| "Facets of the Living Jewel" Reviews/Comments [ 534 ] |
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Title: FFARG Review Chapter Six
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2005 23:12 PDT
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Ah, thank you for submitting your fic to FFARG! This has been a lovely read. You should be proud. I found no grammar mistakes! (This could be because I'm tired, but it is probably because you did a great job!) Truly, though, I like the way you have the chapter set up. It's visual, shows a sensitive side to the characters, and gets into the feelings of each. I especially like how you show Kagome's frustration and unwillingness to share it with Inuyasha. Well written. I can perhaps only offer one bit of encouragement/advice and that is to say that while your sentences are well placed and pieced together, they would flow more smoothly if they were so short and choppy. Now, not all of them are like this. Most of them are grand. However, toward the beginning, they were a bit choppy and abrupt in action...almost like staggering through the paragraphs. But this can be easily fixed, and isn't even neccesary! Your story is great, and keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: misticknight2002 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2005 15:31 PDT
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This fic is simply amazing. I love it. Please update as soon as possible.
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Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2005 20:11 PDT
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Most excellent. I have to say, the most original Inuyasha fic I've seen to date, and on top of that, you seem to really know what you're talking about, both in martial arts and romance(to my un-trained eye, at least). I can't wait to see more, though I do so patiently.
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Reviewed By: SevenStar [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2005 07:24 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the origial storyline. There are several ideas of who, what and why he is not there. Your's is a first with him a "Time Lord". Can't wait to read the next.
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Reviewed By: Azelle [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2005 10:12 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're creating a very awesome and original story. Seriously, you've got one of the best plots I've seen in a while, although having Kagome's father possessing temporal powers is a bit... odd. Not in a bad way, mind you, but different. It kind of reminds me of Madeleine L'Engle's A Wrinkle in Time with the mother and father being genius scientists working on tesseracts. Can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: Eartha [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 21:04 PDT
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Hmmm...interesting idea. So, Kagome's father is a time demon and she has some of his traits? Is that what is going on? And, why are you leaving shippo behind? That's kind of sad for the poor kit. Well, I can't wait to see this story's plot unravel. Keep it up!!
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Reviewed By: shatter the sky comes quietly On: October 13, 2005 21:34 PDT
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Wow, this is such a refreshing change on the dynamics of the Inu-gumi! Way to go! Hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2005 14:31 PDT
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I like this story a lot! I've always been a slight fan of Demon Inuyasha and I'm glad that Inuyasha agreed to give him the full moon. This story is great and I hope you continue!!! Also, I really how he has Kagome submit to him! ;) Darn Kouga always ruins everything!
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Title: review
Reviewed By: titina On: October 13, 2005 07:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
konnichiwa please continue i want to find out what happens.anyway, everything was cool. there was aa little bit of OOC-ness but it was still good:) by the way... WHERE IS THE ONE AND ONLY SESSHOMARU? HE IS SOOO HOT.
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