| "Feeding Genius" Reviews/Comments [ 188 ] |
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe On: September 29, 2003 08:54 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What an emotional chapter! Poor Bulma... I can imagine how she feels... how many times have we all let our stupid pride drive us instead of following our hearts? I can't wait 'til the next update...
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Title: chapter 17
Reviewed By: Library Surfer On: September 27, 2003 01:58 EDT
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,^^ (I think I'm gonna cry too...I had better go get a hug) 'Intense'...I like the way her dazed state comes across...it's easy to get a sense of her disorientation...It's interesting how she sees her own hand in this development, yet she still emotionally seeks to blame Vegeta...pretty realistic. I like that she admits to herself exactly what she has been up to...and that she knows what matters most to her. {nice use of the title in the text...it really works ^_^...Everything up to this point has brought her to this realisation}...I look forward to finding out how they proceed from here.
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Reviewed By: Vejitalover [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2003 04:38 EDT
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Excellent chapter. Poor Bulma is really suffering. Hindsight is 20/20 and now she sees how important her family is to her. Please hurry with the next chapter.
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Title: Chapter 17
Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2003 21:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bulma is certainly a very complex woman, perhaps that's what attracted Vegeta to her... I must say that I was hoping to hear from Trunks perpective. However, I was not disappointed!!! I don't know how many ways I can say that your work is enlightening, enteraining, and gives pause for thoughts... I image it would be terrifying to be in Bulma's shoes...waiting and not knowing what's happened to her son and husband. Her thought's and emotions let me see a different side to Bulma. I'm glad she doesn't completely blame Vegeta, after all she knew when they got together that his past might come back and bite her in the ass... I gave her a "that's a girl" when she decided her family was more important then her *pride* and her business. Let's just hope she not to late to get back what she has lost!!! And Vegeta!!! Oh my!!! He's hurt worst than I thought...might end up with brain damage. This could open unforetold possiblities. I'm very anxious to see where you take it..*smiles* Waiting.................................................................... ........................................................................... .........................................................................
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Reviewed By: Princess Gail On: September 06, 2003 00:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What a great chapter. I'm glad Vegeta saved Bulma. Now he has to rescue Trunks. Can't wait for the next exciting chapter. |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2003 07:26 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank God I could finally ger onto MMO and read and review this thing! Great chapter, as usual! |
Reviewed By: mischief maker [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2003 10:22 EDT
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OH crap! Vegeta got his butt kicked. Noooo! What's he going to do now?? And what will happen to Trunks?? |
Reviewed By: NBSVEGE On: September 02, 2003 07:19 EDT
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Farlo... no WAIT I'll call him Fucker since thats what he is a FUCKER!! HOW THE FUCK DARE UUU CHoke my baby. Oh vegeta What the fuck is going to happen now!! OH kill me GOD! EMBER PLEASE UPDATE@@@@@!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM DYING ALREADY!!!!!!!!!!!!
LATER! |
Reviewed By: dragonzmoon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2003 23:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHY.. WHY DID YOU END IT THERE!!!! Ahhhhhh!! UPDATE FAST!! Please.. I must read more of this wonderfully written epic! Your beautiful play on words... what ARE you doing writing fanfiction! Get out there and get published gurl!!! YOU GO.. THIS ROCKS!! |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2003 14:28 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Another fabulous chapter! But waht about Trunks??? I need to know what happens!!! |
Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2003 08:20 EDT
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Oh my...what's wrong with Bulma?
Vegeta's Blame...no way!!!
*If not for Vegeta*, Bulma would have die when the Androids came...*if not for Vegeta*, Trunks would not have been born...Goku would have died from the heart virus and the Earth would have been destroyed!!! Don't get me wrong I know Vegeta was an *evil* creature...a product of his enslaved and tortured childhood, but once he was free, he had a choice and he chose not to *kill*...he had a chance at a new life, he could have gone back into space...back to the life he had known. He couldn't...a bluehaired onna had reached past his barriers, the pain and the hate... to the man beneath and touched his soul!!! Bulma was his salavation as he was hers... *nods heas*...Yes I know being associating with Vegeta is a very dangerous thing, he has a lot of enemies and he thinks about these things, but he can't live his life alone...so I guess he's just going to have to protect her.
Sorry...don't know what came over me...these were just my thoughts as I read this chapter...
I am wondering...what *is* wrong with Bulma??? Well she be happy to see Vegeta when she comes to??? Will she regain conciousness???
Waiting.............................................................................................................................................................................................. |
Reviewed By: LS On: August 02, 2003 03:25 EDT
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My favorite part is when he can see the sunlight reflecting in her tears {gorgeous visual}...and I love when she is rubbing her thumb back & forth as her palm lays flat on his stomach...and the way he senses the 'electricity' between them...affecting him, coming from her...These details make this chapter so beautiful hmmm...You do such a nice job conveying his inner-reactions to her...[all the little signs that he is in love...and how those distinct indications frustrate him...hehe...so cute ^_^]I look forward to finding out what happens next. |
Reviewed By: mischief maker On: July 31, 2003 09:50 EDT
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I think this is my favorite chapter so far! I loved the flashback. Great job! |
Reviewed By: jess On: July 31, 2003 00:14 EDT
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OH MY well she'll wake up and then what... some v/b moments...hee hee |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2003 19:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! That was intense! Vegeta is a little guilt-ridden, huh? Well, we tend to reap what we sow...
Another great chapter! |
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