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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 79 80 81 82 83 84 85 86 87 88 89 90 91 92 93 94 95 96 97 98 › » ] | Reviewed By: JKD1989 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 19:12 PDT
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Rofl, I cant believe she said that to Mike either! xD Hahaa, I love this V, shes funny xD. I hope none of your readers try to do any of that stuff...Ill admit you tempt me to try them rofl xDD >>;;. But it was really funny! Though, Im surprised that Evan hadnt already used some fluorescent colored condoms or something. Youd think hed be all over the novelty stuff, rofl xD.
| Reviewed By: Usagiseren05 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 16:19 PDT
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WOW! Sue just wow I laughed sooo hard through that entire chap! I mean wow! Its great to see V having fun for once not to mention the whole fart on the pillow thing. You saw knocked up didn't you! LOL My absolutely favorite part was when v told Mike he needed to get laid! LOL Great! Can't wait for the next!
| Reviewed By: monkeyseemonkeynodo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 15:36 PDT
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AWWWW SNAP! Evan's bringing out V's wild side. haha I like it, and I know good and well thathe does too. Haha They're so cute, just perfect for each other, Can't wait for the big tell-all. I loved the "sucktastic" phrase, that was funny. Well, keep up the great work! Love it. -MSMND
| Reviewed By: FireDemon86 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 09:51 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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OMG LOL.... I'm laughing so hard, laughed the whole way through that chapter. V is giving in to her inner deviant hahahhaha.
| Reviewed By: indigorrain [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 08:30 PDT
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OOO! Yay, Valerie and alcohol, something interesting is bound to happen right about now. I am getting so anxious for their relationship to advance, because you just KNOW they would be perfect together....ugh. If only...Keep up the good work!
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 08:07 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is really great to see Val loosening up. I do agree that Evan needs to think a little more before he pulls some of his pranks though, he could hurt someone unintentionally. I am getting curious as to how Evan is going to avoid jail time though, especially since he explained how Dieter changed in jail. If Evan goes to jail it will hurt his soul. I do suspect that Dieter, whom I suspect was really driving, left something behind that will clear Evan's name. Or maybe the driver of the other car will see Evan and realize he hadn't been the driver. However you do it I am sure it will be good. You are a wonderful writer and I love reading your work.
| Reviewed By: mynera [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 06:18 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, i think valerie has turned into a zel. lol! thanks for the update!
| Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2009 06:09 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You had me chuckling so hard - I love your mind it has the best stories in it! I can't believe Evan did that to Mike!
| Title: Chapter 74: Boom! Boom! Pow! And V was in on it!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2009 10:39 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evan's so bad--in this chapter, he reminded me of a teen or early college student--bored and defiaant. Oh, before I further commnet on that, the Cracker Catching Legend continues--featuring caramel rice cakes! Go, Evan! LOL! Valerie was being bad and trying to leave all the blame on Evan--sneeky wench! LOL! That was so funny! Evan's so hyper in this chpater, I was ROLLIN! I loved all the minor cuddle/touchy moments, too. Lately, V's not so adamant about pulling away, either--much better, IMHO!
| Title: Chapter 73: (Please ignore last post--Forgot I already commented on Chapter 72 and I called it Chapter 73 AGAIN! UGH!!!)
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2009 10:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evan's so in-your-face raunchy in the beginning of this chapter, I had a moment of helpless shuddering followed by a shudder--then I reminded myself this is fiction I'm reading...dind't work; my imagination and, ahem, well, thought processes kinda built a picture and, well...you get my drift. Moving right along...the singing part was so cute, especially when Evan was all suprise/honored and V was lost for words for a few moment. The singing was suggestive, but, then again, so is Evan. Okay, I want Evan to brush my hair!! **tears bedroom up looking for a brush** I can never say it enough, Sue-- I LOVE V's jealousy! "Tha bitch..." Mrow!!! Looks like Evan's been lnely for a long time, in his own way. Still, seems like a self-p[erception as well as an assumption. Heh. The damage we do to our own psyches, sometimes. Damn, V...your past is just messy, ain't it? Makes the next chapter and the next and the next all the more sweeter for ever glimpse I get into your head.
| Title: Chapter 73: I LOVE Evan's youkai!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2009 09:45 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
He's just as horny as ol' Roka! ROFLMAO! But, UGH, V! Yo never...I mean...not even a little one? Oh, to lack knoledge of the Big O, honey, I can't help but feel for ya...and to think of it as a MYTH! **cuddles V** Evan, as usual, was out of line but spouted a lot of knowldge in the process and had V thinking. The talk about being in love and Evan's answer sound a lot like the prologue and further make me ponder the possibility of it being V...I reread the Prologue; only, this time, I'm thinking harder at the play on words and wondering how potent marijuana smoke is on a dog youkai's snes of smell. One would have to be out of it not to recognize their mate, I thought at first. Then I remembered Ryo, Kich, Cain, Bas and Gavin and shut up. This was a double-read chapter that had me HURTING from laughter!!! You, rock, Sue!
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2009 04:27 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like big booms too but Evan is lucky that someone didn't get hurt with the firecrackers. Especially the ones set off in the hotel. I wonder when Evan will realize that he was just given a clue about Val's past and he will remember her remark that her parents "lost her". I have all kinds of theories as to what happened but I will wait semi-patiently for the whole true story. It was good to see Val start to lighten up and become more playful, Evan is good for her this way. And we all know that once he makes a commitment to her he will be as faithful as Marvin, she just has to find out about that. I look forward to the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: alessa186 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2009 01:06 PDT
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Hey.ive never really gotten a chance to review any of your stories cause im a copy paste in msdocument person. I can tell you at first i was kinda wary about reading ur stories but then i got so into them. Cause its not based solely on one story, if not if gives meaning to a family tree. And that i can say is super cool. purity nine i find as one of the longest purity stories u got. I do love the story. but its kinda long. im still waiting for the chap to arrive when v starts really falling for evan but it seems like its just taking a lot of time to get to one place. But like i said i do love the story.Its major cool. good work.
| Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2009 23:46 PDT
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Fireworks on top of a moving bus sounds like fun, but I have to wonder about the smoke bothering the others on the road... if there are others on the road... and there's also the fire risk to the evergreens that they're inevitably passing, being in Oregon. Zel's unofficial bio, I have to think that it hit something a little close to Valerie, to have to go hide in the bathroom, effectively the only real private space in the bus. I don't think she 'ran away' out of anger. Keep up the good work, dark
| Reviewed By: Nozome [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2009 19:44 PDT
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i agree with evan, i like big booms. loved it can't wait for the next one!
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