| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 22:04 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AAAAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA FREAKING RIGHT! That was damn freaking awesome. I LOVE that chapter, it was so damn yummy! So why does Vegeta keep dreaming that he's drowning? Lol, I have my own thoughts about that, and it's totally perverted. Lol, update soon!
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 16:37 EDT
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Girlfriend, if I could live on lemonade like that for the rest of my life, I'd die a v-e-r-y happy woman!!! So, why'd you have to go and interweave some actual storyline in between all those sex scenes, huh? Jeez, what are you trying to do - write something other than pure smut? (Which I'm sure you'd be able to do to perfection, BTW.) This chapter wasn't just (extremely) enjoyable *cougheroticcough*, I loved Vegeta's "innocence" as well. He's experiencing sex on a totally different plane. I love his logic, tenacty and "mental filing cabinet" for all those things that don't quite make sense but can wait 'till later! I can't wait to see what happens when he and Yamcha next meet.
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Reviewed By: Caralin Fury [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 12:31 EDT
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I LOVE this story. This is everything a Bulma/Vegeta story should be! The characterization is dead on and sex scenes between B/V are so hot...I'm embarrassed to say that I find myself being jealous of Bulma. I do imagine Vegeta having incredible stamina and just reading about him pleasuring Bulma with such control and dedication makes me squirm in my seat. Vegeta's hesitancy to be labled a "lover" is perfect and his confusion about "hair stylist" is a riot! I find myself in much anticipation for the coming chapters, especially as Yamcha continues to catch on as to what the two are up to. ~Caralin Fury~
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Reviewed By: Heiress2thethrone [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 10:45 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH TO BE BULMA. SIGH. LOVED IT! CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE! PERFECTLY WRITTEN!
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Reviewed By: Elenek *logging in is evil* On: April 24, 2005 02:24 EDT
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I'm a little concerned about Vegeta's drowning images. Somehow they don't seem healthy. They also seem to clash with the entire swimming pool thing. Bad dreams and thoughts about drowning so he goes swimming... Sorry, the lifeguard and WSI in me just ain't buying it. I still have really amusing pictures of Saiyans on white and green striped surfboards while wearing neon orange dive suits. Nappa and Bardock to be exact with their tails waying in the wind. Yelling "Cowabunga" at the top of their lungs. The image is actually fairly disturbing. Thank you for giving it to me. -El-
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not signed on) On: April 23, 2005 20:36 EDT
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You're right, this story is like writing itself. of course you're the master behind it all that made that happen! I love this chapter, really good. I think yamcha is catching on to things...but i cna't say the same for the Bulma's parents. Lol, it's cute with the confusion vegeta has.
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Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: Trisha On: April 23, 2005 17:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
damn that was a lot of sex! ofcourse i enjoyed the chapter. nicely done
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Reviewed By: vegges mate On: April 23, 2005 13:32 EDT
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i'm press for time but i just had to read this chapter and then give a little review. you did a wondeful job here. your writting style is so excellent. expect an email from me!
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Title: hehe
Reviewed By: nan de mo chibi otoko On: April 23, 2005 11:44 EDT
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poor confused vegeta! that was a very active chapter! loved it!
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: April 23, 2005 10:38 EDT
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that was fantastic... I loved the interactions and the inquisitiveness that Vegeta felt at times... the scene where she's barely touching him and he moves forward into it was so good. I love what you've done with each of the characters its so fantastic and so real. Great job...
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Reviewed By: Trisha F On: April 22, 2005 23:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was perfect. update soon
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Reviewed By: nan de mo chibi otoko On: April 21, 2005 22:44 EDT
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yes you should, ooh, so orgasmic
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Title: you made my day
Reviewed By: vegges mate On: April 20, 2005 22:37 EDT
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it's so good to see an update. i love how this story is moving along (don't know if i mentioned that the last time). i particularly enjoyed the conversation between dr. briefs and his wife. that was cute. i've never actually read them having a conversation like normal ppl but with the quirks we all know and love. everything about vegeta, the swimming and alien weirdness, is always a treat to read about. so thumbs up for that! sadly though, it wasn't cool that you ended when things were heating up between our favorite couple (though it was just perfect how the chapter ended). ^_^ i love the whole scene from when she decided to watch that naughty tape till the end . you have a real knack for bringing characters to life and showing dynamism between them. loved the sexual energy, btw. i'm really enjoying this story very much. keep up the excellent work!
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Reviewed By: i dun feel like log'n on On: April 20, 2005 19:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your story thats all just up date soon.
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: starbrella (not sighed on) On: April 20, 2005 17:44 EDT
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awww, another great chapter from you. I like the vegeta perpective on it! I think you're doing a great job! hehehe, i knew somthing like that would happen when Bulma looked at the video ::wink:: Keep up the great work and update SOON!
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