| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
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Reviewed By: TT On: April 30, 2005 00:17 EDT
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Love it! Cant wait! V fast with updates yet every chapter is perfect!
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Reviewed By: Trisha F On: April 29, 2005 19:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
beautiful chapter. cute and funny. i love the interaction between mother and daughter. they hardly speak to each other on other people's fic, ya know. that yamcha guy is always depending on bulma. he needs to get a life and a new apartment. anyway i hope you update soon. i love this story!
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not signed on) On: April 29, 2005 18:13 EDT
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Go girl go! Ur doing great! I love it and still deeply hooked on ur fic. I love the pov on Bulma. lolz, so what is Yamcha still mopping around CC for? I love the humor in his fic at points it cracks me up ^_^ Keep up the great work and u better update soon!
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: April 25, 2005 11:17 EDT
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Each time I read this, you neve cease to amaze me with you vivid descriptions. This was just a beautiful chapter (even if it was a series of lemons...lol). I have a feeling Yamcha is going to figure out what's going on quite easily....it seemed he was starting to ponder on the idea already. Ok, my reviews aren't complete without one of these: "He would go back to the room the Briefs had assigned him?" (was the question mark supposed to be there...I thought Vegeta would be more certain than that).
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 22:04 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AAAAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA FREAKING RIGHT! That was damn freaking awesome. I LOVE that chapter, it was so damn yummy! So why does Vegeta keep dreaming that he's drowning? Lol, I have my own thoughts about that, and it's totally perverted. Lol, update soon!
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 16:37 EDT
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Girlfriend, if I could live on lemonade like that for the rest of my life, I'd die a v-e-r-y happy woman!!! So, why'd you have to go and interweave some actual storyline in between all those sex scenes, huh? Jeez, what are you trying to do - write something other than pure smut? (Which I'm sure you'd be able to do to perfection, BTW.) This chapter wasn't just (extremely) enjoyable *cougheroticcough*, I loved Vegeta's "innocence" as well. He's experiencing sex on a totally different plane. I love his logic, tenacty and "mental filing cabinet" for all those things that don't quite make sense but can wait 'till later! I can't wait to see what happens when he and Yamcha next meet.
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Reviewed By: Caralin Fury [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 12:31 EDT
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I LOVE this story. This is everything a Bulma/Vegeta story should be! The characterization is dead on and sex scenes between B/V are so hot...I'm embarrassed to say that I find myself being jealous of Bulma. I do imagine Vegeta having incredible stamina and just reading about him pleasuring Bulma with such control and dedication makes me squirm in my seat. Vegeta's hesitancy to be labled a "lover" is perfect and his confusion about "hair stylist" is a riot! I find myself in much anticipation for the coming chapters, especially as Yamcha continues to catch on as to what the two are up to. ~Caralin Fury~
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Reviewed By: Heiress2thethrone [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 10:45 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH TO BE BULMA. SIGH. LOVED IT! CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE! PERFECTLY WRITTEN!
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Reviewed By: Elenek *logging in is evil* On: April 24, 2005 02:24 EDT
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I'm a little concerned about Vegeta's drowning images. Somehow they don't seem healthy. They also seem to clash with the entire swimming pool thing. Bad dreams and thoughts about drowning so he goes swimming... Sorry, the lifeguard and WSI in me just ain't buying it. I still have really amusing pictures of Saiyans on white and green striped surfboards while wearing neon orange dive suits. Nappa and Bardock to be exact with their tails waying in the wind. Yelling "Cowabunga" at the top of their lungs. The image is actually fairly disturbing. Thank you for giving it to me. -El-
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not signed on) On: April 23, 2005 20:36 EDT
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You're right, this story is like writing itself. of course you're the master behind it all that made that happen! I love this chapter, really good. I think yamcha is catching on to things...but i cna't say the same for the Bulma's parents. Lol, it's cute with the confusion vegeta has.
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Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: Trisha On: April 23, 2005 17:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
damn that was a lot of sex! ofcourse i enjoyed the chapter. nicely done
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Reviewed By: vegges mate On: April 23, 2005 13:32 EDT
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i'm press for time but i just had to read this chapter and then give a little review. you did a wondeful job here. your writting style is so excellent. expect an email from me!
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Title: hehe
Reviewed By: nan de mo chibi otoko On: April 23, 2005 11:44 EDT
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poor confused vegeta! that was a very active chapter! loved it!
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: April 23, 2005 10:38 EDT
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that was fantastic... I loved the interactions and the inquisitiveness that Vegeta felt at times... the scene where she's barely touching him and he moves forward into it was so good. I love what you've done with each of the characters its so fantastic and so real. Great job...
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Reviewed By: Trisha F On: April 22, 2005 23:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was perfect. update soon
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