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| "The Prophecy" Reviews/Comments [ 244 ] | | Pages (17): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 › » ] | Reviewed By: loke On: March 10, 2006 00:19 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a interesting chapter, but I have to agree with Inuyasha's human side. In the previous chapter Sesshoumaru's attitude towards Inuyasha was a little arrogant. I can understand the submission, but Inuyasha has to be stronger than that right? Sesshoumaru's behaviour is just wrong. No respect, when I read stories like this, I feel for Inuyasha. He has his own mind, yet people underestimate him, it's always Sesshoumaru's way or no way. Sometimes Sesshoumaru has to learn that he can have everything he wants. Don't get me wrong, I love your story, but Sesshoumaru is an ass. Sorry about the language, but it's true. For once, I would like to see Inuyasha strong and in control of his destiny. This is a general opinion, not focused specifically on this story. I like the reason you gave for Inuyasha's role in their mating, about how he is able to bear young. But Sesshoumaru sometimes gets overbearing with his arrogance and insults. When I read your story, I get this particular scences in my head where Inuyasha was able to actually escape and raise the child himself. I know crazy. Sorry...I'm going over the top here. All I wanted to do was review...Great story. I can't wait to read more. If I pissed you off! Sorry :) If you think I'm wrong or out of line, feel free to comment. *Not being sarcastic* sessephinucloud@yahoo.com Loke
| Reviewed By: Gouka85 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2006 19:26 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought it was really good for some reason it made me guess alot on what was going to happen or what some of the stuff you talked about like the marks, if that makes any sense to you, but yea it was really good I like the fact that you still gave Sesshoumaru his normal additude and Inu a little submissive to him. Excellent story hope you can write more though. :3
| Title: What's In a Mark
Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2006 11:23 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry it took so long to review. Haven't been able to organize my thoughts. So, Sesshoumaru was eager to learn about marking. That was cute. Hm, it sounds like Sesshoumaru has doubts about keeping Inu unless Inu is pregnant. Of course, his youkai fights it. And, he's not sure that Inu didn't feel trapped into the mating. So many doubts. Atleast, Sesshoumaru's curiosity about the mark seems to be out-weighing his anger over the insult that he feels that he has been dealt. I feel sorry for Inu because he knows that Sesshoumaru would track him if he left. Sesshoumaru seems to have accepted their mating fairly well. I'm surprised about that. I feel sorry for Inu in that he knows that Sesshoumaru would have no problem tracking him if he left. Or maybe not now that they have taken the second step? Hm, wonder why Inu didn't fight Sess about leaving. And what is he curious about? I can see Inu now when Sesshoumaru tries to 'train' him. If he's not submissive, he will fight tooth and nail. I just keep waiting for him to start pitching a fit. So far, he's remained surprisingly submissive and I'm sure that it could continue indefinitely. I really was surprised when Sesshoumaru said that the palace was Inu's home, and somewhat relieved. I'm babbling now. Great chapter. Snow
| Reviewed By: fib On: March 02, 2006 19:19 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm enjoying this fic so much... it's well-written, well-paced, and a joy to read!
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2006 07:39 PST
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Had to read it again, just like I have every chapter. It will be interesting to see Sesshoumaru's reaction once he actually sees the tree mating mark for himself. It does sound beautiful if it shimmers like you say. I want to know what the colors are and such. Email me and I'll ask the questions that may help you describe what Sesshoumaru sees. (I saw your note about having difficulty describing it.) Wonderful chappie. Snowfall
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2006 07:20 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As always, well written. So, little Inu really did do some seducing. I love the submissiveness, but I guess that is about over. The mark on Inu's back sounds beautiful and poor Sess got stuck with a tree. Ooooh, bet he's pissed. Uh Oh, Inu thinks that he is going home and Sess has other plans. I wonder how this one is going to work out....On another note, when I first started writing lemons, I would blush and had a difficult time with putting in detail. Well, a hentai friend of mine and time has broken me of my bashfulness. I would like to see more details to your lemons. I know that it is time consuming and perhaps something that you don't want to do for one reason or another. Just thought I'd let you know though. You would do a good job, I'm certain. Love the marks and interaction at the spring.
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2006 06:19 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The most important question I have is: Are you ending the fic soon? I ask because there are endless possibilities for obstacles. On with the review. I like how you surprised Sesshoumaru with the strength of Inuyasha's youki. Sesshoumaru's youki being pissed at not being allowed to sleep with Inuyasha was funny. Wow, he let Inuyasha sleep for several hours. It must've taken a lot of strength to stay away. Looking into Inuyasha's eyes being the point of no return was a very nice touch. It was so sweet that Sesshoumaru spoke to him nicely. Inuyasha is being so submissive! I can't wait to read it from his point of view and to see if he really is attempting to seduce Sesshoumaru or if it is instinctual, or maybe a bit of both. Hehe, Sesshoumaru doesn't share. Oh yeah. I like that! Having them both in a dazed trance-like state was great. I do have one nitpick. We read what Sesshoumaru was doing to Inuyasha, but little about how it physically felt to him. You may have left that out on purpose though. I hope you don't leave it out on Inuyasha's POV. Aside from that, the lemon was great. I especially liked Inuyasha's skin deepening its flush. It was amusing when Sesshoumaru re-thought his intent to change positions. Ooooh, (shivers) the marking was so violent. I hope it doesn't hurt Inuyasha too much in his weakened state. Now, for the questions. Will their youki settle down now? Will Sesshoumaru reject, or appear to reject Inuyasha? If so, what will Inuyasha do? Oh, somehow I missed how it is that Sesshoumaru finally decided to accept Inuyasha in the first place. Maybe you left that out on purpose. Inuyasha had some really good questions about Sesshoumaru's motives. Anywho, great chapter. Love ya, Snowfall
| Reviewed By: White Luna [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2006 01:44 PST
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I was never too huge on yaoi, but this is brillant. Keep up the amazing work... you're extremely talented.
| Reviewed By: Kome [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2006 23:35 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^-^ well that made my day! Great update and lemon.
| Title: prophecy
Reviewed By: DRU On: February 18, 2006 03:01 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update soon
| Reviewed By: Kome [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2006 22:15 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
>< you can't leave it like that!!! now its going to be bothering me untill you update! geh!! I hate cliffies!!!
| Reviewed By: Kitty Neeka [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2006 19:33 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! I can't belive you left off like that! So evil! PLease update soon I love this story!
| Reviewed By: Oh Yeah On: February 17, 2006 19:28 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I almost forgot. Inuyasha's daze is too cute, sweet, funny, romantic. I do feel sorry for him because he doesn't seem to have any control over himself. I'd be afraid if it were me, but maybe he's too overwhelmed with hormones. I can't wait to see where you are taking this. Snowfall
| Reviewed By: Oh Yeah On: February 17, 2006 19:24 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have been waiting impatiently. And you leave it there!? You bitch! Your rendition of Rin was too cute. What a place to start out too. Sesshoumaru's home? His room? His futon!? Has Sesshoumaru finally given in to Inuyasha? Or is he giving in to his promise to his mother? How far does he intend to take this? Ach! You've left so many questions! I sure hope you have the next chappie up soon. Love ya, Snowfall
| Reviewed By: Won't let me On: February 14, 2006 05:19 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sesshoumaru's thoughts were rather amusing. 'Marking' itself has been around for a long time along with the blood extending the life of a human mate. I had no idea that this was already being done when I wrote a fic back in 2004. And I was rather proud of myself to. Just goes to show. Oh well, I think that some things are inherently plausible and many can come up with the same ideas. Whoever started the whole marking mythology should be proud that it has went so far. However, yours have different levels. I like the levels and the fact that Sesshoumaru is so dead set against doing the last two and most definitely not the fourth. LOL His attitude is so funny. Although I can see it. I feel so sorry for Inuyasha. He's trying so hard and now he truly believes that he's not the one. I wonder where he will go from here, psychologically, physically, etc. Does he want to be with someone who doesn't want to really be his mate? I wouldn't. Screw that person. Of course, he's went through this earlier and almost got mated without his permission, but now he feels as though someone has confirmed that fact. I certainly wouldn't want to be in his shoes. You have something planned. I can tell. Sneaky wench. Can't wait to find out what it is. Snowfall
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