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| "Coming Clean" Reviews/Comments [ 232 ] | | Pages (16): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 › » ] | Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 01:32 CDT
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these last 2 chapters. were great. i'm beginning to worry about Kurama though. all this sickness can't be good. (duh!) update soon! oh, & btw, glad you got the thing with stealing taken care of.
| Reviewed By: yaoikitten [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 21:04 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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it seems your spell check is turning aganist you... durn spell check.. i knew i never liked that thing ^_^ and YAH HIEI IS GETTING BETTER just wait till he relizes how sick kurama is .. i know that wont be pretty... im waiting for yusuke to figure it out as well...
| Reviewed By: Tetsumi(not logged in) On: April 23, 2005 20:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update soon!
| Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hurray, another chapter! I delighted that Hiei is starting to get better, but I'm not sure how much hope to give that Kurama was able to keep down that glass of milk. At least he'll be with Yusuke and Kuwabara while out, so he should be reasonably safe, yes? As always, the warmth and caring were wonderful. Thank you!
| Reviewed By: sueb262 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:45 CDT
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You are really capturing what it is to have a loved one in this condition, and what one does to compensate. My heart goes out to Kurama, and I dread what lies ahead for him! (oh, and about your spell-checker? i think there's a way to directly edit the word-list so you can remove stuff that's been inadvertently added. following is the "help" that's provided for this. let me know if this doesn't work, and i'll look further: On the Tools menu, click Options, and then click the Spelling & Grammar tab. Click Custom Dictionaries. Select the dictionary you want to edit. Make sure you do not clear its check box. Click Modify. Do one of the following: To add a word, type it in the Word box, and then click Add. To delete a word, select it in the Dictionary box, and then click Delete. To edit a word, delete it, and then add it with the spelling you want.
| Title: Love it!
Reviewed By: SweetMisery1 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:40 CDT
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Glad that you're updating again, I sent an e-mail to whatever admin. @ anime spiral...hope it helped you have a misspelling of a word in this paragraph: Green eyes opened slowly. Kurama had no idea where he was or how he had gotten there. He remembered Hiei smiling in bed. The rest was very fuzzy. Rolling over to look at his lover, Kurama rolled into the coffee table. It took a few moments for the ache of the contact to set in, and a few more moments for the fox to realize he was not in his bed. Blearily, the kitsune looked around, trying to recognize his surroundings. Finally he realized that he was on the floor of his living room. Slowly the events leading up to his collapse came back to him. With a soft groan, he picked himself up off the floor and stumbled to the bedroom door. Hiei was in the bed, still asleep. The evening sun was sinking lower into the horizon. Kurama knew his love xxxxxxxr would be awake very soon, and he dared not leave the fire demon alone right now. Slowly he made his way to the phone to order takeout so they would have something to eat that evening, since he had never made it to the grocery store. the XXXXr i think is supposed to be lover. continue soon, nice chapter
| Reviewed By: Sikandra On: April 23, 2005 16:22 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOOHOO!!! YOU'RE BAAAAAACK! yahoo! *jumps around in circles* great chapter as usual! 26 was great too!!! i love 'em i love 'em i LOVE 'em!!! update this and Bugs soon, yes?!
| Reviewed By: KitsuneSilver [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 14:48 CDT
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That's so peculiar. About the spellchecker, I mean. Anyway, this chapter was so sad I nearly stopped reading. But that didn't seem very reasonable, so then I went back and finished it, and now I'm sad, but in a good mood. If that makes any sense. Which I don't think it does. ^.^
| Title: Candy?
Reviewed By: Hana_Tenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 13:18 CDT
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YOU UPDATED!!!! *does happy dance* So does that mean the problem with that jerk at animespiral has been resolved? Poor Kurama!!! And Hiei!!! Please tell me something GOOD happens soon....I can't stand any more bad news.... Anyhow, great chapter! Update soon, please!
| Reviewed By: raindrops On: April 23, 2005 13:15 CDT
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yea! another chapter!! well, 2 really! so happy! i wish i had the brain power to update my own stories that quickly. can't wait to see what happens next. but poor kurama, can't even imagine what hell he feels. T.T i wanna hug him. ah well. next adventure, the shopping! ^.^
| Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 11:32 CDT
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Yay! Another wonderful chapter as always!! I just wonder if Kurama will be able to make it through all this, ya know, helping Hiei get better and such. I also wonder how long it'll take before Hiei's eye sight comes back.
| Reviewed By: Forbidden kitsune (not logged in) On: April 22, 2005 18:53 CDT
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Yeah horay! you up dated! i love it. though i do believe at the moment you are only letting us readers know how deeply both Hiei and kurama are hurt by the incident. I know that it's curical that we understand that, though i don't think this should be done by just talking. ... Hehe, constructive critisim always sounds so negitve to me. I always like to here good things about my writing. ... So.... Ilove it! it's a wonderful story with a very good plot. I love the way you keep the characters all IN character, though you are still showing a new side to them, espically Hiei, i think you are doing a very good job in showing how he would handle a situation like this. As i said I LOVE IT. please update soon, and if you want, you can e-mail me. I did find one or two little type-o grammer mistakes, though that's nothing to be ashamed of. You should see my writing before i edit it.. i misspell names and once i spelled Kurama, "Kyara" where the hell that came from i don't know. But again Please up date. it's very good and where you stopped is just enough of a cliff hanger to make me want to keep reading, though i'm not going to seriously be hurt if i don't read it within the next min.... but after two i'm gonna keel over and die! Please update. i should stop repeating myself. anyway, very good, and i would absolutely LOVE to see more. ja na Forbidden kitsune
| Reviewed By: Shadow Jaganshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2005 17:50 CDT
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I'm sorry to hear about that loser who stole this story, but I'm glad you got it all worked out. I understand why you got so mad (if anybody stole my work, I wouldn't be surprised it lightning struck them where they stood the second I found out...) Anyways, the point is, I love this story, and your other stories too. ^_^ I can't wait to see what happens to poor little Hiei...
| Reviewed By: yaoikitten [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2005 22:01 CDT
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i write my own stories and i know i would be rather pissed if someone took my work without asking... and this was a wonderful chapter.. kurama keeps getting sick... poor them.. its so sad.. but so delightful at the same time... im so messed up...
| Reviewed By: KitsuneSilver [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2005 20:42 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's so perfectly depressing… I like it very much. I still feel bad for not alerting you when I first saw that other guy post "Coming Clean" at AnimeSpiral or wherever it was…and I know you'll probably tell me to shut up and go away, but lemme know if there's anything I can do to make it up to you. Write a story or draw a picture or shut up and go away or something. ^.~
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