| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
| Pages (18): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 › » ] |
Title: amazed
Reviewed By: starbrella (not signed on) On: May 06, 2005 17:46 EDT
Comment/Review:
Another wonderfully breath taking chapter from you. I thought for sure that Vegeta would at least give yamcha a good knock in the face ^_~ o well, i love surprises! YOu're doing wonderful so keep up the great work and update SOON!
|
Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: May 06, 2005 17:08 EDT
Comment/Review:
that was a good chapter... I liked the flow you used ... wonderful job...
|
Title: Consolation
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2005 22:51 EDT
Comment/Review:
See, this is why I just love reading your fics - you put in the neatest details. Who'd have thought about what Vegeta eats and why? (Granted, I don't know if I'll ever be able to eat spaghetti again, thank-you-very-much!) I can't imagine him eating anything other than sandwiches from now on, simply for their efficiency. ;) Poor Yamcha. Bulma - french fries. Nope, I just don't see it. I agree with him on one point though though - I think a swim would be a great idea!
|
Reviewed By: Elenek *too tired to log on* On: May 04, 2005 17:17 EDT
Comment/Review:
ummm. Kinda looks like a recipie for disaster. Sorry but too tired for a better review. must sleep now.
|
Reviewed By: DE On: May 04, 2005 13:56 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
heh heh heh ... the pool ... heh (¬_¬) Not the same pool that Bulma and Vegeta are gonna go umm...sit and talk by right? (¬_¬)v
|
Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: May 04, 2005 12:26 EDT
Comment/Review:
I can't wait to see how this turns out... very good chapter... I loved the thoughts from yamacha and vegeta. Very good I can't wait to see how this pool thing goes... *evil grin*
|
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: May 04, 2005 09:19 EDT
Comment/Review:
I sure hope Yamcha is not going to swim in Bulma's pool (I can see him going there for some reason but he has his own place and go to a gym's pool...but that wouldn't be as exciting now would it *evil smirk*...I've been hanging around PV too much). Great chapter. I love when we go inside everyone's thoughts and feelings. We get a full view of everyone and everything. I don't know if this is an error or just me being picky: "Bulma, where is (the) bot prototype?" You didn't have "the" in there but it seems like it should be. ^_^ Keep up the great writing! *thumbs up*
|
Reviewed By: Trisha On: May 03, 2005 22:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHY? WHY?!! Why is Yamcha so annoying?! Why does he always get in the way? Why cant he just get lost? Shieeeet. Do me a favor and drown him. nah jk. You know what? I do hope he sees them together, then maybe he'll get a freakin' clue and just LEAVE! ugh. Thanks for posting up another great chapter. now the suspense is killin' meeh. You never disappoint me, EVER!
|
Reviewed By: vegges mate On: May 03, 2005 22:48 EDT
Comment/Review:
oh no, you didn't! oh yes, i think you did!!! omg what is going to happen next??? you are so good at this, it should be a sin! is yamcha actually going to see them together...LIKE THAT!!! i'll try to be patient, but i give no guarantees!
|
Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not sighed on) On: May 03, 2005 22:27 EDT
Comment/Review:
Wow, another amazing chapter from you. I still love it! It's good to see Vegeta and yamcha's pov since I wasn't really sure what Yamcha was still thinking after Bulma's broken engagment to him. ^_~ Now i'm really curious to see the next chapter! I wanna know what happens when Yamcha goes there only to find Bulma there too...is she alone or w/ vegeta?! I WANT UPDATEEE!!! Great job so keep it roolllinnnggg~~~
|
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: May 03, 2005 10:10 EDT
Comment/Review:
I loved this chapter. Cute mother-daughter talk. "Your father wouldn't be interested in this"...sounds like my parents (at least in the beginning of my marriage). I like exploring Bulma's uncertainties...it's normal for any woman to go through that so it's understandable that it would be the same for her especially with Vegeta. Oh, and when Mrs. Briefs asked if it was time to visit the Salon, I nearly cracked up. The Salon has totally different meanings to me now. A mistake I believe: "At least building Yamcha's rowing machine didn't require participation with a less than adept user of scotch tape"....use not user. *sticks tongue out*
|
Reviewed By: EleneK * not logged in* On: April 30, 2005 22:17 EDT
Comment/Review:
I really do enjoy seeing Bulma's mother actually play a part in a story.I'm glad you are actually able to make her a "mother" as opposed to a pretty lawn decoration who servs tea. -El-
|
Reviewed By: Free-sprit [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2005 05:55 EDT
Comment/Review:
UUUPDATE! Please?
|
Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2005 00:21 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah, cute. I don't know what made me check my email at 12:00 in the morning, but i did, and it said your story was updated! JOY! Cute little chapter, but I want more, lol. Update soon!
|
Reviewed By: TT On: April 30, 2005 00:20 EDT
Comment/Review:
And Vegeta was so gentle in the last chapter. I even teared up (imagine Mrs Brief with her hanky)
|
| Pages (18): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 › » ] |
