| "Everything Happens For A Reason" Reviews/Comments [ 156 ] |
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: January 25, 2005 14:21 CST
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awesome new chapter... I can't wait for the next chapter... this is a really great story as they all are
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2005 14:16 CST
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oh! OH! OH! I LOOOOVED this chapter. I was all pleased as could be, reading the exchange bwtn Shuma and Yammie that I was (gasp!) almost disappointed when Vegeta showed up in the narrative for a bit! Then the bit with the Kai--I love the divine intervention bit in this story. And your dialogue and playfulness has never been better! oh thanks for it! Reading this was such a bright spot in a long day! d
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Title: chapters 17,18,19
Reviewed By: LS On: December 01, 2004 22:52 CST
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I can't remember if I left a note after I read 'Found Out' or not...I reread it before moving on to the last two posted chapters...and again, my favorite part is when Vegeta notices how Bulma deals w/ her conflicting emotions by 'physical movement' in an intriguingly similar way to his use of training that day. This chapter had several little moments like that...when he catches himself relating to her...like he's already missing her, knowing he will soon depart. I am enjoying chapters 18 & 19 too...in how honest Bulma's reactions are...conceding (in her heart) that Yamcha is right in being pained by her behavior...and how it's loving toward her that he is pained...but still not being able to deny her real feelings for Vegeta as well. (I think my last review here was about the 'Paranormal Gooseberry'-but I called it ch.17...I appreciate your note at the bottom of 'found out', explaining the title. I got the 'paranormal' bit, but this made it more clear ^_~.)
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Reviewed By: catgirl26 (didn't feel like signing in) On: November 29, 2004 22:26 CST
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Oh my...what a twist. I'm sure Bulma will be ecstatic about the gorgeous new sexpot living in Yamcha's apartment...:D Great chapter, though I think Bulma was a little soft on Yamcha...If that was me, there'd have been some serious ass kicking going on!!! *giggle* I think I've been writing Vegeta too much lately...he's starting to rub off on me.
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2004 16:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! That is hilarious!!! Shuma's going to be having one hell of a time on Earth looking like that. I hope Yamcha and Bulma don't get too cozy, because we all know everyone's favorite Saiyajin is going to be coming back. Please hurry with the next chapter; the whole Shuma situation is priceless.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2004 15:01 CST
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I LOVE YOU! That was a satisfying chapter--I was just enjoying the ride, the details, the turns of phrases ("He'd already served one sentence; he didn't want to serve another") and the introspective stuff with little descriptions you're so good at, and then--surprise!--I wasn't expecting a fun plot twist! I love that demon (although I was hoping the midnight blue haired temptress was going to be a little Southern gal named Debbie! :-D) and I love Yammie in this fic. This is an original, and I can't believe I'm actually not caring when the plot veers away from Vegeta for a spell. Your writing is getting crisper but it's the stories that amaze me--does that well ever run dry? This one is turning out to be quite an inventive piece of work. Yey for Yamcha in all this! You're doing the feller right!
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Reviewed By: Tempest/Tempting On: November 25, 2004 10:36 CST
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OMG! That explains everything! You are so good at the relationship junk, the new and the old. I love how you resolve Yamcha's and Bulma's relationship without making him out to be an ass. And now Shuma is a woman. I can see it coming from Bulma's point of view. I almost feel sorry for Yamcha. Almost.
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Title: Everything Happens For A Reason
Reviewed By: mlf On: November 25, 2004 06:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i hope that this story is a long one...and i'm glad that it's a girl..lol yes your very BAD but thats ok..really like how this story is coming out....can't wait to read more..but i really don't want to see bulma so innocent with yamcha..didn't she learn anything from vegeta at lease..update soon...maria
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Reviewed By: VenusLegacy On: November 22, 2004 18:00 CST
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Oh my gosh that chapter was creepy, the fact that yamcha's ghost had free reign in the real world and was colouring the interaction between Bulma and Vegeta with sinister undertones really gripped me. That was soo different it added a kind of chilling excitement to it and makes me wonder how far yamcha will go in his quest to seperate Bulma and Vegeta. I'm also unsure about his sanity but then again love makes you do crazy things. And the fact that Vegeta sensed him damn this is sooo cool
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Title: Chapter 15 Vegetas present
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy On: November 22, 2004 17:24 CST
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OOH I can't wait to see what factor Yamcha is going to play in all this and that demon Shuma is an interesting character i'm not sure if i should trust him i mean he's a demon, but then i guess King Yemma nominated him for the task for a reason so i'm just going to have to see what happens. When Vegeta was meditating on his own i wasn't completely convinced about his conclusion, when he said: 'She was the problem. She was the thing that needed to be eliminated. Without her, there was no problem - there was no additional desire. ' Because Bulma wasn't a problem when he was fighting frieza on Namek and he still wasn't able to become a super saiyan. And although he may have gotten rid of his 'additional DESIRE' it does not change the fact that he still passionately DESIRES to become a super saiyan. Is Vegeta pushing Bulma away in the hope that he will become a super saiyan. If so is he completely disregarding the notion of Compassion being the key? Oh well i'm on to the next chapter
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Title: Chapter 14 Everything happens for a reason
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy On: November 22, 2004 16:49 CST
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I'm liking this story especially the way you've introduced a deal between Bulma, which has Vegeta consciously searching for the key to becoming a super saiyan through Bulma. I was a bit confused about chapter 14, i mean when Bulma and Vegeta were naked on the beach and she strolled up to him grabbing his balls, whilst at the same time telling vegeta she didn't want to sleep with him. Was she trying to convince him to disregard his desire? If this is the case it reminds me of when Goku who in the Anime says becoming a super saiyan arises out of a need not a desire. Its interesting to see if Vegeta realises this as i remember him saying to Bulma in earlier chapters that there is no difference between the two (Desire and Need). If this is the case its a mean way for Vegeta to find the key, by having Bulma present his desire to him on a platter and then having him have to deny it in favour for the greater good. But Vegeta has to learn some way and this is a much more exciting lesson. Speaking of which Vegetas lessons for excitement are brilliant, for when he said he would streak with Bulma i was shocked. I was worried about The Deal Vegeta and Bulma made as Vegetas lessons of Excitement might clash with Bulmas lessons of Compassion due to the fact that they both have different views on each. But it has all worked out well so far. I am definately enjoying this story
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kick ass chapter!! Sorry I haven't been on in awhile, but things were busy. Anyway, I'm so glad you're keeping up with this story and I can't wait to see what happens next!!
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 09:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O.o. Yamcha has some explaining to do. Great chapter, Ember. It may have been hard to write, but it was a pleasure to read.
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Reviewed By: catgirl26 (didn't feel like signing in) On: October 12, 2004 19:49 CDT
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Great chapter, even though I'm sorry to see Vegeta leave! *giggle* I do wonder how this will work out, now that Yamcha's back and my lovely Saiyan Prince will be out of the picture for a while. I'm also getting pretty curious about how Shuma will adjust to Earth. He's starting to grow on me!
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Reviewed By: Kendraless [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2004 06:15 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
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