| "The Arrangement" Reviews/Comments [ 241 ] |
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Reviewed By: Droom On: April 29, 2004 11:18 CDT
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I love this fic, I really do. :) The development in Wufei and Heero is great, and very believable. Also kind of natural like, I didn't realise it until I skimmed over chapter one again. Keep up the good work!
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Title: War Wounds
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2004 23:52 CDT
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I do so love when Relena's portrayed as a bumbling twit! Then again, once in awhile I'll allow myself to read a fic that paints her in a decent light. (Then I wake up!) Seriously though, these chapters were pretty intense kiddo. Thanks for throwing in the humor (at least I read it that way) of Heero terrorizing the medical staff. It made sense, based on his personality, that he'd immediately rip everything out as soon as he awoke. I absolutely loved how the other pilots came in and helped the situation! Yeah, so I'm a sucker for Duo... he was just too cute when he toyed with Ganz. Damn - Heero better get well soon - Wufei is just too sexy when he's in control like that. That was an amazing retaliation operation! I have my ideas on who the leak is, but I've never been correct yet with your writing skills as they are. : )
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Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2004 18:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Enter Relena, Heero suffers her look. LOL I'm impressed by the way the Gundam pilots handled those who are intent to kill them for revenge. Ruthless against harm to innocents. Wonder who within the Preventers is the leak? Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2004 08:00 CDT
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Yet another brilliant two chapters. These two parts were very thoughtful, very deep. They really touched my heart. Thank you for such lovely writing.
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Title: Um
Reviewed By: Talyssa_ On: April 16, 2004 07:37 CDT
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Gosh I dunno what else I can say! I think i've already left you a small novella of comments in this mediaminer thingie. >.< Ummmm..... ::thinks:: As usual this chapter was wonderful and fulfilling and yet unfulfilling all at the same time. >.< I started it and thought "oh its nice and long" ........i finished it and thought "Oh no, is that ALL???" Oh I have one tiny correction or criticism or whatever you'd like to call it. Your usage of "so desu" is mostly....wrong? Well, I'm not entirely sure what you INTENDED it to mean, but a) i don't think your hero would use the polite form of speech --ie desu-- with wufei and b) just saying "sou" or "sou desu" generally means that the person saying it is reconfirming something. ie heero says "you remember what x is?" and wufei says "X is y" and heero says "sou da" ...okay I'm sure that didn't make ANY sense but.... anyway i'm not entirely sure what meaning you wanted it to convey so i can't suggest an alternative really....the only things I can think of that one might say in response to what wufei said and then in order to continue on as heero does would be like "ryokai/wakatta" or "sore jya/jyaa".....but really the way you're writing heero's personality I don't believe he'd say either. Generally adding little words like that in the begining is a softer way of speaking, but heero usually speaks very directly in this story. Anyway its not all that big of a deal, but when i see misused japanese i usually like to attack it. ^_^;
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Reviewed By: Annie Lisk. On: April 14, 2004 18:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, your writing is fantastic. I really like the way you describe Wufei's and Heero's personalities. It's really interesting. I mean, it's really hard to understand the minds of people who had to go through such violence and pain during wars. Not to mention, they have to deal with life after the war. Anyway, I really like your storyline, and I hope you keep writing. It's so hard to write such long chapters like you do, but you still manage. I write a bit sometimes, but I have trouble letting my ideas flow. I hope I can read another chapter soon.
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Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2004 03:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As usual you write the best chapters, and it's a bonus because you write such long ones too. I'm glad you didn't wait another two weeks for an update because I'd probably be screaming in frustration by then. This chapter was brilliant (as with all your other chapters). I find myself liking each chapter more than the previous one. Great work. You scored again!
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Reviewed By: DirtyD On: April 14, 2004 01:38 CDT
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Smashing Blue girl, Smashing Blue. Heero having a hard time with a little piece of paper is he? I just love reading this story! It's one of the few Gundam Wing stories I still read... actually I think its the only one. I hope you haven't too much trouble writing it, I want it and I want it now. ^__^
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Reviewed By: DirtyD On: April 03, 2004 19:33 CST
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If it helps... I love it too! It is one of my favorites. Especially the couple chosen. Not to mention you do it so well! I have nothing but love for this story.
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Reviewed By: Devil1 On: April 02, 2004 23:03 CST
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That's excellent.
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Title: Pixie Smith
Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2004 17:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I felt like I was waiting forever for a chapter update! Anyway, I love the way you manage to write action, you pay so much attention to detail. As I was reading I could actually imagine the simulation taking place. I liked how Wufei could predict Heero's actions and loved hearing Heero state Wufei's skills so calmly. "By the time Chang drops half his speed in an endurance test, it'll be closing time for the training facilities. Besides the sun sets at around five, he'll run out of light." I was laughing so hard at that. I especially loved your character Sam. He's a funny character scratching away at his clipboard LOL. You always invent such great original characters!*** Yay! Finally back to the sex and fighting! My favourite part of your story! Laughs, poor Wufei, Heero's perfect in bed too. Will he never catch up? Chuckles again. They're getting a double bed. Will Heero be sleeping with Wufei, or will it only be for sex before Heero goes back to his sleeping bag? I think they should get a king size bed so that they can be more ~comfortable!~ *Nudge, nudge* When will we (and Wufei for that matter), find out that Heero likes him? And will it only be like or will it be love? THIS IS SO GREAT! I noticed that you were updating "Trial and Error" on an almost daily baisis. Oh PLEASE can't you do the same for "The Arrangement?!? OH PLEASE! It shouldn't matter if you can't, that's just my wishful thinking. You know, if I could have one wish in the world, I wouldn't ask for world peace. Oh no, silly me would ask for the arrangement to be updated every day! *Giggles like a lunatic* Anyway, FANTASTIC two chapters. Can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2004 15:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This fic just gets better & better. Not only are all the Gundam characters totally IC. I'm impressed w/ how Une is written to deal w/ changing the way the Preventers organization from military mindset to police. The original characters make sense & fit well in to the story, I hope we get to read more about Sam.
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Reviewed By: Tokomaru On: March 30, 2004 13:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So good. So very good. So very, very good. Will you continue with this story? Update soon!
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Reviewed By: Cephalanthus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2004 19:28 CST
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This is definitely my favourite of your recent fics... the characters are wonderfully portrayed, and have a kind of gritty, real feel to them. These two especially always struck me as having the potential to be really cold bastards-- your portrayal of them comes is very believable. I've greatly enjoyed what you've written so far, and can't wait to see where you take it from here! It's nice to see a 1x5 pairing... really, any combination of 1,2 and 5 is good with me, but Heero and Wufei by themselves is done so rarely. Huzzah! I love it.
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Reviewed By: Devil1 On: March 20, 2004 12:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Instructive. I'll be waiting for more. Congratulations.
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