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| "The Arrangement" Reviews/Comments [ 241 ] | | Pages (17): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 › » ] | Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2004 01:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Wufei, he's really being tortured now. I wonder if he can really handle that kind of trauma on his own. It's doubtful that Heero will be able to get past his training to help but maybe he will...
| Reviewed By: Sintari [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2004 10:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nooooo! Now I'm so worried about Wufei. My heart was in my mouth when he had the dream about killing himself and then woke up with the gun in his hand. Something has got to give here. Either he needs to quit working on the case or he needs to talk to somebody about whats going on. Preferably Heero. But anybody else will do. This is NOT normal! Also, I know this is probably not the appropriate time to worry (since Wufei is losing his marbles) but what about this Susan woman? Wufei sure does seem to admire her. And she has that all important quality - she pursues justice. Tell me she's not a possible love interest. I would cry. Like they need things to be any more complicated right now! Anyway, overall great chapter. (As always). I loved the imagery in the dreams, especially the one where Wufei was on trial. And, yes, I do think you're making him miserable. This is another warm-up? I'm not sure my heart can take it. If you don't get any more reviews from me, you'll know I hyperventilated to death from worry. (Ok, maybe that's a little overdramatic, but still...) Thanks for the great chapter! I'm holding out hope that the next part will be out in 2 or 3 days!
| Title: Review Part 3
Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2004 23:05 CDT
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(continued) ...whenever I see the word 'arrangement', regardless of whether it's for uni work or on a billboard, I automatically feel warm inside and think of your story. Just a trivial fact! Yeah, sorry the review's broken up into three parts, I thought that I'd be able to squish it into two, but I guess not. I could have emailed you I suppose, but it's much more fun to post three reviews!
| Title: Review Part Two
Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2004 23:03 CDT
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(continued) ...awake. Hmm… scratches head puzzled, does this mean I improved or not? *** Anyway, I felt kinda sorry for Wufei in this chapter, on the one hand he needs to do the investigation, but on the other hand, he keeps having nightmares. Why oh why can't Heero comfort him?!? I know, I know, their 'partnership' doesn't work that way, but if Heero comforted Wufei, maybe his nightmares would go away?!? Just give Wufei a cuddle or something Heero! Again, I realise that this is something Wufei needs to work out on his own, but a girl can't help but dream right? *Looks around wildly* Right?!? *Slinks off miserably.* The only good thing about the nightmares is that by the end of them all, Wufei is going to have some much needed closure. I personally think Heero is being surprisingly understanding about everything, not pressuring Wufei or anything and giving him the time to do what he feels needs to be done. *Pats Heero on the back.* But then again, it could just be a case of Heero not really caring about Wufei as long as it doesn't interfere with his own work; which is what poor Wufei thinks every time Heero allows the silence. Tell my poor baby it's not true Maldoror! Tell him! Also, was Wufei's dream trying to tell him something? Like… maybe Wufei's afraid of Heero leaving him?!? That could be it!!! Four parts to the story hm? That's great, especially if the other parts are as long as this one and come out every three days! Bonus! P.S - Do you know that now whene | Title: Review Part One
Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2004 23:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First dream - Damn, and here I thought Heero was being all nice and caring, it made my little heart go all pitter patter, hope coursed through my veins and my breathing sped up with excitement. Unfortunately, my breathing was then abruptly cut off when I realised the sad truth… I should have known that it was too good to be true - Heero actually showing his emotions and Wufei not freaking out?!? *Shakes head sadly,* nope, not possible, chance of that happening would probably be about .00000 (add an infinite number of zero's here) 1 %. It was a bit of a twist how you made it a nightmare within a nightmare - neat! I never guessed! Second dream - I didn't expect it, but maybe I should have realised something wasn't quite right when Heero suddenly put his own body's desires before Wufei's recovery - that pretty much isn't Heero's style. I have to confess though, before I realised that it was another one of Wufei's twisted dreams, I thought we'd be gifted with a wickedly hot lemon. *Drools sadly and makes puppy dog eyes,* hurry and make Wufei recover so we can get to another lemon? Third dream - Yay! I knew it was a nightmare; it was pretty obvious as soon as Wufei started shooting at the house. Fourth and fifth dream - Yep, I definitely got the hang of it. I actually did realise that Wufei was dreaming almost as soon as the dreams began, although I think every reader would have realised since the opening of the two dreams made it really, really obvious that Wufei wasn't awa | Reviewed By: RedHedLvr [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2004 18:35 CDT
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Wow! What a chapter. Those nightmares of Wufei's gave me goosebumps. Especially that first one, a dream within a dream. Verry eeerie!! Susan sort of reminds me of a female version of Wufei. Any thoughts on paring them off? Or is she possibly a main character in a much larger nightmare resulting from Wufei's injuries? Do I have too much time on my hands or what? Can't wait to read the rest.
| Reviewed By: Droom On: July 29, 2004 14:41 CDT
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Eep. Heavy. Just a warm up? Again; eep, heavy. (very well written tho!)
| Reviewed By: chrystal kitten On: July 28, 2004 06:49 CDT
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oh I loved this chap it was so good. that is so sweet, heero taking him home and refusing to sell the house just coz wufei thinks of it as 'home'. that is just too cute. ahh I love this story soooo much. You are such a talanted writer I will just never be able to get over just how good this story is. I check every couple of days just in case you,ve uptated. please write more soon please please *sob sob* *cute sparkly kitten eyes*
| Reviewed By: Devil1 On: July 25, 2004 21:58 CDT
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Excellents chapters. At the time that I was reading the four last chapters, I was hearing the songs "Miedo" (Fear) of Tony Aguilar and "No es amor" (It isn't love) of Enrique Iglesias. It's like they were write for those chapters. That are wonderful chapters, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for these chapters and for your imagination. Bye.
| Title: 1 Chapter, 2 Reviews
Reviewed By: Sintari [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2004 08:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, I realize this is my second review for one chapter. But I've reread the whole fic and I have some more to add. It's not like I've been checking the site EVERY day in the hopes that I've somehow been abducted by wee elves who have taken me to their fairy land, and by the time they released me from their spell, two weeks had passed and the next chapter was out. No, it's nothing like that. Really... *ahem* Anyway, the more I read over chapter 30, I think Heero was really enjoying carrying Wufei around and that's why he put off putting him down on the bed as long as possible. And about Heero going to Minsk with Armand… I noticed he didn't mention it to Wufei and when Une mentioned it in passing, Heero quickly glossed over it. He even interrupts her when she starts to mention it. In Heero's rather weird mind, would that have been sort of like "cheating" on Wufei? On the other hand, the chapter also states that Wufei is part of Heero's mission, so maybe his reasoning is only that Wufei brings out his best. Now its official - I've spent more time thinking about and analyzing this story than I spent on some of the "classics" we read in Lit class. But it's such a sweet, sweet addiction. Thanks Maldoror!
| Reviewed By: RedHedLvr (not logged in) On: July 20, 2004 06:36 CDT
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Ok, Heero doesn't want to move either because 1) he knows the EEvil ones will find them and he can deal with them once and for all then, or 2) he's a closet sentimental-ist and truly looks upon this place as his and Wufei's home. Given how he reacted when Wufei stated he just wanted to go home, I think that's the more likely reason. Another item I didn't mention about the last chapter, I'm glad Wufei didn't need to be rescued. He was seriously injured but still managed to get the bad guy(gal)! I especially liked the part where he told Hunter, you don't know who I am. heh heh I hope he gets to open a serious can of whoop ass on her later on. But I suspect that Une will get that pleasure.
| Reviewed By: Sintari [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 10:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man, I just stumbled on this fic a few days ago (where have I been?) so when I woke up this morning and saw a new chapter I had to pace myself. I decided I would re-read a few chapters first... yeah right. It took me about 20 minutes to break down. This chapter was lovely. My favorite part was when Wufei realizes that he is "part of the mission." And Heero's confusion! OMG I know we've been seeing his feelings a bit more lately, but the fact that he doesn't want to move out of their "home" seems like a giant step towards something... more. Also, did I detect a hint of jealousy over Duo's big orange dragon? I doubt it, but you never know! Two weeks!! I really can't wait two weeks. I don't have any money, or I would bribe Dawna to quit her day job and devote herself to proofreading this fic full time. Again, thanks for an excellent chapter. And, angst-lover that I am, I can't wait for things to get rough for the boys! Write, write, write!
| Reviewed By: Droom On: July 19, 2004 09:34 CDT
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Ah, loved it. Sedated Gundam pilots are always good for a grin. ^^ And Heero's reaction when Wufei called the safe house home. Aaaah. :) Heh. Or Une sympathising with Wufei, that was brilliant too. It was also very nice that Wufei couldn't get any sleep in ops, but back in the safe house with Heero working on his laptop is more reassuring then disturbing to him, well, that's about as cute as they get if you ask me. XD Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: ThisisMeandering On: July 19, 2004 03:46 CDT
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This chapter was cute beyond the word! It made me smile, and people are seriously giving me very weird looks, and the best is that you're updating quite regularly! Greatgreatgreat!
| Reviewed By: Talyssa_ On: July 19, 2004 01:32 CDT
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::chews on hankachi in frustration:: ARRRRGGGGH!!!! WUFEI IS FRUSTRATING ME!!! AAAARRRRGH. >.<
Two weeks eh? T_T ITs like some sort of conspiracy to let me die of suspense right? who's paying you? WHO!!!
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