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| "In'lar-Anth - Through Darkest Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 142 ] | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] | Reviewed By: Sade Kline On: February 11, 2003 21:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'll give that challenge a shot. I think Rogue did Jeice. But please continue! Just give me a map and I'll meet you at your corners! *begs* I'll even volunteer to clean them up! And if this is just the beginning of the drug, I want to know happens when I am absolutly hooked to the stronger one! >8-> Weeee! Ja! Please, if you need ammo to fight the fat lady, just ask! I don't want anything to impede you on your crusade! | Reviewed By: NightTerrors81 On: February 12, 2003 21:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!!
that pretty much sums it up. This is a most refreshing DBZ fic, a great change from the normal fight, have sex, and bond stuff that is the norm. i have to say this is a one of a kind fiction. i'm really exited to find out what becomes of Gokuu and Bajiita. *_* the only thing that's weird for me is (although it's a logical aspect) that Bajiita doesn't call Gokuu Kakarotto ;_;... lol ^_^ hehe i have seen one fic that was kinda like this one but not really. the only thing they had in common was the go back in time when Bajitta was under Frieza's rule. it might seem like the same kind of concept but it was totally different, and i might add yours far surpassed it in writing quality and your plot is more thought out and organized (like a professional writers). i'm sure your story will be one of the best DBZ fan fics out there when it is completed ^_^;....
I am totally your new biggest fan!!!! | Reviewed By: Tank-girl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2003 11:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is sooooo great ! There's so much emotiom expressed in the story I absolutely adore your stile of writing. What a joy to read ^^ | Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2003 22:34 CST
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*falls outta her chair laughing*
I LOVED that fight between Goku and Vegeta!!! I had to stop every few minutes to remember to breath I was laughing so hard!! This just keeps getting better and better!!
So where's my hot monkey sex? *taps her foot impatiently*
oh, and btw... Im not sure if it's my computer that did it or not.. but at the end of this last chapter, your text went into computer code... *cries*
Please update soon! I'm goin crazy over here!
well.. I was crazy a while ago... BUT THAT'S BESIDES THE POINT!
MORE!
GIMME GIMME GIMME! | Reviewed By: Lully On: February 13, 2003 23:29 CST
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I thought this chapter was absolutely fabulous. Jeice and Zarbon both on the prowl...hehehe...well...that is scary. But the fight made the chapter...meeeeeeeeeeOW!!! So, just when is Goku going to clue into what our pretty boys actually want from he and Vegeta? This is just great. Look forward to more and soon, I hope. | Reviewed By: alfarrar [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2003 23:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
L'orn: "A'nore! A'nore! Did you read this fic yet?"
A'nore: *Puts down extremely interesting (not) thick medical journal she's attempting to study* "If you quit bugging me I will!"
*A'nore quickly reads first 4 chapters, looks at L'oren then reads again, and again and again....*
A'nore: "Oh my... Hey sis, do you know which city Dark Serapha and Rogue's street corners are located?"
L'orn: "No sis, But I sure wish I did. Why?"
A'nore: "They have Vegeta and Goku and are promising at least 6 lemons!!! Plus they even have that yummy bad guy Zarbon hidden there too!"
L'orn: "Zarbon! Zarbon! Zarbon!" *deep breath, must calm down* "Oh I just love Zarbon!"
A'nore: "This would be a good time to brush up on our people skills!"
L'orn: *shaking head confused* "Why?"
A'nore: "It would be a good idea if we attempt to get along with Dark Serapha and Rogue so they'll update and keeping bringing those handsome studmuff...um...I meant hot-blooded Saiyans around."
L'orn: "More Zarbon too?" *drolls all over her laptop's screen wallpaper which is a hunky Zarbie pic* "Okay I'm with you! But then I always go along with anything that you want, to my regret..."
A'nore: "AH Sis, now you know all my ideas are good ones!"
L'orn: "I remember an incident with the dean... and his brand new Ford Expedition...and whip cream...and duck tape... and dog poop...two dead chickens...and the college track team..."
A'nore: "Get expelled once and you never let me live it down!"
L'orn: "Because I got expelled too! Besides there was that one time at band camp..."
A'nore: *finally locating Dark Serapha's and Rogue's street corners* "Sheesh, I didn't know a clarinet would fit up...Just forget it. Besides we're kinda straying away from the point of this review. Remember we're suppose to be reviewing right now." ^Wink__Wink^
L'orn: "Oh Yeah! Please, Pretty, Pretty, Please! More! This is so awesome, I just love this story, I really like the unique style of writing and I really want to read about hot monkey sex, too! So...faster, um yes faster..." *prostrated on ground and begging beneath Rogue's street light, then waves at her twin who is kneeling below Dark Serapha's light* "Your turn."
A'nore: "Um...okay...Dark Serapha?" *points at sis still sprawled beneath Rogue's light and bites her bottom lip* "What she said."
*L'orn jumps up, grabbing her twin's ear and drags her away kicking and screaming. "Always trying to humiliate me" L'orn punches sis in the face then knees her in stomach. "This was your idea!" Before dragging her back over and throwing her down beneath Dark Serapha light.*
A'nore: *blurry pin-filled eyes peer up at Dark Serapha* "Please more..." *then collapses unconcious*
*L'orn pats sis on back then while force feeding her a sensu bean, spies Vegeta hiding behind Rogue and gives chase.........
Vegeta: "Crazy humans...For Kami's sake I'm only anime...ROGUE! If you want me to finish this damn story you'd better stop this crazy...OW!!...bitch...NOW!" | Reviewed By: Naturi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 08:04 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 3 was funny as hell!! I could definitely see Goku fighting for food and Vegeta fighting for dominance!!! I craccked up when I read that part. I LOVE this story, and I was just wondering.....if Veggie-chan and Goku-kun get together, will their lovemaking be as fierce, primal and feral? *shudders erotically* Oh the thought..... *ahem* Please update soon..I likies a lot!!!! | Reviewed By: Xero Sky [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 12:47 CST
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Poor boys... hungry, frustrated, and having to breathe the same atmosphere as Jeice and Zarbon. If I remember right, Vegeta gets to kill both of them in the future; I hope Goku does 'em both sooner than that!
Some nice tension here, with the two creepy guys making Vegeta's skin crawl and Goku's apparent inability to stop making his prince look bad. To be honest, the catfight went on a bit too long and was a bit hard to follow because of the multiple perspectives it was seen from. In general, however, I think you're handling the perspectives well, using Goku to describe unfamiliar things to the reader.
I will admit that I don't read a word of your after-chapter commentary, just because there's so much of it. That doesn't take away from your story, though.
All in all, a very promising fic so far, and I look forward to more!! | Reviewed By: Kikoro On: February 14, 2003 19:17 CST
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*Drools all over keyboard* Oh ya! Gettin to the good stuff. Got to love those half naked Saiya-jins covered in blood and rolling around on the floor. *thinks about the fight scene for a while then snaps back to reality.* Excellent stuff. I will remain on the street corner as one of your loyal readers, ever anticipating more lemony goodness.
I will take a stab at the challenge too, I think Rouge did Jeice mainly cause she has a thing for Goku in the Outro. Taking him into the darkness eh? *torture ensues.* | Reviewed By: Chibi Gemi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 21:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^ (sighs)
THAT...was BEAUTIFUL!!!
Kauri: (pops out of the shadows and stares)...HENTAI!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^ (glomps Dark Serapha) Pretty wings! I wanna role around with Kaky and Jita too! (purrs and nuzzles Dark Serapha's leg)
Hey!! YOUR GOING TO CAUSE MENTAL SCARING! LEAVE THE HOLY AUTHORESS ALONE!! (struggles in the chains) Quick, Yami Gemi, get out here!!
(Chibi form of Gemi pops out of NOW WHERE, only with small black wings) WHAT!?!?! (spots Dark Serapha) 0_0 Angel?? BLACK WINGS!! (glomps D.s.'s other leg)
NO!! Ack, the poor H.A. I'm so sorry! When I get out of these, I'll help....or glomp Rogue so she doesn't feel left out. ^_^
All 3: MORE SOON PLEASE!!!! WE LOVE YOU!!!!
-Later DAyz & tAnx!! ^_^ | Reviewed By: punker182biatch [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2003 17:19 CST
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Hmmm... I'm not sure who's scarier, u two or ur reviewers... *shrugs* Hell, I'm not complaining though! If it turns out chapters like this, the more insanity, the better! ^_^
Evil Jeice, Dodoria, Zarbon, Frieza, and everyone else out to get Vegeta's ass! Goku should've busted Dodoria in the jaw! Grr... evil time restrictions as well... But if it's like Mirai's machine, would it TECHNICALLY screw up Goku's timeline...? *wide grin*
But what I'm wondering is if the food on Frieza's ship is that bad, do Radditz and Nappa have the same eating problem as Vegeta? Or do they just have less sensitive stomachs and tastebuds? Cause they've gotta be almost, if not more than, twice Vegeta's size... Hmmm...
Oh well... my mind's on overdrive right now. Can't wait for the purging chapter and for the lemon meter to go up a few notches ^_^ Happy writing and good luck! | Reviewed By: Lully On: February 07, 2003 18:59 CST
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I just love AU's. I have to admit that I am really curious as to what you two have planned. I like this Vegeta but feel for the Vegeta left in the future. This is definitely a great deal of fun to read. | Reviewed By: kamehameha_roshi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2003 02:54 CST
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Ohh this is a really good fic! I like it! Ive never read one like this before! I hope vegeta somehow remembers goku, although I guess he hasnt really met him yet! Oh well!! Please update soon!!!!!!!!! | Reviewed By: Chibi Gemi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2003 20:29 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!! Chapter great!
Can't wait to see how Raditz takes this. Hehehe...
Kurai: I hope he spaz-ez. (can't spell. -_-;)
Kay, we'll go and wait immpatiently for the next installment of this wonderful epic. GO ROGUE AND DARK SERAPHA, WE LOVE YOU!! ^_^v
-Later DAyz & TAnx!!
Gemi & Kurai | Reviewed By: SaiyanTrombone [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2003 13:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First off: AAAGH!!!! I love that song!!!! ^_^;;; Anyways, it fit very well... Love what you're doing with this. The whole "switching between two POV's" thing makes for an interesting read. Can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter! | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] |
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