| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegetasei On: March 31, 2005 11:46 EST
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Gah! You're killing me, Deb. I have to say I loved this line: Interesting that the Earth warrior didn't have to be nearby for the blue-haired one to display such…excitement? I got a good laugh out of that. I have nothing to offer to make this better (you got Lisa for that). Can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 18:45 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooooo, nature following its course can be dangerous...especially for Yamcha, lol. That was a great chapter!!!
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 20:47 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol, another great chapter. i love Vegeta's character, you get into his brain like ive never seen anyone else do it. can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: TT On: March 26, 2005 05:18 EST
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I like the way you present other smaller characters, their observation gives insights to vegeta and bulma. this is a fresh approach from just stating them directly, good job! Please update very fast i cant wait
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegetasei On: March 25, 2005 15:06 EST
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I have to say, this is one of the better three years fic I've ever read. I like how you explore each character in detail. We know what they're feeling and thinking. I can't wait to read more (I have nothing constructive to offer at this time).
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2005 00:42 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol, that cracks me up. i hope that you update soon, because that was s short chappie! Excellent work though!
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 23:04 EST
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I love how you're writing this so far, Deb; it's so easy to plug this fic into the "three years"! As usual, I think it's the attention you give to everything that makes you stand out as such a supurb writer. For instance, Bulma's mother. Amidst the facade of a brainless twit, there's a maternal wisdom that Bulma can turn to, whether or not she realizes it. And poor, poor Yamcha! How pitiful that he used to be a key contributor in the battle against evil, and now he must face the cold hard facts that he is "only human" and the outcome of the fight with the androids will be decided by aliens.
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 22:20 EST
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Don't worry V/B's will always be in Vogue. Let me rephrase that, A well written V/B, such as this one, will always be in vogue. Then again you are a great writer... I love your handling of the characters. Very on point. You actually used Bunny and did so extremely well!!!!! Its hard to picture Vegeta as a "Little boy lost" but you pull it off. And Yamcha, Thank you for treating him like a human. I am looking forward to more. Thank You for writing. -El-
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Title: TT
Reviewed By: tin797 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 10:54 EST
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I love the way you write, makes me feel for the characters. more more fast please
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Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 04:57 EST
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Oh my gosh, Deb! I love you so much right now. As far as I'm concerned B/V canon will never be over-used, over-told, or over-explored. I can't help it. I love canon too much. I feel so proud, happy, and privileged to be reading this wonderful B/V get together by you. It really is a treat. The attention to detail in this is outstanding, but I know you enjoy research almost as much as you enjoy writing, so this is no surprise. Your prose is near poetic in places, and damn, you have nailed every single character. It's a refreshing change to read a story written by someone who KNOWS the characters so well, and does them such wonderful justice. Thank you for writing this and I look impatiently forward to the next instalment.
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: March 22, 2005 23:52 EST
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great job... that was awesome... can't wait for more... muy bien
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2005 20:26 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmmm, I wonder what kind of image that was. Lol. Please hurry with the next chapter. This is a great story so far.
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Title: Thank You
Reviewed By: kamalakali [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2005 23:21 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is wonderful! This is bloody fantastic! Thank you, thank you, thank you from the bottom of my deprived heart. I was beginning to wonder where all of my B/V fics had run off to...the gay porn store perhaps? Lol. The quotes at the beginning are truly a great touch and I love the insightfulness of the chapters. Please update soon. Seriously. Lol.
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Reviewed By: Caralin Fury [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2005 18:55 EST
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I am very excited to read a new B/V fanfic by one of my favorite authors! Write on, Debbiechan! ~Caralin Fury~
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Title: Always a first time chap 1
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2005 06:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The beginning of this story is very captivating , the way you begin with what seems like vegeta on a purging mission when in actuality he's on a hospital bed on earth recovering from his injuries. The way you compare the destruction of a planet to a rotten egg collapsing on itself is very effective indeed. The simile creates an image of the hot core of the planet bursting like the putRid yolk of A rotten egg. The meshing of the two different worlds; one a never-ending flashback and the other a unfamiliar reality, hieghtens the sense of Vegetas confusion and disorientation at being on Earth. I like the way you leave subtle, barely veiled hints at sinister activities that may have happened to Vegeta. For instance when you mention how vegeta despises anything cold touching his bare flesh, and later on when you say "Vegeta hated being on his back. He associated the position with being knocked down in battle. Sickness and stolen naps and sexual activity all lay a man down, debilitated him, exposed his vulnerabilities." Vegeta's abhorance for any form of submission on his part is displayed very effectivey. And even when he is remebering only ugliness and disgusting horrors you have Bulmas voice which only portrays the beauty she sees. "What long eyelashes he has! Aren't they lovely, Mama?"
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