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| "The Demons Within Us" Reviews/Comments [ 663 ] | | Pages (45): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: IotaTheSweetI On: October 18, 2009 04:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to let you know that Im very proud of you for staying strong through all the hardships you have had over the years. Plus I wanted to add that no matter what the critiques say, I absolutely love your story, the originality, the crisis, the overcomming, what not, has what any story has and more, so excuse my french, but fuck them. :} Wishing Alex a happy birthday and stay strong, hope everything turns out better for you sooner than later.
| Reviewed By: Meru [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2009 02:58 EDT
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I agree with inulover, switching POV works in this story and I love Inu in this one even if he is an ass. (Although hes usually an ass LOL) Critique is good, it helps you a lot. But don't let them tear your stuff apart and change it completely..... ._. Also, I'm sorry about your miscarriages. The hospital should have checked you out after the first one at least, to save you from experiencing it again.... On another note, Happy early Birthday to Alex! He must be getting big, I saw Emma once sometime in the summer and she was HUGE compared to the last time I saw her. (Family issues which led to Emma's mother taking her out to live in Truro and have as little to do with us as possible, its sad, I miss Emma D8 ) Take your time, write when you feel like it, not because there might be people online nagging you for new chapters. I enjoy them, but as always, real life is more important.
| Reviewed By: Black Angel Reaper [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2009 02:56 EDT
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I'm sorry to hear that you had another miscarriage, it must be a terrible feeling. But please wish Alex a Happy Birthday for me! Take your time writing, readers will understand that sometimes real life can get extremely hectic. In the meantime, we'll wait patiently until the next chapter comes out...
| Title: Can't Wait!
Reviewed By: inulover [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2009 02:40 EDT
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I just want to say I love this fic. I'm in a creative writing class here at college and we were just talking about how switching POV is like "breaking a contract with your readers" but in some cases it works and this is one of them. And I love your hero even if he is a jerk. I think it's the mark of a good story when you can love the bad guy and you've got that going here. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to read another chapter.
| Reviewed By: Nekoreibaka-not sgined in On: October 18, 2009 02:36 EDT
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First off, I'd like to give my praises to you for holding in there, givin all your trials. Second off, Happy birthday to the little one. What a trooper! Third, you've got amazing talent. I think that you've got many readers to prove that we don't mind the fact that you've got "two prespectives". You've got so many supporters here that when I first read your blip about the professional critiques, I wanted to say eff em. You're writing is loved here and we obviously enjoy reading and letting you know how much we love it, your style is amazing. (I did an arm pump with a loud yes, when I saw there was something from you in my email imbox) So please, take the time you need, enjoy your life, and stay strong with your ideas and path. We can wait patiently for the next email with any update, weather a note from you or a new chapter :) Take care.
| Reviewed By: bKatty On: October 18, 2009 00:05 EDT
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Okay, as far as all these dicks on the internet belittling your writing... tell them to shove it. Your main character being an asshole is what keeps us all reading! Your peeling back layers and showing his depth! Stay strong and god bless your family.
| Title: Hugz you!
Reviewed By: Jessie Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2009 23:37 EDT
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Its always nice to hear of an update from you. Many times I thought about emailing you to see how you and your family were doing. But then tragedy struck me straight on the chest and I sorta forgot there was another world other than my own. In short, I was diagnosed with cervical cancer, had a few surgeries (hardest blow was that I am not able to have any more children), went through radiation and going thru chemo now (got to do six months worth). And just today, I found a lump in my breast and freaked myself out. Anyway, needless to say I haven't been too inclined to write, but everyone insists that I should. It would be therapeutic. I'm thinking I'm gonna give it a try again. Well. Many prayers for you!!!
| Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2009 23:30 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"no one will like my hero bc he is an asshole." Ummmmm...whoever told you all this can shove it. I think I love your hero more BECAUSE he is an asshole. Glad you realized its the story-telling that counts and Happy Birthday to your son! Alex's story was one that really moved me so hearing that the little guy is pulling through is really awesome. I hope everything turns out okay in Dec. P.S: You sound like a fantastic mommy and you ARE an amazing writer. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise ;) ~Amber
| Reviewed By: Jewelbrat2 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2009 20:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story. Please don't tell me you're taking a long break from it. If it's something at home, please just write us a note explaining. We all worry that something might have happened. k? Take care of yourself. Jewel :)
| Reviewed By: inu - baby [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2009 04:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love the story! Its so close to being done and I just can't wait! Please update soon!! Your loyal fan...for who knows how long Tawainai AKA inu - baby
| Reviewed By: silverwolf halfbeast [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2009 06:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok first, I just have to say that this chapter was and will always be THE hottest, most emotion, and just want to make ANYONE say "damn" repeatedly ever... I mean the story between the two and how the both of them just open up like that is just a big releaf. And the love they just had? Wow... just wow. Can make anyone smile, and a bit gitty (squels like a high school girl). (clears throat) Anyways, I'm sorry for the lost of your "almost to be" baby, and maybe theres just nothing really wrong with you. I think these types of things happen for some reason but not so sure what. But Im happy that you're still writting and doing a bit well, plus you're making a goal for yourself now. Hell by reading this chapter gives me a refreshing mind and makes me want to do what I love to do again. But anyways, I hope you update and to keep up the good work. Peace.... (didn't want to keep talking on and on) (grins)
| Title: ASTOUNDING!
Reviewed By: animecraz92 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2009 13:19 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Once again u've created another perfect chp to your story. not to mention that its the chp almost everybody's been waitin for. they're finally together. bound by their love and need for each other. the feelings a person gets from this work can be described as almost if not ampathic. it comes to life as though it was told by the people who were in that situation. as if they were tellin their stories for all to hear, to enjoy, and to learn. you set kags beliefs as not really a person of supreme being, but as one who hold the utmost respect and love from a person. somebody who can understand and be beloved without being impossible to touch, to hold, to reach. i marvel at your skills of writing and tell you to persue that authors dream. there are millions of stories out there being told. and its sad most of them are just that. very few have meaning. your story has moral. it tells us to believe in those who dont bvelieve in themselves. it can save a heart. as for your personal life.....my condolences. my sister had a miscarage and its not easy to deal wit. take time to cherish wat you have. but dont give up on more to come. as for adopting. there are in abundance of those who needs a better home and even more whose never had one. dilegents and patience is whats needed if you adopt. which you seem to have a lot of. bless you and your family cause there are not many people like you with kind hearts. my love to you and your family. lookin foward to your next update.
| Reviewed By: clavira89 On: July 01, 2009 07:44 EDT
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well, i found your fic over the IYfanguild and i have to admit that i was a bit... sceptic when you started mentioning religion. i don't really like it when religious people (as in: christians or something like that) try to convince others that "their" belief is the "best" or something along those lines, but after reading on i find myself agreeing with kagome/you. the way kagome describes her belief is convincing and it fits with the story - she does have an inhuman amount of patience, i'd have broken Inuyashas nose a couple of times already for sure ;) anyhooo. i like the story. sometimes i think it's a bit funny that a lot of fanfiction writers still use the characters of an anime or manga to write a story that has nothing or very little in common with the original plot. if you had named the main characters sam and jake instead of kagome and inuyasha it would be a very good piece of original fiction, instead of being a very good piece of fanfiction. also the names kind of give a bit of the plot away - for example the connection between kohaku and sango was given away due to their names, so it was actually not a big surprise for me when he turned out to be her lost brother. i think you should definitely give writing a serious shot. you have a great imagination, the plot is well set up and it's really nice to read a ff without constantly stumbling over grammar and spelling errors... update soon pls :)
| Title: RAWR!!!
Reviewed By: BrOkEnCyDe-GrRL27 On: June 07, 2009 17:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
forgotz to put story hehe...
| Title: RAWR!!!
Reviewed By: BrOkEnCyDe-GrRL27 On: June 07, 2009 17:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue. itz an awesome and i wanna badly see what happens at the end =^,..,^=
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