| "A Souls Seduction" Reviews/Comments [ 243 ] |
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2006 00:15 EST
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O.K. I have another suggestion/recommendation. I don't like the propensity to make plot decisions based on reader votes. The pairing votes are particularly common. You would be better off to decide yourself who should go first, and why. Then your plot drives the order, rather than the order forcing your hand into finding a plot to justify it, or not justifying it at all. Now I still say that Hiei is the best choice to go first, and while he claims he would "fuck and leave" I don't think he will, or if he does, he will return quickly. However, don't pick Kurame just because he edged out Hiei in the votes department. Go with the order which drives your plot the best.
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Reviewed By: lil rin On: November 07, 2006 21:57 EST
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Ah, great x10^3 uncle fluffy. :P
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Reviewed By: LmKiTsUnE [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2006 21:13 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, another aswome chapter. Upadate when you can ^3^
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Reviewed By: purp1ebabe [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2006 20:51 EST
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interesting... kagome is realted to sessh and she's moving in with kurama, hiei, and yusuke... things are gunna get a lot more interesting. i'll be waiting for the next chap
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Reviewed By: Renata-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2006 14:36 EST
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Well, somebody here suggested Hiei as her first because it would be impossible to forget. Well, I agree, considering, he is planning to *fuck* her (mind you, not "to make love", not even "to have a sex", just "fuck")and leave, she'd hardly forget it...
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Reviewed By: kelly s On: November 07, 2006 10:51 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love you story thus far. I think that kurama/yoko should go first. Then the dark bad boy hiei should go next. Followed by yusuke. I also think that kagome should becom pregnant.
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Reviewed By: Mysterious_Tears [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2006 04:37 EST
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me likey.. alot!!! my vote is on Hiei!!!! that would be best for drama.. i mean the others would be angry he went first.. and it would be fun to see how Hiei reacts to it all ne??? its getting good.. and to the Kagomes moms name.. i dont remember it.. but i do believe i have used it in at least one of my fanfics before... maybe i can look back and check.. but ne ways KUDOS TO YOU!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Fox_Hanyou On: November 06, 2006 18:44 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!!!!!!!!! I LOVED IT!!! keep it up ^_^. also, for the poll, i vote Kurama. Yoko already seems dead set on it and hes not one to back down.....usualy. Dessy
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Reviewed By: Kagome Lady of the Rain [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2006 16:59 EST
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I really loved it! I think Yusuke then Kurama and then last but not least Hiei. Keep up the great work and update asap please!
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Reviewed By: Temari92 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2006 15:55 EST
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Hey I just read ur story like five times already! I love it! please update!!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2006 06:54 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Me again. I just had to read the whole story through one more time -- just loving it so much! More thoughts/questions/observations: the job situation - what if she ends up going through a LOT of different jobs because guys keep hitting on her and each time one of her mates finds out and makes her quit or makes a scene and gets her fired? (Could be a running gag.) And since she and they will all be going through "heat," she should attract a lot of males, ne? I can see that really pissing Hiei off. (He's gotta go through those possessive/protective stages before he can admit real feelings.) But, she needs to earn his trust, right? Perhaps the bad guys try to get her and during the scuffle she saves Hiei and gets injured? Can't wait to find out more about his own latent powers. I'm guessing the scroll Rin brought Koenma let him know Kagome's quest was finished and that's why he was able to ask her to help? I'm also hoping for a good scene with Inuyasha being furious that she has to take three mates, and causing some problems. Still don't know if I want to know about his "true soulmate," though. I really hate for him to be paired with someone else -- I barely tolerate Kikyou. But, I'm guessing Kanna. Or... Rin? She must be mated to a youkai to still be around, ne? So, is it Inu or Shippo? The order of mating still on my mind -- I read the other reviews, and I can imagine a great scene with Youko and Yuske arguing and Hiei just picking her up and taking her to the bedroom to get it over with. Of course, I can also see him thinking he can hold out the longest from the effects of the curse. Yuske could argue to do it in the same order as the cures. Youko can argue reverse order since he's already been last once, as well as his kitsune skills for her benefit. THAT should piss off the other two to have their own skills challenged. As I've said before, SO many possibilities!! I am just giddy thinking about what's going to happen next! PLEASE UPDATE AGAIN SOON!!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 17:06 EST
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Sounds good so far. really like the story line. A few grammatical errors & puctuation could be better, but Im really sucked into the story. I liked DYquem's idea of Hiei going first & how it would start some kind of tie between them bc he's her first. It would also make sence bc he would want to go a head & get it over w/. What if the bad guys find out & send someone to try & steal Kagome. Like as in try & get her to fall in love w/ them. That might make Hiei possessive. You know, like as in he has to share her w/ the Yusuke & Kurama, but "I'll be damned if I share her w/ anyone else." lol maybe she could get a job as an erotic dancer... bet that'd make all of the guys jealous. Plus, itd pay pretty well & no one would even have to know it was her. She could like wear a wig & colored contacts. Itd be funny if Hiei went there for a lil "entertainment" & realized it was her & got pissed that all the guys were looking at what was his. NEWAYS... UPDATE SOON!!!!
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Reviewed By: fire_lily On: November 05, 2006 15:58 EST
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What does Mr. fluffy pants have to do with this?
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Reviewed By: tonia On: November 05, 2006 15:12 EST
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excellent Story!!! I think Kurama should be the first to mate with her.
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Reviewed By: Anonymousfanfic [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 14:24 EST
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Please update ASAP Sesshomaru will be the one to offer her a job? Boy they need the money, if all four/five of them are going to live together. Unless Sesshomaru offers them a room in his mansion/or wherever. Even though Hiei claims that after they do it that one time, will he really mean it or will he realize that he couldn't stay away from her? Who will be the first to go? Yoko already called dubs, that was only in his head. Yusuke will probably fight him on it? How long can they stoll on not mating before something bad happens? Sesshomaru has been watching the family, how cool and creepy is that. Sesshomaru will probably warn them and current Spirit World ruler(s) that if anything happens to Kagome, he will have their heads. Please update ASAP
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