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Reviewed By: Kruanga108 (not logged in) On: January 17, 2005 23:39 CST
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another great chapter. it's pretty amazing to me that Kurama can still hide his full emotions from the rest of the team when he's really torn up about this. and about Hiei, one word...ouch. using a sutra? now that's just wrong! since you're going to be spell/grammar checking, i'll wait a while, but please try to update soon. new chapters are a must!
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 19:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you for updating so quickly, although we're still left with a cliffhanger! Just like Kurama, not to show the full extent of his pain, not knowing what inadvertant effect that might have on Hiei. Poor Hiei, and now Kurama will somehow be informed of what is happening to him? Always good to go back and polish a story, but selfishly I hope you will add more chapters soon.
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Reviewed By: Tetsumi(not logged in) On: January 17, 2005 18:43 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great update soon!
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Reviewed By: SweetMisery1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 16:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue. my only constructive critisms is that 1. occasionally you write a paragraph about some one, and then then do something else, and when you go to some one else, they are reacting on the first action ex:Kurama gets off the bed and walks out the door. when you go back to Hiei, he is seeing Kurama getting off the bed. 2. you should mark scene changes i hate to critsize, but i think it will improve your writing. SM ps. i hope this didn't sound like a flame
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Reviewed By: Dark ice13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 10:49 CST
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Well since my they won't take my login I shall hurt them(Not really I mean how can I?) That was so awsome It was Gerr-ate!Update soon Please!
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 09:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another terrific chapter! For a moment, Hiei seemed almost too domestic, but I loved the bored Hiei getting a writ from Koenma, cleaning the apartment spotless in 15 minutes, and in desparation turning to a cooking show. I suspect for the health of their long term relationship, some additional accomodations are going to need to be made. I particularly love the darker side now coming back into the story. Very nice touches with Yusuke, Keiko and Kuwabara. I certainly did not anticipate Hiei being taken! Whatever will Intaro do to him, and what will Kurama do?! Please, please come back soon.
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Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 00:32 CST
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wow. this is a really good story you've got here. i wasn't expecting to stay up this late (it's 12:30 am) but as soon as i started reading this i couldn't stop. the beginning was great what with the demons after Kurama and all and Shiori finally hearing the truth. i'm even accepting Hiei & Kurama's relationship in this story b/c it's so kawaii how Hiei acts around him & Shiori. it works really well. and now this Intaro guy has captured Hiei...this just keeps getting better. keep it up! update soon! oh, & just an observation, Kurama is an emotional wreck in here. :)
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Reviewed By: Sikandra On: January 16, 2005 21:56 CST
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OMG U HAVE TO UPDATE SOON!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!
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Reviewed By: dragonfoxloversforever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2005 10:45 CST
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please update today. my bf broke up with me and i need something happy to read
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Reviewed By: Kurama rocks my socks On: January 15, 2005 12:13 CST
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Ok. This fic is AWESOME!! Though, I think that you are a little rough on Kurama, but that's ok. i just love this fic! It's very...dark. And I assure you, dark is good....buwahahaha...haha...ha? But yeah. This rocks. -Heather
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2005 13:11 CST
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You've got to hurry up and finish! You're killing me here! You have got to finish this one and bugs at the same time!! I love all your stories!!! You're my favorite author!! I'm gonna start a fan club for you and I will be your number one fan!!
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Reviewed By: dark ice13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2005 07:37 CST
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YAYYYY!!!!!!I'm so happy you updated!!!!!I love this chapter!!!!It was so sweet and Hiei is so cuddley and sweet and cute too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2005 08:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What wonderful chapters! A very nice lemon, delightful warmth between Kurama, Hiei and Shiori, two wonderful scenes with Yusuke and Kuwabara learning to go against their inclinations for their loves, and the menace that awaits Kurama in particular. I've been eagerly awaiting this chapter, and am not disappointed. Now I'm even more eagerly awaiting the next chapters. I hope you're able to come back soon.
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Reviewed By: Crazy_Clown_Chick On: December 02, 2004 18:58 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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That was an awesome lemon! I can't believe it's your first! Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading some of your other works.
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Reviewed By: Katy123 On: December 01, 2004 17:31 CST
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YES!!! You put a lemon in it! That was great! I loved it. You must write another one soon!! You did a perfect job. Yoru story really helps me stay out of depressed moods so update soon!
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