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Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 17:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That dance was beautiful. I can imagine how hot Sesshoumaru must have been dressed as a vampire! How bitter-sweet it was that they both felt that connection and wanted/needed each other so much but he couldn't tell her who he was. In fact, saying that made me thing of the song Bittersweet by Apocalyptica... the song really doesn't fit the story cause it is a duet where two guys love the same girl, but if it was one person singing it, then it would fit... sort of lol. That's hilarious/sad that Kikyo was a... virginity remover for all the guys at school at such an age. **shudder** I really hope Inuyasha stays clear of her. Icky. hmmm I wonder if Kagome will ever use the new room in the basement or if the relationship will still be growing and working itself out by the time it's done...I kind of want her to not need the use of that room so that Sesshy can not be in pain anymore, but then she wouldn't get to use the nice room her wonderful friends made for her and a deep and meaningful relationship (which I think you said was the only way to end the syndrome) would likely take longer than that to develop anyhow. Oh well... I guess it will be interesting to see which happens first, but I'm betting that she will get some time in her room... I feel bad for that last girl, but at least she's the last he uses like that...So next flashback chapter do we meet Shippo? I guess I'll have to wait, but still I hope so. I have been so curious about why he would need her and therefore become her friend like the others did. I'm really excited about the next chapter too. I look forward to finding out how they can connect with Sesshoumaru in that form. I also want to see how she reacts when she finds out who her mysterious vampire was. I love how you alternate past and future between the chapters. At first I was skeptical about how that would turn out but now I am convinced that it is one of if not the most brilliant ideas I have heard of. It really heightens the suspense and is a great way to maintain interest. If you had just done everything in chronological order it could have been kind of boring and seemed like a rather lengthy prologue. Also some of the surprises in the later part of the story might have been ruined. Sticking in flashbacks throughout the story would have made it seriously choppy and is one of my fan-fic pet-peeves. I am always amazed at what a brilliant author you are every time I read any of your work. I really should be a better reviewer and you know... review more often! lol
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Reviewed By: inuyasha0024 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 17:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think this is an amazing story. The was you write this story is amazing. You are an awesome author and keep up the awesome work. Can't wait too see what happends next between Kagome and Sesshomaru. ^^
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 16:37 EDT
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this is such a good story, i love the flashback chapters where we see how sesshomaru and kagome's relationship didnt progress and how it affected him. dont worry about what the reviewers write, you write well and the chapters are an ok size, also you update better than many other authors.
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 16:26 EDT
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Sigh, I saw your note at the bottom. I haven't been reading the past reviews. I'm of your opinion. If a person doesn't care for a chapter just because they would 'prefer' that you wrote something else, then the reader needs to keep the 'preference' close to his/her chest. Preferences are the author's prerogative. I have preferences, too. Just about the only times I whine like a baby is if I know the author and enjoy poking. Almost every story I've ever read had at least two or three chapters that I would have preferred to skip. I realize that it is simply because of 'my' preference, 'my' addiction to action and had absolutely nothing to do with the author.....On another note, if you have a lot of fans and write frequent notes to them in your chapters, they will come to feel as though you are their friend. In such surroundings, they may feel as though it is okay to push you. They might not see it so much as demanding as being playful while letting you know that they are anxious and love the story. There is a fine line that is hard to see when exhausted....Anywho, please don't jump ship. I'm really enjoying the story--even if I am a very bad reviewer. BTW, shivers on the whole Sesshoumaru vampire deal. I sure hope that we get to see that side of him again. You sure made him romantic. sigh *starry eyes* Man, those guys are starting to get on my nerves. They really did come between those two. Part of the mess was their fault. He might have actually been able to reach out to her if he didn't have to deal with them. He could have 'wooed' her. Garrrh! Now you've made me crave'Rromantic Sesshoumaru'! Gah! I am not going to ask you to update quickly because you are fantastic with updates. I do appreciate that, very much. Thank you for the effort. I know about the late nights--work, college, kids, homework, then writing at one a.m. in the morning. I feel ya. Kudos to you! ^_^ Snow
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Reviewed By: princesssirenity2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2008 19:41 EDT
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Finish soon!
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Reviewed By: kagome45556 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 17:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this chapter. It's so nice to have Sesshoumaru so kind. I pray that you will update very soon. I cry every moment there isn't another chapter to reaad.
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Reviewed By: animeangel47 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 15:47 EDT
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this is good update soon
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Title: Awww
Reviewed By: n8tivegurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 13:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awwww, I want to pet Sessho too! But I bet he'd probably rip my arm off cuz I'm not Kagome ^_^ and I hope Inu Papa can help even more! Thanks for the update (i get them from this site) bye
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 04:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
whoops wrong story.... ok... why doesn't InuYasha understand what his dad is saying in Inu????
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 04:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT!!!!!!!!111 ***spelling/wording*** Walking over to the bed, she removed the dress from the ***bad*** (bag) and removed the tags. Lucky he *had to time for* (had time for/had time to have) another shower, before getting dressed and heading to the restaurant.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 04:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wanna hug him too!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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Reviewed By: bloodbunny [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 01:28 EDT
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I loved it! Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2008 20:44 EDT
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Oh! I was hoping that she would get to pet him in his doggie form! It would be too wonderful to have him in his dog form for awhile, following her around like a lost puppy. I hope dear old dad can cage Inuyasha. He would ruin things for sure. Oh! And I was hoping to hear barking dog talk. LOL Thanks for not disappointing me in this chapter! I loved it and am tickled pink. Can't wait to see what you do next! ^_^ Snow
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Reviewed By: Sessy'sgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2008 00:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
At first i thought i wouldn't like the flashback chapters, but it so so much less annoying than random flashbacks, and you do such a great job. And i just wish there were more people who can wright as well as you that wright fanfiction. And i love the story. Please update
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Reviewed By: sheastarr334 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2008 23:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE this story. I'm not really big on the Kagome/Sess pairing, only if they're AU and only if they're well written, which yours is. And I AM SO THANKFUL!! I like the between chapters explaining why things are the way they are. But a quick question, where's Sango and Rin? Not that they're presence will make no nevermind. Just curious and awaiting the next chapter.
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