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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 128 129 130 131 132 133 134 135 136 137 138 139 140 141 142 143 144 145 146 147 › » ] | Title: Girlfriend for a Day
Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 12:48 PDT
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Have I told you lately how much I love your writing, style, content, & all. I love your charactor's, and Evan's as naught as they come. Maru's review cracked me up, but she/he didn't go far enough, have the hooker pretend to be a possible sponser, having Marvin for the night would be her price for sponsership, let him know how it feels to be used like that, but I wouldn't want V to catch him, I think V's been hurt enough in her life, Even/Zel is just what she needs to bring laughter & joy back into her life and she is what he needs to bring focus into his, something to give him a purpose beyond sex. I have total sympathy for your son, I've had 3 broken arms in my life (corse, I was WAY younger) and I remember just how frustraing it was to be one handed for a while. Casts are better now, still, poor baby. I was accident prone, I knew all the ER people by first name, according to my mom, so be happy that you didn't wind up with ME for your youngest child, and I hope he feels better soon. Taking some days away writing will give me a chance to relax and re-read this story from the beginning catch the little things I may have missed the first time through. I love the Purity Universe and I'm glad you've chosen to share it with us.
| Reviewed By: lilswtheart9811 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 12:46 PDT
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This was so incredibly sweet Sue! It gave me little butterflies...damn I want a guy like Evan, the hardcore sweet type you know? anywho I hope your son feels better!
| Reviewed By: Sesshomaru4Kagura4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 12:25 PDT
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AWWWWW! Evan is melting me almost- almost- as fast as Tanny. Like the sound of his room, BTW... *ecchi* Oh yeah, and... "good genes"? Wait 'till Val hears the truth of it... it's always interesting when they have to explain the whole "I'm-not-human" thing to humans, but somehow, I think Val can handle it. Now, go Evan! Bite Marvin's heda off! Get well wishes to your son!
| Reviewed By: xfalsetruth06x [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 10:56 PDT
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HOW ADORABLE! Also I hope your son gets better soon. Broken arms are no fun...especially when you mess em up while they're broken...
| Reviewed By: Meru [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 10:27 PDT
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!! I hope your son is doing alright! I myself am currently going to physiotherapy to get my leg bending again; I dislocated my knee really bad a month ago and @_@ its blah. I really liked the chapter!! 8DDD Evan finally realizes that V is his mate 88DDDDD!!! I love these two xD they may be one of my favorite couples in the Purity universe. Now to kill off Marvin..... D8! OR! Evan can find out and tell V Marvin has been cheating on her DDDD8!!!!! BETTER YET! Evan can buy Marvin the hooker xD send her anonymously of course xD but still.... lol
| Title: loved it!!!! (ch. 24)
Reviewed By: jack2jokester [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2008 10:21 PDT
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Hope your son is alright. Loved the chapter! I cant wait for the next one.
| Title: Chapter 21: Cain punished Gin!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 16:42 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, in the midst of all the drama, that's the first thing to come to mind to type (so I have a "peciliar" order of memory...**sheepish grin**). okay, onto the angst, shall we? Oh, I actually shed 3 tears on this chapter. some of the content touched awfully close to home for me and made reading this chapter a long winded experience. I love how Evan was able to strengthen V even a little through his youki. I'm so glad he had her back or she'd have gotten mugged or worse. And Cain...he's very observant and I think he sees something in the ordeal.
| Title: BIG WHOOPS! Typo of sorts, Sue...
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 16:14 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, um, BIG whoops. That review for Chapter 19? Yeah, that was for chapter 20. my bad, Sue. REVIEW FOR CHAPTER 19: Ooh, to read Evan stewing over V's comments. He seemed much more hurt than offended and damn if I didn't feel a tug for both parties. Neither V or Evan seem to happy with their love life or lack thereof and the give and take of their previous convo was, to me, pretty revealing. V's jealous...so is Evan, well, incredulously so, most likely. I'm still smarting off that last chapter. Whoo, that was deep! But, i did have at least one good laugh this go round. I can't believe Gin told him to take off his shirt. That was too priceless! And damned if he didn't break the record--take that Bubby, indeed. **fans self**
| Title: Chapter 19: Oh, Shit ! (Part 2)
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:54 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG, Marvin! No you DIDN'T put in a bid for Evan! I both laughed and balked there, Sue. Once again, marv's a bit nerdy, huh? But, that was the LEAST of V's reason's to sigh despondantly. Evan. Is. PISSED. Damn, the wrath of Evan over Gin is NOT to be sneezed at, i was always sure but...well, hell, the cold stoic shoulder was enough to freeze sea water but then "The Barter" (which will now and forever be in my mind "The Barter" with dramatic music in the background). Wow, hurtful things were said. I actually got stuck in the middle having a hard time proceeding. It was like the whole train wreck/apprehension thing I go throuhg with really good angst and when I read on, Sue... Well, my throat got really tight and dry. And you write the cahracters' thoughts so well that, even in the midst of all the angst and all I feel about the scene at the moment, I can't help but get caught up in the whys and because ofs and the if onlys that, honestly, it affects me. made me wonder what his YV was thinking as he went further on with his request to V in that room. That chapter...Sue...you blew my fuckin' MIND! **bows to the Queen of Angst**
| Title: Chapter 18: Oh, shit!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:41 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, V...you...you said...and Evan...OMG. I can't sum up my comments any better for this chapter, Sue. Just...OMG!
| Title: Chapter 17: **le sigh**
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:39 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Geez, I'm bored FOR V. Oh, Marvin...he's kinda like an excited puppy in reference to his funding and schmoozing, huh? But, at least she made her statement and got his attention. surprise, marvin. you've got a blonde bombshell for a fiance. Too bad you can't seem to grasp the basic feminine need she has to be appreciated at the most basic. don't stare at her like "Whoa...who are YOU?", just, ugh, I don't know, give her a solid 5 minutes of adoration every half hour or so. Marvin...he's...kind of a nerd, isn't he, Sue? And it was so cool how they didn't realize who each other were for the longest time, Evan and V i mean, till they litterally walked into each other. Don't drool, V (and hide it behind your supposed haughtiness--Evan's no dummy).
| Title: Chapter 16: You got that song stuck in my head, Sue. LOL!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:31 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Except, I kept switching to Aretha! LOL! Moving right along... First, OMG, I can't believe Madison said that about Cain--wait...yeah, yes I can. The more I find out about Evan, the more I wanna hug him. He sounds borderline lonely. **pets Evan** And i love how honest Madison is with V; the dress deal tickled me. marvin better look out.
| Title: Chapter 15: Mama's baby steps up to the plate
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hell, where's my paddle? I'll bid all my... **counts money...digs in bottom of bag, couch, change jar** ...$17.48 for Evan! No, but seriously, that was so sweet how he caters to Gin. Warms the heart and reminds me of Ryo and Kich with Kagome. Poor stuck, heart-scared, settling V. She's lonely, isn't she? No wonder she takes her job so seriously...outside of Madison, it's her biggest and most fulfilling challenge (and it gives back). Though I know they won't stay together throughout the story, I still think they might make good friends (though, there may always be a tad tension in the air with Marv and Evan). I shall see...
| Title: Chapter 14: Evan's got a good heart.
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:17 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Way to guard the marital bliss, Evvie! Dieter's wife wasn't dumb at ALL, was she? have i told you lately how much I adore Madison? Whoo, her wit! Tell it like it is, girlfriend! And Marvin...dude, pay attention. I mean, yeah, V didn't tell him about the trip and where she really was going but for him to just assume so easilly that she's open to dropping averything and complying... **le sigh** Then again, she's not all that verbal about her needs, is she...
| Title: Chapter 13: Oh, Evan...
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 15:10 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GAWD, something about Evan whining is so funny (and sexy--yeah, something's wrong with me drooling over a fictional character but, well, what can ya do?). And V's past with her family... The plot thickens. **rubs hands together gleefully** Gee, Marvin's got Tunnel Vision, huh? I both admire and sigh over the guy. Poor V, settleing for less. What happened in her past to make her want a marvin-shped security blanket, I wonder... Evan, Evan, Evan...somehow, I can't help but wonder if he got arrested on purpose. He's just wild enough to do it to get her attention. Poor V... **shakes head and chuckles**
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