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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2009 19:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! Happy birthday!!! I doubt that you would want the pockey... (pockey isn't in the Firefox Australian English dictionary...) it would be stale and the chocolate would be melted before it could be sent over (although that might not be the case right at the moment because we are going to into winter here... but we are having some random hot days... oh we have a VERY pregnant garami (fish), and she looks like if you would quease her... she would pop...probably kinda like Kagura looks like...
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Reviewed By: *zetsuii On: March 27, 2009 14:07 CDT
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YAY LEMONS!!!!! And happy b-day...glad you could celebrate it with us with the chapter...even though you did all the work...it was another amazing chapter and i am glad that they are together again but i cant wait to know if you are going to add antoher angsty twist in there?????? dun dun DUN cant wait for next week...thanks again XD
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Reviewed By: ScarletRaven1001 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2009 11:48 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just found this fic today, and I love it! I've been reading the entire thing for a couple of hours now, and you have a very interesting style of writing. I say 'interesting', because even though I am not normally a fan of Sess/Kagura fics, I am really, really enjoing this! You have converted me, haha! * Anyway, I am so glad that those two are talking now. My gosh, they really need to communicate, they are both so stubborn! And wow, we'll finally get to learn what the letter and real stipulations of the inheritance are all about. I freaking hate Touran, lying conniving bitch that she is. This is all her fault! * I am really hoping that you update this soon. I'm hooked, lol. Thank you for sharing this!
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Reviewed By: anime-rocks-1010 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2009 08:22 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I love the fic! I truly regret just having read this now. I spent a whole day to finish all 45 chapters only to get a cliffy. Good thing it wasn't a lovey-dovey cliffy. Anyway... Thank God! They finally talked seriously! I hope things will go smoothly... I was kinda surprised that Sesshy introduced Kagura to his mom [or her tombstone]. Didn't come across my mind. How would a short oyster youkai look like? I'm just wondering. ^^ I think they did find a loophole. YEY! And I truly hope the two of them get back together. They both have these stupid egos they just have to let go of! They truly fit each other. LOL. Anyway... I love it, I love you!! I haven't been reading fanfics in ages, and yours was the first one I opened since then. What a great choice I had made. Update when you can! Cheers!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2009 22:26 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... seems that the long awaited heart-to-heart talk has started... at least some things have been cleared... now have to wait for the rest of it... wonder what loophole myoga found in sesshoumaru's will?... then maybe sesshoumaru & kagura can get together afterwards?... what about kagome & inuyasha's wedding?... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you...
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2009 20:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww... Sesshy must have been VERY cute!!! (I can imagine a little 12 year old Sesshy very adorable in a weird way) My laptop is fine now... I'm not sure that I am going to connected it back up to the internet at school (which will prevent me from going on websites that are not school related (If I download too much I could become under scruteny, and have to pay for what ever download I make after a GB, (in a semester) If I remember correctly) I will stay away from the inticing pull of MM! Very happy becuase (other than new chapter of course) I have POCKY!!!!! I've never seen it at the market before and of course I had to have it! (will resist the urge to open up the second packet until tomorrow... (hopefully) "I should know better? It's not an issue only of trust. Argh! Stop this. Do not fucking side track me again! We always do the same thing. We turn around a subject, we argue, we get mad at each other but we never talk. I want us to communicate." Kagura spat angrily." "You wish for the truth? If it is what it takes, then fine you shall have it!" You need a new car" Sesshomarou said in a voice laced with disapproval as he helped Kagura step out of her small car. The wind sorceress would have gladly ignored his helping hand, but she was slightly worried by the haggard look on Sesshomarou's face. "No way in hell. I love this car; my grandma gave it to me not long before she died. It's the last thing of hers I truly have. Besides, my car was doing great before the poor thing was mishandled by a moronic over grown dog. Do you ever respect speed limits?" Kagura asked as she stepped out and batted away Sesshomarou's hand glaring at him. "Interesting, you talk about your car as if it were a person. Yet you have not been taking good care of it, its condition is dreadful" Sesshomarou commented before locking the doors and placing the keys in his jacket's pocket. "I seriously doubt you dragged me all the way here to lecture me about my car." Kagura said as her red eyes scanned around the large open space in front of them. `Here lies Sakura Aihara Tashio. Beloved mother, sister and friend. March 13th 1954-October 16th 1992. You are missed more than words could ever say.' For a long time Kagura could not lift her eyes of the inscription on the cold marble framed by intricately carved lilies and angels adorning the four corners of the stone. Taking a deep breath she looked up and saw sorrow and sadness in Sesshomarou's eyes. It was very brief, but she saw it before he regained his usual composure and it tore at her heart. "How old were you when she… passed away?" Kagura asked no louder than a whisper. "Twelve" he answered. `He was so young at the time. I lost Grandma Kaede when I was twenty four and I felt like the whole world was crashing around me. He must have missed his mother a lot especially since his parents were divorced…' Kagura thought sadly. "Is mother going to die?" Sesshomarou bluntly asked his father as the two of them were making their way to room 426. The young dog demon approached his mother's bed side and managed to hold back the gasp of horror that came to his lips as he took in his mother's appearance. It was not the first time that the young demon had to visit his mother in the hospital, but this time she looked so much worse than the previous times. Her eyes were cloudy and unfocused, her once beautiful silver hair had lost its entire legendary luster and in her left hand was a bloody handkerchief. The once beautiful and proud demoness looked broken and her son knew that she indeed did not have long to live. "I know I don't have long…there are just two things I want to tell you" "Listen to me. I will only have a major regret in my life and that is that I was not able to give you the family you deserved." Sakura coughed lightly before continuing "When your father and I divorced I know it was hard on you, I never wanted you to suffer like this. In truth I see it as a personal failure. It was my faul |
Reviewed By: Ladykaa28 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2009 16:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well they are talking which is a good thing. So far they are getting somewhere.
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2009 16:20 CDT
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ohhhh those other two stories sound really good so i will make sure to read them when you post XD but man you left me at another cliffhanger...but it was interesting to learn about his past...i think you handled it well but it felt too short for me...need mroe next time XD
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2009 18:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
now for Favourite lines before I use up all of the Characters that I have left... "Now look at you…poor girl. He left you behind with a nice gift didn't he?" (Best line EVER) "You have got to be kidding me. This is just wow! You two really deserve each other" "I knew I smelled something foul. `Bitch'? You said. I hope for your sake you were not referring to the woman carrying this Sesshomarou's child" A velvety voice said coming from behind Ryukotsusei. "For a long time I wondered about what punishment would be fitting for you, Ryukotsusei. Inflicting physical pain would surely not be enough. It forced me to prolong my trip overseas when I had left a few months ago, and has taken some time for this Sesshomarou to complete, but I have found the perfect thing" Sesshomarou said a cruel smirk on his lips. He then lowered his claws, which did not reassure the dragon demon one bit, and protectively snaked his arm around Kagura's waist before adding "You are fired". Ryukotsusei exploded in a fit of laughter before speaking "You have officially lost it. Only the board of Ryu bank can fire me from my position of CEO!" "One phone call from this Sesshomarou and the decision will be made, during an emergency board meeting" Sesshomarou said. Kagura looked up at the dog demon, interrogations waiting to spill from her lips, but seeing Shishinki's face contort in a mask of anger proved to be too enjoyable to manage to ask questions. "You must be wondering how I managed to convince the board. Quite easily, you are now looking at the third largest share holder of Ryu bank. You really are an idiot Ryukotsusei. It may have taken time, but this Sesshomarou managed to buy a considerable share of your company, and turn the rest of the share holders against you, and you were too busy between my former secretary's legs to even notice it" Sesshomarou explained smiling in triumph. "Do not bother showing at work tomorrow. Well, if you do security will have to escort you out of the premises." he added with glee.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2009 18:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVELY utterly lovely. Fantastic chapter. the laptop I bought (at about December) because I was going to be going to uni (which started two weeks ago) but since then I have been adding programs to it (for getting onto the internet their (Why do I need this program anyway???) and trying to get on the VPN, which screwed up my computer so I couldn't get on the internet... (I had to use the recovery disc to clean up this little mess the school gave me) then I put on JCreator...the Java program the school recommends and it takes away my computers ability to go onto secured suites... (meaning anything with a password I cant get into now... which mean no Last Choas(online game), no hotmail, no My.monash.com (hell aka school))(and the Desktop help at the Uni KNOWS ABSOLUTELY NOTHING... I know more... thank god I have more knowledge... but the only problem is I know what made it mess up, when I uninstall the program it left its problems behind, but the only problem now is my brother cant back up my data onto his 1terabyte hard drive because it broke... so not it is currently at his friends house being restores... and getting a better version of a Java writing program on it... VERY angry at school...
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2009 13:11 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... seems that the doctor's visit went well... liked the confrontation - sesshoumaru got them good... and sesshoumaru was very protective of kagura... cute that kagura still wanted her ice cream... at last kagura asked about their situation... good that sesshoumaru has decided, now if only he and kagura confess... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you...
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Reviewed By: Ladykaa28 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2009 13:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wouldn't say that this is the right way to bring up the topic, but since he was saying they were back together then why not. I would say that they talk without any outside "help". They have a lot to talk about and well meaning friends and family will not make it easier.
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Reviewed By: *zetsuii On: March 13, 2009 12:47 CDT
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oh boy...that was some heavy drama there...and i hope she gets her ice cream cause that is very important in a relationship wth keeping promises like that...XD anywho...i hope the next chapter works out for them...cant wait till next week XD
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Reviewed By: Ladykaa28 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2009 06:22 CDT
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I still say letting your friends get involved in your relatioship is bad. They may mean well, but where will you be after the dust has settled and they're with someone while you are all alone. Yura maybe her sister, but she is only making things worse. By forcing Kagura to talk to Sesshoumaru when she is angry is only serving to make the two of them fall further apart and not allowing them to work things out in their own time. You can work on a relatioship on anyone else's timeline just because they don't like what's happening to you. Haven't they learned that much from the first time Kagura let for about 3 months? Things like this have a way of backfirng.
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Reviewed By: Ladykaa28 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2009 04:18 CDT
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Sorry I dropped out for a little while. Trying to find a job, but I'm here for now. I like the "Gone with the Wind" line. And they're talking at least for now.
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