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Reviewed By: Becky-Sue81804 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2005 01:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! That is all I have to say-is wow! I love it so far, I cannot wait for you to update. It is so raw and sensual. I am seriuos, it is kind of kinki- lol! But I really enjoyed reading this story, I started reading at 10 p.m. and now it is 1 a.m. and I am not finihsed with the last chapter and I am begging you to update as soon as possible! ^.^ -BeckySue
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Title: awwwwsommmeee
Reviewed By: starbrella (not signed on) On: June 26, 2005 17:52 EDT
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EKKK, i'm so happy u updated. sorry for the late review but just got back from my trip. I just wanted to say that u did an awesome job on this chapter (again). I'm glad to know what vegeta was thinking when he was in space ^_~ Keep it up and update soon!!!
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Title: Heylo Again!
Reviewed By: Fujinakaheero (not signed in) On: June 26, 2005 14:42 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woo-Hoo! finally another new chapter *does happy dance and then pouts* hey you! You better get going on the next chapter Buster! I'm inlove with this story, it's so freakin' good! Soooooo, please update soon, I'm bored out of my mind and need stuff to read, you're story is on my reading list so I look for updates whenever possible. I now want to know what is going to happen between Vegeta and Bulma and their new baby Trunks! I promise to write again when your next chapter comes out. So until next time, Ja Ne! Fujinakaheero (one of your now loyal fans lol^.^)
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2005 01:54 EDT
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I have a strange tendency to speculate where the plot is heading in a fic. I know, it's a dangerous habit, and I'm usually about 90% incorrect, but I can't stop myself. (Maybe if I took my meds like I'm supposed to...) Anyway, I'm just wondering what the good Dr. Schroedinger is really up to, and where he's going to end up when (dun, dun, dun!) the androids appear. Or, is he going to be linked somehow to (dun, dun, dun!) Cell? Some of his thoughts are just too convenient. Ah well, he's certainly an interesting and entertaining character. BTW, I love Vegeta's nickname for Wolfie! Even though Vegeta's personal battle was endearing, I was impressed with his ability to rein in his emotions. "...he flattened the impulse instead of Capsule Corporation." I loved that. He has such a magnificent amount of aggression that he has to constantly suppress. If Bulma could somehow figure out a way to bottle up that energy, she'd increase her wealth exponentially. Poor Yamcha - let's not set him up on a blind date with Lorena B., OK? ;) Do we get to meet baby Trunks next? This is such an enjoyable fic, threading canon with your own special flavor of great plot and characters. Great job again, Kiddo!
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 19:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Freaking right was that excellent. I loved it! It totally cracked me up when Bulma's eyes centered like lasers on Yamcha's face, and then how she visualized chopping off Vegeta's penis with a dull razor! I think I nearly died. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: flamingo6584 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 17:16 EDT
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Just got done with the latest 3 chapters. As always they are fabulous. Update soon :-)
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Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 00:15 EDT
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I just stopped by and saw you have some new chapters, and realized I hadn't taken the time to leave a review in a while!! Sorry! I'm really enjoying your story. I think you're handling the characters' personalities superbly. It's a great read. I'm anxious to see what's in store in the next couple of chapters. Since I read offline I haven't read them yet, but I didn't want to put off leaving a review any longer ;)
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Reviewed By: Addict6606 On: June 24, 2005 21:12 EDT
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I loooooved this chapter! My favourite aspect is that Vegeta kinda turned all Zen and is saying everything is random data and now he doesn't dream, he seeeing clearly but he can't see clearly that the baby's his. Can't wait for the next chapter but if i have to wait longer becuase your doing a one shot i will gladly wait! Jus t hope the one shot is post-buu i love those! Keep up the goood work
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2005 19:24 EDT
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Now I'm mad. My review didn't post!!!! Enjoyable chapter. I find it amusing that when Vegeta found out that Bulma was having a baby it never occured to him that it might be his. He apparently could put two and two together to figure out how babies were made. hmmm Almost makes me wonder about his intelect. Wolfie got lucky. Vegeta didn't kill him. Don't know about the whole giving birth thing so I can't really comment there. -El-
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Title: chap23
Reviewed By: Venus Legacy On: June 24, 2005 18:25 EDT
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oooh Dr Wolfgang seems as if he wants to go on the hunt alone, I wonder what he will do if he does find Gero's hideout. I know he wants to Kill Gero but what will he do if he's faced with the androids, oh well he does wish to prove the superiority of brains over brawn so I'm sure he'll find a way. Vegeta does not put much stock in the constancy of people's loyalty, which is understandable considering what we learn about his thoughts on King Vegeta and Freiza for he must really have low faith in other people to think that Bulma was seeing someone else the same time she was sleeping with him. It also shows how insecure he really is to think that no one would want to be loyal to him. I wonder at what point he does realise that he is the father of Bulma's child, for in the anime Bulma tells Goku when they meet up for the androids that she hasn't seen Vegeta, yet later on when Piccollo calls Future trunks by his name Vegeta says thats the same name as my son. This leads me to question when exactly he did find out. The atmosphere between the pair in the anime when they meet again is as if each has done a great wrong to the other, which fits in with the scenario you have created when both sides believe that they have been deliberately hurt by the other.
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Title: oh forgot something
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 24, 2005 12:12 EDT
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In regards to Vegeta and his loss of appetite, is it really because of the SS transformation giving him energy or just his thoughts on Bulma (and her "relationship" with Wolfie)? The reason I ask is because 1) in the tournament saga, we see Vegeta still binges on food and 2) I don't blame him for losing appetite over Bulma having a baby (from whom he believes is her new lover). Also, "noiseless snail"...I saw that description as being redundant because personally I never even heard a snail before...so saying it moved like a noiseless snail seems overdone...just moved like a snail is sufficient , imo.
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 24, 2005 12:08 EDT
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Well, Bulma gave me an idea for a focul point when I go into labor (a naked Vegeta...^_^). I wasn't surprised at how Vegeta acted at the news of Bulma having a baby (though I do want to knock some sense into the sexy idiot). So now I'm curious to see his reaction when he realizes it's his. What will trigger realization? What will he think then? It's always fun to explore Vegeta's thoughts with him being so complex...and so conflicted also. It's obvious there are lingering feelings for her even if he won't acknowledge it.
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Reviewed By: TT On: June 24, 2005 09:25 EDT
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Ah! Vegeta is so stupid, he has no conifidence in nobody including himself! you are ging to stop for a couple of weeks?? This is going to be such a long wait :(
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Reviewed By: snen (problems logging in, as usual) On: June 24, 2005 04:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just wanted to say how touching this was: "Vegeta had scars on almost every part of his body except for his face and hands. She imagined that his heart was like that. Damaged but not ruined. Maybe something as fine and pure as his strength itself had saved it, kept it whole." I really loved that. Also, it's nice to see Bulma in such kick ass form :D
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 22:39 EDT
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I like the extra "meat" you added to Vegeta's transformation. It adds so much more to the emotional buildup. I can't see Frieza taking the prince from his father at such a young age and not doing something abhorrent to him. Poor Bulma - those extra hormones have kicked into overdrive, huh? "How would you describe the father of your child, Ms. Briefs?" "Well, he can destroy a planet with those powerful, yet soft hands. He's a fantastic lover, but doesn't want to be tied down. He'd just as soon kill you as look at you. Oh, how I love that man!" "O... Kay." Woo hoo - it's time for Trunks to make his debut, but instead of coming in with a bang, it'll be with a pop! I can't wait to see how you write the actual birth! :)
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