as most of us have for an update, I felt like I was left wanting more--yes, the chapter was a little short but I understand. (in order for me EVER to update, I've started ATTEMPTing to write shorter chapters--but in the end it seems like I'm even MORE convinced that it's never right.)
The only thing that REALLY confused me was the Saiyan language at the end. I mean, it sounded like something beautiful and fitting for the situation, but in the same breath I was chastizing myself for not knowing what it meant. (I guess I felt left out)
Well anyway, overall it was a well done chapter and I can't wait for more! (okay, I WILL wait, but I can't say for how long;) if you want to tell everyone the full details of the rituals and don't want to put in the fic, then I'd suggest adding them to the story later--maybe after the story, or something. Or even as another fic. Saiyan Rituals 101. *chuckles* Hell, I'd pay for that class!!! and yeah, if you don't mind telling lowly me only, then send it to me at duonotsuin@yahoo.com . You don't have to, but eitherway I'd LOVE to learn more! ^_^
Happy writing! ^_~ |
Reviewed By: Ifonly On: October 18, 2002 09:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow.
This is a truly amazing fic. Truly.
We must have more. Please. |
Reviewed By: autumn On: October 07, 2002 12:37 EDT
Comment/Review:
That was a great chapter. I love how Bulma is trying so hard to be brave even though I'm sure she's as confused as heck. You have a nice way of writing this couple together without going OOC. It's obvious that from the beginning Vegeta didn't want this but he is accepting his responsibility with grace and compassion. Great job! |
Reviewed By: Veggiesgirl389 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2002 18:54 EDT
Comment/Review:
P.S Plz carry on cuz ur in my favourites!!!! |
Reviewed By: Veggiesgirl389 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2002 18:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought this was soo good!!!! I haven't actually read a story which is actually kept Vegeta and Bulma in character so well and actally had the bond thing going. Well done. Gotta give u 10/10 cuz it was good.Talk 2 me at Cute_angel_389_@hotmail.com |
Reviewed By: Saturn-hime [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2002 17:32 EDT
Comment/Review:
that's it ?!?! can't believe it....*sniff* |
Reviewed By: Shelley On: September 29, 2002 11:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story and creation of feeling and suspense. Love the bonding idea and originality in the Ki's so keep writing ASAP.
I Love it PLEASE finish it soon !!!! |
Reviewed By: Shelley On: September 29, 2002 11:54 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story and creation of feeling and suspense. Love the bonding idea and originality in the Ki's so keep writing ASAP.
I Love it PLEASE finish it soon !!!! |
Reviewed By: aiko On: September 25, 2002 22:11 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue as soon as possible. very creative and intriguing. i luv vegeta and this is so romantic.:) |
Reviewed By: zach On: September 23, 2002 17:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is very creative and good |
Reviewed By: theblueone [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2002 22:03 EDT
Comment/Review:
thanx to those of you who told me about the problem with the listing of the fic. and thanx for the reviews. i didn't realize the problem. i'm glad you like the chapter! sry it came out so late i've been incredibly busy. |
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