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| "Commitments Made In Blood" Reviews/Comments [ 424 ] | | Pages (29): [ « ‹ 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 › » ] | Reviewed By: Sesshy81 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 08:35 PST
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I would like to know how you are going to bring in Sesshomaru. He's not the easiest person to get along with. I have not even a single doubt that he'll jump on the bandwagon the moment he hears Naraku is in the modern era. But knowing him, he'll probably hunt down the hanyou in his own way. Now on to the Tetsusaiga. So Sesshomaru doesn't have it. I can only wonder how on earth he'd going to take to Youko taking it. Without a doubt, he'll be furious that Inuyasha would give it to someone not in the family line, it is after all a family heirloom. Regardless of Inu's intention to protect Kagome, Sesshomaru will feel that it should have gone to him. Perhaps you could work it out so that Sesshomaru takes the sword from Kaede before Youko gets there, forcign them to confront Seshomaru in the modern era to get it back. Youko would likely have to prove himself worthy of it, considering Sesshomaru's possessiveness. Even then, I can't see Sesshomau just handing it over, no matter what Inu might say. Hmmm, I feel another dream coming on, though who says Sessho will listen ... Heh, anywho, waiting impatiently for more!! As for why I decided to go indepth wih him ... well ... look at my name, that should explain everything! Bye for now!
| Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 08:31 PST
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*starts murdering word limit* I can't say all I want too in one review! I managed to get -23 before realizing nothing I was typing would appear. Hah, as I was saying, I'm glad... I lost my train of thought... T_T I think the condensed version is that I'm glad you're portraying her family so realistically for people who have been exposed to demons and and don't know their 'pasts'. The way your portraying Kuronue is awesome! Usually he's portrayed as somewhat of a flat character, and I don't just want to glomp him... Who wouldn't want to glomp him? Well, as long as you were not on the recieving end of his wrath and h... what would happen if he walked into public? Without a human disguise? And with Youko, also without a human disguise? *envisions girls and guys swooning, and everyone else running towards or away from them* Heh, I stayed up late writing. And I'm still not finished... 13 written pages, and I've managed to keep them fighting. Though I'm not sure I'm doing it justice actually... in your opinion, do you ever think Youko would fight with his bare hands and feet just because he can? Or would he stick with his plants and fight long-distance? Joy, joy... maybe I should forget Yusuke and just have Youko and Kuronue fight... topless.... under a dimly lit sky with rain beginning to pour down... *drools* Heh, I'll stick with Youko and Yusuke. *is actually targeting friends obsessions and seeing if she can give them a nose-bleed... or make them attempt to steal the story...*
| Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 08:20 PST
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^.^ The perfect way to wake up- a muffin, some milk, and an update from on one of my favorite stories! Ah, I even now feel like forgiving the stupid woodpecker who decided my wall was an oppurtune place to start being an alarm clock. Joy, Joy. Yes, Yes, Kuronue's ou- er, I'll mention that later, as you seem rather distracted by it... I'm glad you adore me! All bow down and revere me. Heh, I re-read the first volume of YuYu Hakusho, and I think that you kept Botan in character for the chapter(s). Opinionated, assuming, scary, and armed with an oar, I felt pity for Kuronue. That works, the rival thing. It was just bothering me 'cause it felt like the person who opened the well for demons was the type who would demand payment or something. I'm glad though! You considering the paradox issues concerning such souls... Hiei gets too stay in the future while Kuronue and Youko are going to the past... where they probably haven't been... O.O What if Youko existed back then? Hm.. I missed something. Yes, I have to agree with you about the M/M pairing, though I don't see some reviwers problems with it. They tryed biting off your head? Over email? That would be messy... Er, I meant, 'that is utterly cruel and unforgivable!'. Yeah, I'm random. Anyways, I like how you have Kagome's family basically feeling right now, as they are resigned that if they try and hope for the new demon to leave, another will appear. They really don't have the best of luck right now, do they? But they are being p | Reviewed By: Sesshy81 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 08:16 PST
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Ignore the pitchforks. I don't like Botan either. And as for killing her off, well, lets just say I'm not opposed to the idea. However I would like to say that I can't see adding Kuronue to the pairing. It seems that, with his personality, he'd be better off laughing at Youko from the outside of the relationship. Just my personal opinion.
| Reviewed By: Shabopo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 01:35 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
[Grin] I have to say this is the first fic I've found where Kagome's mother was so... realistically distrusting of an influx of youkai in her home. Kuronue... what would the chances be that he'd flirt with Kagome just to bug Youko? Though I have to say I thought that eventually the fuzzy ears might win her over, as she glommed onto Inu-Yasha's when she first saw them. [shrug] It was nice to finish a really boring essay on fungus phylogeny and check my e-mail before turning in for the evening, only to find that you've updated! far more interesting than writing about genetic sequencing of Grifola frodonsa I can assure you!
| Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 01:21 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hiei's bad^_^!! LOL!!! Love it!!!!
| Title: KICK ASS KICK ASS KICK ASS!!!!!
Reviewed By: Shadowfoxdemon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 21:30 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i would love it if you could do a Kuronue/kagome/kuramaor Youko relationship and don't worry i have much confidence u that i'm sure you wil be able to figure a way out to make the pairing thats if u do it and if u did i would worship u forever. It was a kick ass story and i love the fact that u brought shippo back to life i mean it just wouldn't be right for him to stay did i mean he's just to kawaii to die not to mention i think kagome needed him. She needs all the support. Woah i'm surprised Koenma didn't freak out at the thought of bringing Kuronue back to life i mean i pictured him freaking out and running around the room like a chicken without a head *wathces as koenma runs around the room headless* thats actually a pretty good idea i'm going to add that into my story..lol. anyways i can't wait for you to update it was an awesome kick ass, breathless chapter and i hope you update....u better update or else *grabs scythe* u won't like the consequesnces....j/p anyways update Ja Mata Airy
| Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 20:03 PST
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Wow... I reached the limit in the last two, and the first two were sorta rushed... 4(if you count this one, 5) reviews... @_@ I'm going to go and start writing that one-shot now... you passed the bug to me. And I can't get them out of my head as well.
| Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 20:00 PST
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*throttles the word limit* Okay! As I was saying, it might work if you make it so Kuronue and Youko had an intimate relationship in the past, that is, if you aren't opposed to Male/Male pairings. But then ou could also have Kuronue be jealous slightly of Kagome, who basically owns Youko's twisted heart. And then you could go on from there and such. That's really the only way I see them getting together, but... *throttles word limit again* It interrupted my brainstorming session... T_T Anyways, that's just an idea. Though I have to agree with some of the other reviewers, who are protesting the need for a love triangle. It just wouldn't work... if you really want to do that one you could do it in a differe- *is hit over the head and stuffed in closet by people who want you to focus your whole attention on this fic* @_@ Arg... I don't think Kuronue(having just been revived) would really care to establish romantic relationships with anybody currently. After all, he was dead, what, yesterday, right? Why doesn't Kuronue stay unattached? He seems enough of a ladies man... how I know that, no idea, I think it just has to do with his wardrobe... that he wouldn't be looking for a... ah, permanent relationship with someone. Who knows? Que Sera Sera... what will be, will be. I've but in my say, so I better stop rambling now. Over-all, these two chapters were wonderful. Even if 28 was a bit rushed. Now how's that for a review? And I reached the limit here to. Can't wait for the next one!
| Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 19:49 PST
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You brought Shippou back! I guess my only concern about that is the fact he is exactly as before. You could have changed him... but I guess this works better and keeps the anger level down. After all, if Shippou was in his 'teens' and still hugging Kagome, I doubt Youko would like that. Kuronue, you should have put his reaction to Youko's death and possesion of an unborn child... Though you probably just wanted to stop typing by then. You were requested to do a love triangle between Kurama/Kagome/Kuronue... As much as I love the idea(who wouldn't), I want to point out you stated that her bond to Youko would hurt her if she became intimate with anyone besides him. So you would have to find a way to overcome that(and as your the author, that isn't that hard) so you could actually do it. Though really, I'm not sure. It just doesn't seem like Youko would be willing to share... at all. And then there's the pressure from Kagome's mom... who is already freaking out about her and Youko. But Youko is sharing with someone already, a part of himself, but still. Shuichi, so would Youko, a kitsune, really want anyone else to take up his mate's time? Though from what I've seen of Kuronue, I can't see him falling in love easily... especially to a human miko he knows belongs to his partner. Overall, the pairing doesn't seem like it would work... but you are the author, so you may find a way. Though I can see it working if you suddenly add that Kuronue and Youko had an intimate relationship i | Title: Chapter 27
Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 19:35 PST
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Reviewing: Chapter 27. heh, Okay, love the fluff! :D I'm reviewing the chapters seperately 'cause I read them out of order. Now... Botan, needs to learn to live.... *is hit by oar for extremely bad joke* Ah, my sense of humor was kicked up... I still find that amusing. Anyways, she needs to live a little, and not rely on the Spirit World gossip system as much. I mean c'mon, Kagome hurting someone who didn't hurt her first is extremely unlikely. Though I'm curious now, who was the person who opened the well to Naraku, his rival? I know that's going to come in somewhere... but where? Or it may not be imminent at all, and I may just be fixed on it or something. Kagome's mom seems a little more tolerant, for the fLuFf. Yes, the wonderful fLuFf. Er, I'm sorta surprised Koenma didn't freak out and panic at the thought of re-introducing Kuronue back into the world. Or back to life. Okay! Read next chapter before I start discussing it here!
| Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 19:21 PST
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*whacks head* Heh... I just skipped a chapter... Heh, I'm going to read it again... but I have too say, Kuronue! YAY!!! I dunno why, but he's one of my favorite characters. Him, Youko, Kagome, Shippou, Sesshoumaru, Kouga, Yusuke, Kurama(human), and Naraku. Ah... I should read chapter 27... But I read your review response(after I realized my mistake) and I gotta say, I am seriously tempted. Seriously. I'll try it, but knowing me, I have no clue how it will turn out...
| Reviewed By: Arbor [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 17:47 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Oh my god, you fiend! We lost power, and I come back to like, six chapters! If I didn't enjoy reading them so much, I would be horribly mad at you. *Shakes fist* But being the wonderful author you are, and being the stalker obsessee fiend that I am, its better to come back to that that less. Even if my brain DID melt. *nods* I'm totally loving this addition of Koronue, and shippou. Haha *demented chuckle* It doesn't look like you're leaning toward shippou being a royal pain in Youko's butt, and I don't think that would even be plausible, the way you do your story, but that doesn't mean I can't be amused by the thought. Or that I can't do that in my own story. ;D Well, anyway, lovely as usual. Few spelling errors, but that is my only crit.
| Title: commitments made in blood
Reviewed By: pheonixfire On: February 24, 2005 16:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story, keep up the good work. Cannot wait for a new chapter. I read someone wanted a kurama/kag/Kuronue. Please do not do that. You stated in previous chapters that kag is faithful and would not want that and it was even stated that youko would not want anybody not even his old partner to touch her. So please keep with the original pairing. Well keep up the good work and thanks for updating so much
| Reviewed By: Person... On: February 24, 2005 16:20 PST
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Hey! Great story so far! It's really interesting especially with Kuronue and Shippo in it now! I would really like to see a Kagome/Kurama/Kuronue, I really like the pairing, and it would be interesting to see... but, either way it's all good... lol, well later! ^-^
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