| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] |
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Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2008 10:17 PDT
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its not that i dont like valerie. i reserve judgement until the story progresses further. i just respond in kind to how i feel about the characters at the end of each chapter. i like the story which i why i keep reading it. the fact that i feel a certain way about a character at the end of a chapter only makes me more anxious to read the next one and see if my feelings will change. you are a talented writer so you make it easy to feel strongly about an occurrence in the chapters. i hope i didnt offend you. that wasnt my intention. i had hoped that you would feel glad that as a writer your stories inspired such strong reactions in people. i apologize. if you want ill just read and i wont comment afterward.
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Reviewed By: AtamaHitoride [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2008 09:58 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There isn't a big enough number in the world that can represent the number or suns that burn with my love for Cain. Amazing chapter sue!
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Reviewed By: Sesshomaru4Kagura4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2008 09:42 PDT
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I ahve to say... Cain may only have been in this chapter for the last three seconds of it, but I loved it. :P Seeing right through Evan, and then... "Don't make her cry again". Damn straight! Well, being Evan, I think he's got his priorities straighter than you'd expect.. Oh, and the other priceless moment... "Dear God... His name is PINKLE?" XD XD XD
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Reviewed By: malitiadixie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2008 08:56 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww...Cain already likes her. Wait until he finds out that she's already tied herself to another man. Pinkle...:snort: And Gin seems to like her well enough. I wonder what they'll do for the rest of the day. Gin and Cain will be gone sooner or later, and he said the whole day. Oh, I can't wait!
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Reviewed By: GalacticFire [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2008 08:25 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh my gosh.. died when I read the last line. Glad to see I was COMPLETELY wrong about what I wrote in the forum, lol. Great job Sueric, I love Evan and Valerie's interaction!!
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Reviewed By: Ryo5492 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2008 21:05 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i love this fic=D i cant wait until val meets his parents directlyXD lol=D oh but just ine question...is the part when maddy is in bed after *cough cough* with gunnar when the one shot happened? the one about maddy and gunnar having *yah*... cuz i remember it ending with gunnar leaving coffee out for maddy... thanks for the update=D
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Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2008 14:38 PDT
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Well, at least Evan's treating this situation a bit better after sleeping... a little. Poor Val, his 'usual' attitude is making it harder for her. I'm just wondering how this all will go when Cain and Gin come over and Cain realizes that Val's the girl that he escorted, crying, to the taxi last night... and that Evan's at fault for that. Keep up the good work, dark
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Reviewed By: Sesshomaru4Kagura4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2008 11:43 PDT
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Awww, it's nice to see them make up... oh, and having read Potentate a million times... now WONDER Maddy's sore! Stilllll.... *pouts and wants a schmexy Gonnar of her own*
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Reviewed By: Migoto [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2008 09:37 PDT
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I'm glad to see no one is too upset by what I said, though I won't kid myself into thinking that might not have something to do with the length of my review. I would like to make one more change to what I said, which is instead of 'unknowingly insulted' to simply 'insulted' because I'll acknowledge the fact that a simple stop it from Evan should have been enough to make Val shut up and the fact that an insult is on par with sexual assault for some people just because they like someone better than another person is, I think, the disturbing social commentary part.
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Reviewed By: AtamaHitoride [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2008 05:15 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahhh the Gunnar/Maddy lemon lol. That's a good ass purity short to read that is! :D I love you sue!!
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2008 22:58 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gunners not going to end up with Evan "ex" (that would make for a really interesting story... I'm glad that V and Evan are on more friendly terms...
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Reviewed By: monkeyseemonkeynodo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2008 22:22 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow...Evan gets over things quickly... very interesting. Great Story though!! I love how he can fluster everyone and act like its nothing. He's so charming :D ~MSMND
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Reviewed By: Migoto [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2008 22:19 PDT
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PS And by 'unknowingly insulted' I do mean the fact that if she'd been just another one of his women, not one he was related to (which Val didn't know), Evan wouldn't have cared what Val said. What I am not doing is excusing the fact that Val didn't respect the boundary of "stop it".
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Reviewed By: Migoto [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2008 22:04 PDT
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I was glad to see two chapters in one day because that meant I could read with the hope that something might be resolved (what with my angst-meter being off the scale lately). I must admit that I was surprised to see just how quickly it was resolved. That said, I would like to emphasize here that I love your characters (Ryo and Nez the most of course ;D) and your stories before I say what I'm about to say. I think I feel like saying all of this because of the responses written by other reviewers rather than because of what has happened in the story. Here it goes: I just have one big nagging feeling about what has just happened in this one. Evan being really upset about what he did helped me forgive him. I'm still surprised at how Val didn't hold it against him at all. IMO it's kind of abnormal. In the real world, just because you tell someone you'll do anything thing for them does not mean they can demand sexual favors if you say, "no, that's not what I meant". In the real world, if someone said no and then someone coerced them the way Evan did it would be considered assault/rape (if the act was completed, not left hanging like that of course), so I find it hard to believe that as a lawyer she would just say, "Evan was right and I feel really bad about what I said". I'm saying this because I find the response to these past few chapters mildly disturbing on a social commentary level. People are OK with a woman being assaulted b/c after all she did 'give her word', but people aren't OK with a man being unknowingly insulted. I guess I'd just like us to look back objectively and think in real world terms for a sec and see if what we've said is really how we'd feel.
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Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2008 21:31 PDT
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o i forgot to ask u ...i was trying to get a better vision of Evan's persona and what not and i was wondering, if u could imagine how h sounds when he sings who would he sound like? it would really help me to pull the image of him together. lol this time its CELP. mm.org is so funny with these things
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