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Reviewed By: Lady_Minokee [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2012 22:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
was a great story and am sad that the story was lost but i am glad that i got the note explaining why it was not going to be continued... i write stories but never post them and i completely understand where you are coming from... i look forward to any new stories i see from you |
Reviewed By: jenjina On: September 09, 2009 10:10 EDT
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I absolutely loved close quarters throughout the years and I couldn't wait for your updates of new chapters. it's sad to hear that it will not be completed, but I'm sure your considerate readers will understand. Thank you for making such a brilliant story and I wish you well in your life!
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Title: goodluck
Reviewed By: dorina On: September 06, 2009 10:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i have always loved your work and i totally understand. i started writing on here back when I first graduated from highschool. i am such a different person today. now i am in my second yr of grad school. but good luck! ur a great writer!
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Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2009 16:28 EDT
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ah man a real shame but I know how it is to be too bust for somethings and what it's like to loose connection to your story. Good luck and i'll just keep it on myllist justin case.
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Reviewed By: Curious if this is heading where I think it is... On: August 13, 2009 02:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 4: Pretty good story so far. It's pretty clear what direction this will be going in. I'm just curious about two things: 1) Exactly how old are the characters (Inuyasha and Kagome; if you abiding by the manga rules, we/I can figure out everyone else's ages by the two of them)? and 2) Is this an 'everyone's human and living in a Americanized "Modern Tokyo"' AU fic? Though Kagome's family seems pretty religious, it's also obvious they don't live in, you know, Tokyo Tokyo. Some of the statements can be interpreted differently. Not to mention a lot of authors have a strange habit of having Koga call Inuyasha by his censored nickname in the anime - "dog boy" or "dog breath". Just wondering...
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Reviewed By: Rissa Myers On: February 01, 2009 00:45 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You love Laurell K. Hamilton too? You are now officially my favorite fanfic writer. Have you read her Anita Blake books too? By the way I just read the last Merry Gentry book 'Swallowing Darkness' and I was wondering if you know whether or not that's the last book in the series? Here's my email: ryssaangel@aol.com Let me know if you do.
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Reviewed By: Ohtatyare [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2009 21:56 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know, we have the same tastes in books. I can't believe you read the Percy Jackson series. I haven't met anyone else who's every heard of it. And I live in San Antonio which is were Rick Riordan lives. (I've met him, he's actually pretty cool in person.) Anways, I've enjoyed the story, which you would finsih it off though.
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Reviewed By: illina On: December 14, 2008 13:08 EST
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this my 1st review 2 an author i'm writing this 2 let u know i lvu ur story a lot but i can't wait anymore so plz update asap
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Reviewed By: KawaiiGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2008 22:47 EDT
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Question: How does anyone know why Sango was out of the office? Kagome was the only one who knew and she wouldn't talk about something so personal. Sango'd been home the entire time and while she probably had to discuss the issue wit her boss, it's against most company policies (and common decency) for their boss to openly discuss possible medical issues with employees equal to or lower than him. Plus, I thought he liked the girls? *confused* Poor Inuyasha. Being that nervous, they probably should have taken the train to the doctor. ...Why don't they take the train? They live in Tokyo. Hmm... Ayame is acting grown. Good. For a filler character, or maybe because of it, I don't think she gets enough credit/good press.
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Reviewed By: KawaiiGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2008 22:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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It's getting better (though the conversation between Inuyasha and Kagome just seemed... wrong). Miscommunication much? And they still haven't talked. *shakes head* Oh yeah... women don't usually get pregnant that close to their periods. Not to mention that even if she had, it's possible to get your period for up to three months into your pregnancy (so they wouldn't be able to tell that way - not I think her period would be regular with how stressed Kagome has been making herself). BUT NyQuil, as well as any other liquid medicine, ceases to work if you drink any liquids within a half hour of taking them. So there's no worry of any adverse effects even IF Kagome's pregnant. And they (well, Sango since I'm sure this Kagome would be horrified at the possibility of someone seeing her buying a pregnancy test; especially with the reporters around) really should have bought a few pregnancy tests (always more than one) since they are/were so worried. But whatever. *shrugs*
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Reviewed By: KawaiiGirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2008 19:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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This story is interesting. The relationship between Kagome and Inuyasha seems strange though. It's progressing rather quickly, considering your obvious conservative views on relationships in general. Your personal views also seem to be leaking into the story (and by 'leaking', I mean they're extremely prevalent. (i.e. the mention of Kagome and Sango attending a college in modern times where 1) safe-sex practices are neither practiced nor, apparently known and 2) women drop out of college after getting pregnant. That only 'has to' happen in high school)). Kagome's own condemnation of herself is, while possible, seem highly unlikely since she hadn't hesitated at all before and/or during the act. Makes her seem little bi-polar. ._.;;;;; Not to mention they didn't even think to use condoms. Blah... But I'm rambling. *rereads* Hope that doesn't sound bad... Other the the obvious lack of research/knowledge on the topic at hand, this is a pretty good story.
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Reviewed By: Lori On: August 12, 2008 21:54 EDT
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This is a really nice story.. but i would like to point out that if she had unprotected sex a few days before her period the chances of her being pregnant is really low. Most women are only fertile 14 days after the period has started, and it only lasts for 24 hours.
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Title: 1love1
Reviewed By: Hi On: July 24, 2008 01:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATE AGIAN SOON!!!!!! (2 lazy 2 login)
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Title: 1love1
Reviewed By: Hi On: July 24, 2008 01:07 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATE AGIAN SOON!!!!!! (2 lazy 2 login)
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Title: WOOHOOO
Reviewed By: shikiori [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2008 18:52 EDT
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You wrote again!!! YAY! I can't blame you for not writing with Breaking Dawn and all!
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