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| "In'lar-Anth - Through Darkest Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 142 ] | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] | Reviewed By: Dynishra The Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2003 04:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was great, other than it being evil, sadistic and utterly cruel to the point of...
just plain wrongness... hehe
i loved it absoluely. i believe that has to be the number one most sadistic chapters so far.
made even my skin crawl.
very very nice indeed ^_~
can't wait for more!
~Dynishra the Vampire~ | Reviewed By: Amaris On: June 04, 2003 21:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this story and i usually don't go in for ones that change from person to person! keep it up i would love to read more! | Reviewed By: Squall-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2003 19:14 CDT
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*glances around corner, wary of the croud and watchful eyes*
Hmmm... my, not vain at all are we Dynishra? Very confident, typical vampire.... *chuckles* I think I got a little ahead of mysef though; no threats intended... *smirks* just commenting--creatures such as yourself tend to get on my nerves at times--but you're the Lovelies' customer--not mine. *grins* Thank god.
Though... what could possibly be so horrible with all the other 'customers' lurking about! *laughs* It wouldn't kill you to... 'get your hands dirty' once in a while, now would it? *grins*
Ahhh... anyhow, threats, idle threats... *smirks confidently* I don't need to watch my back... I may not be of this world either but I'm sure you should be more concerned about your back than mine Dynishra... *taps Lionheart strapped to my waist lovingly* *turns away, to walk back to safe 'hiding place', away from the crowds* The only thing I have to worry about is all those people *shudders* I hate large crowds....
*stops and sighs* Anyhow, wonderful chapter as have all your chapters been--I was a little shocked that you finally went back to Goku's real time--I was wondering if you lovelies were ever thinking about that. *smiles* I really wanted to see what was going to happen when Goku woke up, but I suppose I can wait. *winks*
Reading Vegeta's POV was pretty interesting though--i really did like this chapter a lot--it made sense of a lot of things--at least to me--poor Goku...
*starts to walk off* Well anyway, I will be waiting patiently (though patience is certainly not one of my better virtues) for the next arrival of this lovely fic.... Sayonara... for now. | Reviewed By: Dynishra The Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2003 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! Finally!
*glomps story she read over a week ago*
That was a very facinating chapter. heh half way though i thought there might be something with vegeta and gohan, but of course not!
HA! Silly me...
Well your courner isnt half as bad as i thought, plenty of ruffians about!
I already killed two stalkers. Quite tasty they were.
Looking forward to the next tid bit.
chow!
~Dynishra the Vampire~ | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: May 01, 2003 07:39 CDT
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I'm so curious, why he reacts so pissed, when someone wants to talk about sayajin maturity. It has definitely something to do with the things Friza did to him. The time line doesn't change, so what does this mean? I'm a little bit confused, because Goku's interference will change things...or not? Oh, I really have to know. Please don't leave me completely clueless for a long time and update as soon as possible. | Reviewed By: SSJGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2003 13:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, what can I express what thousand others havent said before?
As you may notice, Im from a not english speaking country and so I was a bit afraid to post a comment, because I (still! *damnit*)cant speak or write probably.But after 9 bombastic chapters I just HAD to say at least SOMETHING.
Well, Im totally enthusiastic about it. (is that a sentence? never mind)
I just dont understand why Jeice was stronger than Zarbon at the beginning and that changed later on? Probably I just overread something important or simply mix things up...well, I cant do more than keep on learning. *sniff*
To be honest, I first thought about dedicating a picture about your story, to impress my admiration, but after seeing your own pictures, which I just couldnt match with (especially the coloration), I pushed that thought down.
Well, the only thing I can do, is writing this litle review, just to say: Keep on writing! Where's the next (long?) chapter? and: where are the chips?
How can you write in such a...*searching for words* ...unbelievable, great manner, quality - whatever.Hope u know what I wanted to say with those few lines.
Cya | Reviewed By: Chibi Gemi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2003 17:53 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Weeeeeee!! Jita in a swiming pool!
Kurai: Wet Ouji-sama...
Y.Gemi: (tipsy as Hell w/a video camera) Fun time! Come on Ouji, work wtih me! Woohoo! Shake it!
...-_- I need to put a lock on the Lemon cart...
Kurai: Vejita has a begining bond...hehe...and Trunks is almost as innocent as Kaky-chan...
Poor Jita. Does he not have any rememberance of the things that are taking place in the past?...Or maybe he does remember, just, um...Ow.
Kurai: Aw, poor baby. Well, as always, that was perfect you guys! Gohan was pretty cool too. Update soon please! ^_^
Y.G.: =^_^= More naked Jita!
(hits Y.G. on the head w/a book) That's enough out of you.
Y.G.: x_x
Later DAyz & TAnx!! ^_^
Gemi, Kurai & Yami Gemi | Reviewed By: lahelahe [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2003 04:24 CDT
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Dear Dark Serapha and Rogue
I have been reading it as time has permited and find it very enjoyable. Actually the interplay between the authors characters is highly enjoyable also(and that is because I really enjoy a well crafted converstion.) You are both skilled in drawing the readers into the story and making them invest in the outcome, either of the chapter or the story as a whole. I find that I am eagerly awaiting the next installment, even checking somethimes at work. That is a BIG no-no too. If possible I would like to see the other hidden chapter cause I am dying to see how you handle it.
You two have a good grasp of the post-assault emotional state of the victems. Both short and long-term. I wish more writers would acknowledge that the characters should not bounce back and go on like nothing happened after traumatic events, there will be long term emotional, psychological and physical reactions.
Thank you for this one. Mahalo Nui Loa.
Lahelahe | Reviewed By: Dynishra The Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2003 07:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As always, brilliant ladies.
Although it has taken me some time to review and i must appologise for that. Believe me when i say i read this chapter the moment it was sporned onto mediaminer.
I also must say it has been delightful to talk with you both.
I have given extremely serious thought to you wish for me to come clear of my 'lurking'. Even though my lovely penthouse which it at the peak story of a highrise nearby your lovely corner, i feel inclined to socialise among your lesser clients. And so, i will visit your ... hem... street corner.
*smirks darkly*
Also, i promice on my heart, that none will come to harm. That is harm from me or any other poor fools who think to portray violents upon your victoms.. uh clients.
i will protect them in any fashion i deem nessessary, considering your resident Saiyans seem far more interested in each other.
*smiles with a faint tad of mockery*
On an ending note. Dear Squall, i would never harm the ladies. I may be a vampire, but i have a common sense in not killing these lovely authoresses. How else would i enjoy such brillient fiction and smut as this with out their talented minds.
And tainted souls.
*grins*
You on they other hand, Squall, may do well to watch your back. The shadows have a way of catching their prey. *snickers*
With all that crap out of the way, Darkserapha and Rogue, brillient as always.
I look forward to the next chapter enthusiastically.
I do hope it will be soon. I maybe immortal, but you know they say time waits for no...hmph.. well i suppose i don't need to worry about that. ^^ i'm neather a man or a human.
*beams*
Chow ladies^^
~The Great and Magnificent,
Dynishra The Vampire...~ | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz@hotmail.com On: April 18, 2003 07:37 CDT
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I get the feeling this fucking computer don't want me to review properly...so if it's split in two im sorry. I try it one more time nevertheless...
A utterly desperate reader...and yes, I know I'm pathetic, but I'm totaly addicted to your story and the wonderful style of writing, in which it is kept...maybe it even can help me to improve my own English. My teacher would be very thankful, although I deny I will need some "special" new learned words when it comes up to lemon scenes... | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: April 18, 2003 07:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You two are so mean!!! Real sadists...Hidden charpters...I need them, so please allow me to get access to those charpters. >kissingyourfeet | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: April 18, 2003 07:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You two are so mean!!! Real sadists...Hidden charpters...I need them, so please allow me to get access to those charpters. >kissingyourfeet | Reviewed By: teteiforever2002 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2003 05:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I´ve been sitting for two days on this story and all I can say it`s stunning. I don`t like fics that are to much focused on their pairings instead on going on with the storyline. I´m glad that I finally found one story taht fulfils my wishes!
But I must say the two hidden chapters are quite shocking and perverse. I´ve never expected something like this. I think, however, this is exactly what you two have wanted.
Anyway, I´m going to review every chapter that is coming after chapter 8!!
Tetei | Reviewed By: Squall-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2003 21:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm... ok, where do i start. *blushes* i feel so out of place when i come upon a wonderful abode such as this that has had so many faithful reviewers and they all know one another so well... *looks around at lavish street-corner, lazy customers, two frightened/irritated Saiyajins and Serapha and Rogue nervously and innocently*
aye... i don't have any split personalities or partners in crime or wonderful lovers by my side to lighten things up either... well... not unless you count those troublesome G-boys hiding somewhere in the back of my head....
so, lets just start from the beginning. marvelous! well done! i love it! or what you have done of it so far at least... and i won't even press you for another chapter to be done soon becasue you two--one--two.... *confused* whatever--you're gracious enough to give us happy readers such long (a little drawn-out i'll admit, but thats fine) chapters, that i won't ask. =^_^=
i personally enjoy the parts where Vegy-chan and Goku are... 'romping' around together--or when they're together at all... you make those scenes so exciting and they're so rare and far that the two of them together is made all the better.
which bring to mind another thought: i can see why you had so much fun writing the last chapter 'The Prince's Decision'... it was VERY good! for once it didn't have every form of mass angstyness and mutilation in it like the other chapters. *laughs* Not that i mind, it's just that you two lovelies... do it so well...... almost too well.
Fight scenes are awsome! i could never write something like that without confusing myself, i don't know how you lovelies do it.
oh yeah, by the way... even though its been a while since the second 'hidden chapter' and i don't mind missing Jeice's second punishment... umm if i ask for access to every hidden chapter thus and forward... do i get it?? *hopeful look, grins stupidly like Goku would*
*laughs* nah, i'm just being silly, don't worry about that--i'll just have to learn to keep tabs on you two lovelies more often is all...
oh, you were also asking about why FF.net isn't taking the links you post up? or something like that--well i can give you that answer straigt off--becasue FF.net sucks a big fat one--thats why... *falls out of chair laughing at self* no, i know that's not a good enough excuse, but i've had issues with that horrible place ever since the bastards kicked me off... though, i've noticed that, since moving my home from there to here--there are many differences in the programs running the sites... i'm not a computer wiz but i have a friend that might be able to help. i just know that on FF.net it never took my 'word' documents completely and i had to... 'adjust' every one of my damn fics to fit to the format of the site--it would only take html documents, unlike this place where it takes any type of document and automatically formats it to show up on the posted page the way it supposed to look... *stares* did that make sense? FF.net, despite its popularity and name of being so big and bad and better than everywhere else, can't support a lot of things and i always had trouble when i had minor links connected to my fics anyhow--who knows--the place just sucks in my opinion... but like i said, if you wish mine and my friends advice, i don't mind helping. =^_^=
and... i have to say this... even if she has been lurking around for a while... damn vampires... always doing that, Dynishra is very brave and quite bold to push you two lovelies--or should i say Rogue the way she does... *glares* it irks me when someone does that... *gets possesive* *thinks to self, 'no threats, no inturding on Serapha and Rogue's personal space, the lovelies can take care of themselves...'* but damn it!! Vampire or no... *growls* shit now my true nature is coming out... *glares at nothing* *huffs* ok, I'll be good and leave Miss Vampire alone... for now...
so, yeah, anyway, i wanted to say, that despite Serapha being German, you're doing a damn good job... even if there are a few mistakes, but like you said, try writing a 32 page chapter-fic and not have any mistakes. =^_^= i think you lovelies are doing wonderfully, the only thing i might work on is the drawn out scenes--i don't know how to decribe what i mean, but in some parts, like mainly the Zarbon and Jeice scenes, are really drawn out and perhaps, instead of repeating the same thing over and over only in different words, get to the point a little sooner. but it looks like you're starting to do that anyhow.. the last two chapters were perfect, not too long in some places and just the right amount of time in other--i suppose because Freiza has entered the picture... or more of the plot has awakened--if you did that in every chapter (seeing as how you have 30+ pages to work with in each...=^_~=) the story migh possibly come along 'faster' unless you want to purposefully draw it out and tease us poor reviewers... *faints to ground melodramatically from teasing*
ok, *worried look* i hope i wasn't actually critisising or being rude there... i hate it when people are rude to me or 'talk down to me' i'm not stupid--and neither are you two lovelies--thats obvious to see, i just wanted to help a little if i even did.... =-_-=0
*huff* so... after talking--writing your ear off.. i'll just shut up now... *glances back at other 'customers' sprawled out on corner hopefully* and i don't want to intrude upon anything i'm not welcomed into... *bows smoothly and straitens up, walking off to find a nice perch of my own to wait on* | Reviewed By: Cat On: April 11, 2003 17:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting. You really need to make more fics like this one! | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] |
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