| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
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Reviewed By: Jess... hmmm.... On: May 14, 2005 02:09 EDT
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well that was good... except you didn't kill Yamacha j/k... well anyway... that was a great chapter... I loved the flashbacks veg had while he was straining to get to the surface. Liked the little moment between Bulma and Yamacha; he'll eventually realize its over for good... Can't wait for the next chapter... ;P...
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Reviewed By: catgirl26 (didn't feel like signing in, Deb!) On: May 12, 2005 19:36 EDT
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Wow, Deb, I wish I hadn't waited so long to get started on your fics! This is phenomenal! I'm really enjoying your Vegeta. He's arrogant and stuffy, but you're doing an excellent job of showing his vulnerable, more confused side, as well as giving us reasons for what he does, without spelling it out too much. Yamcha as the not-quite-villain is also very good. You've shown him as a good, emotional guy who is just having a hard time coming to terms with things. I can't wait to see how the Vegeta/Yamcha confrontation will turn out!
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Title: Hatred
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 00:04 EDT
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OMG - Bulma and Vegeta don't have perfect mind-blowing sex every single time? My vivid imagination was having a hayday with this chapter - poor Bulma's face was turning as blue as her hair before they finally gave up on "water sex!" I love how you keep him off balance just enough. He'll be all macho and rude, but then keeps his flying to a tolerable speed because she asks. Yamcha sweetie, get a clue. Pack your suitcase and move along; it'll save you a few hundred bandaids. ;)
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Reviewed By: EleneK *whatever* On: May 11, 2005 19:34 EDT
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Oh you evil, evil woman leaving it right there. Shame on you!!! I wasn't crazy about Bulma's behavior but I liked the tension between Yamcha and Vegeta.
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Reviewed By: Heiress2thethrone [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 13:34 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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oh the suspense. what could have happened to our dear yamcha! hah! i'd really like to see that guy done in. oh well ill find out next time. but don't keep me waiting to long. i can't bear the suspense. until later.
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 10:52 EDT
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You're an evil little *censor*! You can't play with my emotions like that. But I still love you anyway. Evil! Evil! Ok, that's out of my system. I actually hated Bulma in this chapter: 1) for hurting Yamcha (I think I just felt bad for Yamcha) and 2) for not letting Vegeta have some space (the way she kept trying to keep him to fulfill her needs...she just seemed so selfish in this chapter). I can't believe Yamcha is challenging Vegeta though. I'm horrified at what Vegeta may end up doing. Though I am still curious at what Vegeta came to conclude about the "lube". After the toothpaste explanation, I have a funny idea of what Vegeta thought the lube was for but I could be way off. Keep up the good work...and I know you liked that I called you evil, you know you've done your job.
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Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 04:40 EDT
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I'm so hooked on this story, Debbie. Never, I think, has anyone in the fandom captured the characters so close to how I percieve them. I'm looking forward to seeing how you handle this confrontation.
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Title: *twitch*
Reviewed By: Harmony of Saulsburg On: May 10, 2005 23:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O.o gah~! IT STOPPED! NOOOOOO~! MUIST... have...MORE! please... PLEASE? *dies*
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not signed on) On: May 10, 2005 20:30 EDT
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Aww, poor misguided yamcha...i feel bad about always naming him the bad guy after see so much of his pov :P lolz, we all know what Vegeta's going to win if they really do get out of an all-or-nothing fight. I love it! Keep it ROLLLLLINNNNGGG! and what was Bulma's bleeding? I guess they 'over did it' wahhahaha...ok, i'm out. Great job!
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: May 10, 2005 19:51 EDT
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well I can't wait to see what comes of this... Yamacha and Vegeta... hmmm... Bulma was trying hard, very hard, she just doesn't know when to quit sometimes
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Title: Love it!!!
Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2005 00:00 EDT
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OMG I am loving this story. So well-written. So in-character. And I am just a sucker for those canon 3-year stories, so I'm glad you decided to share your vision with all of us! One thing in particular I like is how Vegeta says next to nothing. Probably closer to the truth though it must be hard to write it that way. I especially liked early-on in the story how he seemed to harp on the same old thing ("Do you want to die in 3 years?" over & over again... LOL!) So like the Vegeta from the anime. So, I just wanted to give you a shout and tell you I love your story and I'm glad I came across it! :)
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: May 09, 2005 11:12 EDT
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That last line was breath taking. Well, Yamcha is starting to connect the dots...it'll be interesting what future confrontations will hold. It's amazing how you capture Vegeta so well yet show a caring side to him. My favorite line was "I'm the dumbest genius ever". LOL. Makes you wonder if all geniuses had a moment like that in their life. As always I'm looking forward to future chapters. I love how the events are playing out and can't wait to see where it'll go from here.
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 18:31 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bwahahaha, you're the fanfiction spotlight author right now, debbie! That's great, you deserve it! Oh yes, and awesome chapter. Update soon!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 15:14 EDT
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excellent chapter. i was really anxious for a moment when yamcha started to talk about his feelings. the way you showed bulma's anxiety was great. i was so disappointed when she went back to her room. i so wanted her and veg to have their fun. when yamcha felt vegeta nearby i was so sure of a confrontation -- nice surprise! but i'm sure glad being with bulma was more important! and what was vegeta feeling when he said he wasn't angry? he was acting pretty pissed. i thought it was just so cool when veg decided to take her out! that really was a surprise. i didn't know if you'd write him doing something like that. really sweet. i'll be patiently waiting for the next chapter. i hope they are able to have their fun and no sudden drowning fits seize our favorite saiya-jin ^_~
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Title: Chapter 8
Reviewed By: Trisha On: May 07, 2005 01:27 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i gave u a ten. i think that speaks for itself
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