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| "The Arrangement" Reviews/Comments [ 241 ] | | Pages (17): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 › » ] | Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2004 17:58 CDT
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Ah ha. I hope this mission turns out to be more succesful than their last undercover mission. snicker. Heero just has no clue does he? Throwing Wufei against the wall and trying to screw him just isn't how *normal* couples act. Oh poor deluded Heero, he seriously needs some lessons. I loved Une's reaction too. Now they have to act like a normal couple for months. This will be INTERESTING!!! I just can't wait. They're going to have to act normal. Pretend to be normal boyfriends. I really am excited about seeing their relationship progress. If's Wufei's excited. I'm even MORE! I really love your attention to detail too. That's one of the things that make your fic stand out above the rest. Please update soon!
| Title: *snigger*
Reviewed By: Yira On: June 01, 2004 16:49 CDT
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Oh this story is about to get very, very interesting.. again. ^^ You have no idea how much I love this story. It just kicks ass. ^^ I'm looking forward to seeing how things go. And I love Heero's little win, this chapter. I keep imagining, for some reason, that someone had heard them. Like Sally.. or Noin.. *grin* Anyway, I'm amused ^_^
| Reviewed By: DirtyD On: May 20, 2004 09:15 CDT
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I still remember when I first started reading this. It's come a long way. Good times, good times. Really, reading this I stopped and thought halfway threw the second chapter 'How can somebody write something so good?' Honestly, there's detail, in character actions, I look at this and go this is more through then the series. I wish I had a bigger vocabulary and really say all things that this is, but I just don't have the words. All I can do is say pat yourself on the back, you deserve it.
| Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2004 16:21 CDT
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Is it true? I just read Sminty's review, is her analysis true? Do those signs really mean that? *** I'd also love to see Wufei give oral!
| Title: hypnosis
Reviewed By: sherri On: May 18, 2004 05:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
( hypnotic voice )you don't need sleep... you don't need sleep... now I'll click and you'll write the next chapter :) Wish it was true :):) Your stroy is great and I really can't wait for the rest of it. I like the way the plot turns and I can't wait for another part :) so... you don't need sleep... you don't need sleep...
| Reviewed By: Devil1 On: May 17, 2004 14:34 CDT
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Excellent, 'grandioso'; these two chapters were fantastics, but the end in this was a little sad. (I will send various reviews soon.) Congratulations.
| Reviewed By: Sminty On: May 16, 2004 21:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh words can not describe how much I enjoyed these two chapters!! ... Oh.. wait..yes they can. So here let me try. ^_~ Okay,I must first restate the fact that I think this is one of the most romantic fic's I've read in a long time. Not romantic in the traditional "fic" sense. But something much deeper. When I read chapter 19, that old saying that "still waters run deep" kept going through my head. I LOVED the converstaion with out words! Them living for each others subtle gestures...sigh... makes my heart go pitter-patter.I loved Duo. However,I must admit, I did get a bit worried and had to read the end of the chapter, before I finished it, to appease my fears. ^_~ That just shows what a great job you did in setting up the plot. Simply wonderful. Rarely does ~anything~ evoke such a reaction out of me. I loved the jealousy. Perfect. It wasn't overdone. It was prideful and so funny how they tried to keep their own emotions in check. Not just Wufei, but Heero too. I know this it in 05 POV but you give Heero a lot of range. When I read you fic, Heero is like the Duo of the relationship. To me, he seems more..hmmm..emotionally aware of his own feelings, but keeps them in check so not to scare off Chang. I'm not saying he's mushy or a big glomper like Duo,or even aware of everyone elses intentions. But I think he understands himself more than people realize. More than Wufei realizes. It think Yuy choses his battles, and brushes off the insignificant. Like he does with his paper work. ^_~ Where Wufei over analyizes everyone else, except himself. I love my Wuffers though. Back to the jealousy thing. Soooo sweet. It was funny how it was okay for Duo to persue Heero until there was a possiblity that he might get him. I was really proud of Wufei when he asked. I'm sure he had to swallow alot of pride. Then when Heero answered with "Why are you worried?" Then narrowed eyes. Me thinks he was trying to find out where he stood with Chang. But that was just me. But then when Yuy addmitted to telling Duo that Wufei was "preferentially heterosexual" Lie, lie lie!!! He lied!!! Okay yes I will admit that Wufei likes women..but..does he really? Or is that a comfortable lie. Because really how many preferentially heterosexual men, have sex with men? And like it. Its not like Heero didnt' let Wufei feel comfortable in his delusions before. With the holding him down. Then when Heero says and I'm qouting here "If he annoys you, I'll kick him out." Heero's voice was suddenly harsh catching Wufei by surprise And this is at the idea of Duo ~flirting~ with Wufei. (squee) Is jealousy rearing its ugly head? Me thinks it is. (sigh) I might be in a pipe dream but I like here ^_~ The sex scene in the end was the best. I loved how Wufei opened himself silently ask for intimacy, of the relationship varity. While Heero asked for the same thing but by expressing how much he physically needed Wufei. They both swallowed a lot of pride in that scene. Even more in the end when Heero manouvered his clean up while staying in Wufei's embrace. That was big change and an even bigger step. I love it. Because it seemed so small, but when you look at the two them. Its HUGE!! Loved it. To bad they are both so afraid of loosing what they have, that they are terrified to move forward. The pace is brilliant, because it *always* moves forward. I'm so hungry for more!! I can't wait for the next chapter! I love Duo at the end. A perfect way to catch them. Perfect. I think disturbing them would have destroyed what they had. It was perfect. The secrets out. ^____^ Oh and what did Quatre feel between Heero and Wufei which made him ~know~ what was going on between our strawberry pair. I'm so curious. ^_^ Oh I hope in the future... I'm mean this is just a sugestion... I was hoping to see..well read about some more oral. (blush) And I would really love to see Wufei give it this time. OR maybe something...like forplay... a curious rim or something. (BLUSH) That would be fun. ^_~ Either way. I simply adore this fic. I love it so much I want to marry it. ^____^ To bad the I have to pratically hack into mm.org to see an update. maybe its just my computer but when I ask for most recent It tell's me the 9th of May. Your fic didn't even say it was updated. I had just decided to read it again. Lucky me that I did. Anyway. I can't wait for your next update. I'm waiting on pins and needles!!!
| Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2004 02:01 CDT
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I shouldn't be surprised when you pull something sneaky on us. I was so into the whole mission and Duo flirting with both guys that Duo/Quatre caught me completely off guard. I knew something was up with the blinds, but absolutely didn't expect that!!! And jeez, could it get any hotter in here? From the moment the book was ripped from Wufei's hands to the sweet ten minutes of them 'touching' afterward, my nose was practically pressed up against my monitor! Whew - I need to go check my A/C...
| Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2004 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Ohh! Duo & Quatre are together, that's a surprise. Well, the secrets out. Though I figured the venetian blinds being "stuck" meant Duo intended to spy. Will Heero & Wufei find out that their secrets out?
| Reviewed By: Muffie [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2004 22:00 CDT
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I do believe this story is just getting better and better as it goes along. It's wonderful to see someone who has a solid grasp of plot, character, and detail all at the same time. I may have said this before, but you've done a stunning job with Wufei and I adore the way you're bringing the relationship around. I also admire the way you're able to change your syntax to fit character. I don't read your voice, I read a believable Wufei's "voice". I don't even read Heero's "voice" from Trial and Error. Very nice.
| Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2004 18:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooooh, Duo and Quatre are an item are they? That was certainly unexpected. Since the beginning I've been waiting for Duo to catch Wufei and Heero in the act and now he finally has! It was hilarious how Duo ended up rather dazed and even funnier that he stuck around to see who got to be top. I don't think he expected Wufei to be top. Not that he really got an accurate picture since Heero gets to be top sometimes. Operative word here being *sometimes*. I just knew that the whole slate thing was important! I started guessing here that Duo had arranged it for his own benefit. When they started making out on the couch I thought I'd guessed incorrectly, but then they moved to the bedroom. Yes! The whole jealously thing was funny, especially when Wufei and Heero didn't get jealous when Duo advanced on one or the other. Lol, I just love Duo! Poor thing, he must have been so confused; cold comments, ripping shreds from each other and whatnot. I never guessed that he'd only been teasing the other pilots during the war. How funny it would have been if one of them had taken an interest in him. Fake a heart attack? Lol. I'm glad you didn't linger too long on the mission and focused more on the relationship between the partners. But I'm also glad you did have the mission, because otherwise there would have been no way Duo could stay with Heero and Wufei and ruin their fine balance. I loved it how Heero couldn't wait and jumped Wufei as soon as Duo was gone, guess that shows that he really missed the closeness he shares with Wufei. And the fact that Heero and Wufei didn't move away from the bodily contact after sex must mean that their relationship is progressing! Lovely! The rate at which their relationship is growing is so slow it's painful. It's almost like drawing teeth, but that makes it great because that means that your fanfic will go on for a long, long time *hint, hint*. I'm leaving a long review so that you'll hopefully update before three weeks *nudge, nudge* tee, hee, hee. As usual, you've outdone yourself!
| Reviewed By: darksnowball@hotmail.com On: May 13, 2004 01:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been lurking all this time, reading your fanfic but never leaving a review. I'm sure if everyone was like me, writers would just stop writing. But I have an excuse - I use a public computer (the library's computer) to access your fanfic. I save it and then race home to read it, so you can imagine I never have time to write a review. snickers, I'm sure one day someone will catch on, but until then... Anyhow, no one's around right now so I'm using the opportunity to leave a review. Your fanfiction is cool and I love it. I've only read a few other GW fanfics, but in my mind you rank number one and so does your fanfic. Truthfully I'm not really a yaoi lover; I much prefer reading heterosexual Rurouni Kenshin and Vandread fanfics, but when a friend made me try "the arrangement" I had no choice but to grit my teeth and read it. I'm not really a closed-minded person, honestly, but when I began reading your fic I'd already made up my mind that I wasn't going to like it. I expected lovey dovey, two boys kissing, but your fic wasn't like that at all! Your fanfic is brilliant, exceptional, outstanding, extraordinary and TOTALLY INCOMPARABLE (I used the thesaurus, could you guess?) I've seen the series and I was amazed by how true you remained to the characters (if they ever liked boys that is!) Your fanfic opened my eyes to the fact that there are some really amazing fanfic writers in the world, regardless of whether they write heterosexual or yaoi fanfics. In fact, I'm not sure there are any Rurouni Kenshin or Vandread fanfics that actually compare to your "the arrangement." You are truly one of a kind. I must admit though, I'm still not really *into* yaoi although I've tried a few other pairings, 1x2, 3x4, 5x13, but I've discovered that I only like 1x5. Because of you, I can't resist 1x5 fanfics. I've only really read one other good one, although that's probably because I can't conduct yaoi searches on the public computer (and my friend sent me a direct link for that one, though she's disappeared now. *Pouts* no more 1x5 links). I should probably search through mediaminer or something like that but it's kind of difficult what with librarians lurking over my shoulder and with most GW fanfics being yaoi... Damn, this review is turning out to be very long, but I think it's the only time I'll ever be able to leave a review. Still no librarian around, but I'd better hurry and post this anyway. Just wanted you to know that I'm reading your fanfic, and I really enjoy it. You really are an angel sent from heaven, your updates make my day!
| Reviewed By: Devil1 On: May 11, 2004 23:33 CDT
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Your fic is excellent and fun. If ff.net don't have the criteria is their loose. Congratulations. I only hope they be together.
| Reviewed By: Sminty On: May 04, 2004 21:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE your fanfiction. Especially 1x5!! They are my favorite couple!! Thank you so much for you wonder work!! I love this fic! I love they way you write Wufei, still prideful, sharp witted and mean! But you do it with such skill, it makes my love my 05 five all the more. I love the way you balance the relationship, with out making one or the other weaker. I love how they are evolving without becoming OOC Your so talented!! I can't wait to see were this is going to go. I pray they don't get killed. Or at least on of them. I can't wait to see when the rest of crew find out. Something in me says Duo already knows. OR suspects. I would love for them to get caught in the act. Maybe when someone finds out about them, after Wufei almost loosing Heero, maybe they will accept what they truly have. Which it probably the strongest love I have ever read. Because really, who can be with someone 24/7, work together and live together and not get tired of each other?!?!?!! And with their tempers and attitudes... That's got to be love! I wonder who is going to out them ^_~ Either way. I love this fic!! Actually I love all you 1x5!!! Thank you for writing them! ^____^
| Title: Re" Battlelust II
Reviewed By: pyrzm [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2004 13:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You asked for feedback. I think this is going really well. You have so far kept to your stated mission of not making it a romantic relationship, and using Duo for contrast is a great idea. It's working so well, however, that this chapter leaves me very sad. I WANT them to have some feelings! I think 05 does, right under the surface and it's going to come crashing out somehow. 01 seems rather a robot so far. You've got me convinced he really doesn't have human feelings. And so I read on with bated breath, hoping for a glimmer of hope! Can't help it. I'm a romantic.
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