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Reviewed By: LadyNetiri [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2004 18:05 PST
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^^ very nice! i can't wait to see what happens next! -Netiri
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Title: There you are!
Reviewed By: Raia On: November 04, 2004 22:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey!! so sorry about what Fanfiction did to you thats so horrid! But luckily I found you again so I can go back to reading your wonderful stories!!! Please write more soon I love your stories they all ways seem so real!! Well see ya!! o that remind me where can I find the site that you had that sold those mugs with The Lucky Ones piccy on it, the one with Inuyasha and Yukio? if you could post the link next time if theres any of those mugs left that would be great!!
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Reviewed By: Tetsumi [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 15:19 PST
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Great chapter!!
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Reviewed By: Shaid [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 13:20 PST
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Wonderful chapter. I'm very glad you decided to use Emma's perspective for the second half. I have the feeling you're going to be using their perspectives (Emma's and Yukio's) most often. It's an interesting Idea that her grandfather wanted to set her up with Yukio. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
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Title: Agreement
Reviewed By: Ardinae On: November 04, 2004 07:29 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
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I have to agree with slant_eyes03. I'm sorry but Emma is a boring character so far. Sure she was curious at first but there was no attraction for Yukio in the beginning. If I remember right he didn't even think there was anything that over attractive about her. Now all of a sudden she is beautitful? I guess what I am getting at is they are becoming friends but now this dream sequence thing is sort of out of place for me in the story line between the two. The kind of hurt Yukio experienced is not something a person gets over easily and now here is the super personality that is suddenly at his side. I don't buy it. Not that I don't want to see him happy. I just don't see it with Emma at this time. Her characterization was just too plain in the beginning for me to believe she is all of a sudden 'The Right One' This is just my opinion others may disagree. Anyway I have followed both stories from start to this chapter I do love your writing and am looking forward to more. Don't stop, I have faith you will make it just as great a stroy as The Lucky Ones. My rating if for this chapter only the rest have been 10 all the way for me. I'm just not too happy with this chapter.
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Reviewed By: ChAnDrA16 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 19:54 PST
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Aww. I want the yukio/emma fluff to come. and maybe a bit of inu/kag fluff along teh way. update soon!
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: The Literary Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 19:53 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story! Yukio's POV is wonderful. It's nice seeing what makes him tick. It would be nice to hear more from Kag or Inu's POV. And now we have prophetic dreams as well as Navajo curses. I love the Navajo history and customs that you are inserting into the story. And Miaka is turning out to not be the saint we would have liked our Yukio to mate. Emma sounds like she will be a much better match. Hope that Yukio wakes up soon and realizes what is dangling before his nose before it is gone. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Shadow_Within [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 19:23 PST
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oohhhh! things are really heating up between Yukio and Emma! Sometimes i forget that he's not Takashi's character, he's so realistic and i keep imagining him in the anime. Emma is really the one for him. Much love, Shadow_Within
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Reviewed By: essie2 On: November 03, 2004 19:21 PST
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this is great please update
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Reviewed By: oracle44 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 18:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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I like your story and I usually don't like original characters but yours I like.
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Title: Emma's characterization
Reviewed By: slant_eyes03 On: November 03, 2004 18:17 PST
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Because Emma is a new character...it would be nice and better if you could show how she is special...why she deserves Yukio. I don't want her to be ordinary...everyone has something about them that makes him/her special. Readers will want to know what that is.
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Reviewed By: LeeLu On: November 03, 2004 15:41 PST
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Oh I hope Yukio opens up more to her! He didn't even studder once or feel unsure about talking to her. Can't wait till the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Black Wren [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 13:03 PST
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Another great chapter. So that is why she is being so aggressive, she was told that it was her destiny to marry Yukio. I wonder how Yukio is going to deal with that revelation when it comes.
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Reviewed By: Farahlayla On: November 03, 2004 12:06 PST
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another amazing chapter! i especially liked the dream sequence :)
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Reviewed By: nycscribe46 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 10:45 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
An excellent chapter. The scene in the thrift shop was very well done, as well as the following scene with Tom. Ah, the dream sequence intrigues me, and this reader asks, is Emma simply trying to fulfill her grandfather's prophecy, or is she truly drawn to Yukio? Either way, this adds an interesting subplot to an already vastly entertaining fiction. Thanks for the amazingly frequent updates, and I'll join you for the next one as well.
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