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| "Facets of the Living Jewel" Reviews/Comments [ 534 ] | | Pages (36): [ « ‹ 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 33 34 35 36 › » ] | Reviewed By: oopy922-not logged in On: December 22, 2005 18:44 PST
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i love this update! it was fabulous!
| Reviewed By: Inaqui On: December 20, 2005 07:44 PST
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Oh yeah, and isn't it Hakkaku, not Hakkau, and TensEiga? Just being picky... cant help it.... Here's extra pocky to compensate. *avalanche of colourful cardboard boxes*
| Reviewed By: Inaqui On: December 19, 2005 06:27 PST
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Hey! Argle, cliffy you evil person. Nice chapter. I loved the bit confusion between blood and... other things, ahem. One question, though. If Sesshoumaru demanded that InuYasha not use the Pack Call because that bespeaks challenge, and he says he will teach InuYasha other means to call his pack.... then why does InuYasha thrum the Pack call in that chapter? Because then, wouldn't he be challenging all over again? I know that Sesshoumaru has accepted and truced and all that jazz..... but.... still....... *is confused* Is it ok because it was quiet? If so, then why does Sesshoumaru need to teach InuYasha other ways to call his pack? BTW, if you want me to stop asking these things, just say "Shut up, Inaqui!" and I dutifully will :p Other than that, good. Yeah, whilst reading the fight scene I was bloody confused, but the explanation at the end cleared that up, even if it is still confusing to read. TTFN! *hands box of Men's Pocky* (yes there is such a thing... haha)
| Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2005 17:35 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent!
| Reviewed By: jade_pendant(nsi) On: December 13, 2005 08:02 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AHHHHH how cruel u left me as a cliffy!!!! *goes on knees* PLEASE update soon, i need this story! onigai, arigato
| Reviewed By: Inaqui On: December 12, 2005 18:01 PST
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*grins* Weeeeeeelll..... I suppooooose you can have pocky..... since you've been so updatery.... Or Ghana, fantastic chocolate from Japan. It's brilliant stuff!!!! :p I liked this chapter, especially the line "You! The human hater! You love her!" that made me smile. Yourei Taisei confuses me a squidge. Just what is his agenda? Of course, I probably need to reread it in bulk because the storyline is getting mumbled in my head with all the other fics I've read lately... bah to that. I'llread it again and THEN concrit that chapter. I reread the chapter with the Kai wolves, and I much prefer it. Just one bit, when InuYasha notes that a particular bitch is trouble, before they're named, it doesn't carry through and I couldn't figure out without deduction which bitch it was (Jinx?? Maybe?) About chapter 31, I must express great joy that you haven't given Sesshoumaru a very unJapanese fortress with curtains and carpets and flushing toilets. One thing, the bit when he transforms into his big dog form was so short and abrupt that I nearly missed it! Rin is so adorable I want to glomp her. I liked the choice of Borzois...appropriate. The fight scene was good. The train of Sesshoumaru's thoughts was effective foreshadowing and Yourei Taisei's intervention was, for lack of a word, timely. "I should bite her" hahaha. I laughed. Just one type that I could see, in one of the youkai Inuyasha's thoughts, you have wanther as opposed to want her. Ok, all done!! Looking forward to next chapter
| Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2005 15:21 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, was finally able to catch up with the latest chapters. My computer died. Well, not died, the tech said, "it had issues", whatever that means. Anyways, great chapters. This is great, cant wait to see what else is gonna go on.
| Reviewed By: Mellie [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 16:12 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Looking for more, guess you are editing
| Title: Mellie
Reviewed By: Mellie [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2005 05:15 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the hard work. This is a good story. Have you read Becky Tailweavers -THE WHITE DOG? SHe has a Shirokaiba in that story.
| Reviewed By: Inaqui On: November 30, 2005 19:27 PST
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*raises eyebrow wryly* White... Fang? bwahahaha. Very nice. I liked this chapter. I think that you could probably flesh it out a squidge more, in the conversation between the half-wolves and InuYasha, but that's just my opinion. I love the personality that you're developing with InuYasha's demon side, very unexpected but well-done.
| Reviewed By: InuBaby369246 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 13:50 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it, Love it! I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 12:50 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. Loved the interaction between InuYasha and the all the dogs. And I knew about Akita's but not about the other breeds. I thought that was pretty cool. Should be real interesting with Sesshomaru sniffing around now. Myouga dont watch, he's liable to get himself squished. Cant wait for your next update.
| Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2005 23:58 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Someone recommended this on one of the sites I go to, and I must say, you are very talented. I like the way you write, how you have the characters. This is, I think the only story Ive read thus far, anywhere near side by side to the Manga. I read the translated one done by Chris. Where you mention Sesshomarus' sword being broken, and Tensaiga was re-forged and is now a formidable weapon. And other differences as well. But even as you have it close to the Manga, this is definately your story. LOL, and am so so glad you didnt have whats-his-name as a damned dish rag either. I couldnt believe the character was put in there as a rag of some sort, lmao. Oops, I take that back, he was turned into a rag? I dunno, anyways, great story, and hope you update soon.
| Reviewed By: Inaqui On: November 26, 2005 22:57 PST
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Yep, it's all fixed. Now I can give you a looong review *wink*. Well, as I said, I really enjoyed it. I think you've been able to integrate the ideas of Inu Youkai pack rituals etc without it being abrupt like some, seamlessly carrying on from canon into your own ideas. The choice between Kagome and Kikyo was believable, not abrupt. I saw no glaring typos or misuse of any grammatical structures etc. As for promotion, well, I think people are taking care of that for you *wink* I found the link in a yahoo group haha. Seeing as you want con-crit, I'm going to think a bit about what could be improved and I'll get back to you. :) I think this is a very good start for any writing endeavor. Now that the serious stuff is done, I'll regress into frantic fangirliness. OMG UPDAAAAAAAAAAATE!!! OR NO POCKY FOR YOU!!! *glomp*
| Reviewed By: InuBaby369246, not signed on On: November 26, 2005 12:45 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As always, Great Chapter! I've been waiting impatiently for it. I think that this story is very original. Your imagination must be outstanding to come up with this idea, let alone turn it into a story. please update soon!
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