| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
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Reviewed By: DE On: May 04, 2005 13:56 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
heh heh heh ... the pool ... heh (¬_¬) Not the same pool that Bulma and Vegeta are gonna go umm...sit and talk by right? (¬_¬)v
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: May 04, 2005 12:26 EDT
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I can't wait to see how this turns out... very good chapter... I loved the thoughts from yamacha and vegeta. Very good I can't wait to see how this pool thing goes... *evil grin*
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: May 04, 2005 09:19 EDT
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I sure hope Yamcha is not going to swim in Bulma's pool (I can see him going there for some reason but he has his own place and go to a gym's pool...but that wouldn't be as exciting now would it *evil smirk*...I've been hanging around PV too much). Great chapter. I love when we go inside everyone's thoughts and feelings. We get a full view of everyone and everything. I don't know if this is an error or just me being picky: "Bulma, where is (the) bot prototype?" You didn't have "the" in there but it seems like it should be. ^_^ Keep up the great writing! *thumbs up*
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Reviewed By: Trisha On: May 03, 2005 22:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHY? WHY?!! Why is Yamcha so annoying?! Why does he always get in the way? Why cant he just get lost? Shieeeet. Do me a favor and drown him. nah jk. You know what? I do hope he sees them together, then maybe he'll get a freakin' clue and just LEAVE! ugh. Thanks for posting up another great chapter. now the suspense is killin' meeh. You never disappoint me, EVER!
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Reviewed By: vegges mate On: May 03, 2005 22:48 EDT
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oh no, you didn't! oh yes, i think you did!!! omg what is going to happen next??? you are so good at this, it should be a sin! is yamcha actually going to see them together...LIKE THAT!!! i'll try to be patient, but i give no guarantees!
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not sighed on) On: May 03, 2005 22:27 EDT
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Wow, another amazing chapter from you. I still love it! It's good to see Vegeta and yamcha's pov since I wasn't really sure what Yamcha was still thinking after Bulma's broken engagment to him. ^_~ Now i'm really curious to see the next chapter! I wanna know what happens when Yamcha goes there only to find Bulma there too...is she alone or w/ vegeta?! I WANT UPDATEEE!!! Great job so keep it roolllinnnggg~~~
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: May 03, 2005 10:10 EDT
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I loved this chapter. Cute mother-daughter talk. "Your father wouldn't be interested in this"...sounds like my parents (at least in the beginning of my marriage). I like exploring Bulma's uncertainties...it's normal for any woman to go through that so it's understandable that it would be the same for her especially with Vegeta. Oh, and when Mrs. Briefs asked if it was time to visit the Salon, I nearly cracked up. The Salon has totally different meanings to me now. A mistake I believe: "At least building Yamcha's rowing machine didn't require participation with a less than adept user of scotch tape"....use not user. *sticks tongue out*
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Reviewed By: EleneK * not logged in* On: April 30, 2005 22:17 EDT
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I really do enjoy seeing Bulma's mother actually play a part in a story.I'm glad you are actually able to make her a "mother" as opposed to a pretty lawn decoration who servs tea. -El-
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Reviewed By: Free-sprit [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2005 05:55 EDT
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UUUPDATE! Please?
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2005 00:21 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah, cute. I don't know what made me check my email at 12:00 in the morning, but i did, and it said your story was updated! JOY! Cute little chapter, but I want more, lol. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: TT On: April 30, 2005 00:20 EDT
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And Vegeta was so gentle in the last chapter. I even teared up (imagine Mrs Brief with her hanky)
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Reviewed By: TT On: April 30, 2005 00:17 EDT
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Love it! Cant wait! V fast with updates yet every chapter is perfect!
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Reviewed By: Trisha F On: April 29, 2005 19:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
beautiful chapter. cute and funny. i love the interaction between mother and daughter. they hardly speak to each other on other people's fic, ya know. that yamcha guy is always depending on bulma. he needs to get a life and a new apartment. anyway i hope you update soon. i love this story!
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not signed on) On: April 29, 2005 18:13 EDT
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Go girl go! Ur doing great! I love it and still deeply hooked on ur fic. I love the pov on Bulma. lolz, so what is Yamcha still mopping around CC for? I love the humor in his fic at points it cracks me up ^_^ Keep up the great work and u better update soon!
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Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: April 25, 2005 11:17 EDT
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Each time I read this, you neve cease to amaze me with you vivid descriptions. This was just a beautiful chapter (even if it was a series of lemons...lol). I have a feeling Yamcha is going to figure out what's going on quite easily....it seemed he was starting to ponder on the idea already. Ok, my reviews aren't complete without one of these: "He would go back to the room the Briefs had assigned him?" (was the question mark supposed to be there...I thought Vegeta would be more certain than that).
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