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| "Black Widow Miko" Reviews/Comments [ 506 ] | | Pages (34): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: TAJE [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2007 12:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa! Whoa! Good Gracious of Life! You've just imploded my brain! Whew! Can't do this to Old Farts like me!;) What in Ham's Gravy is going on with Kagome! The battle with Kikyo was awesome! And then Diatano's transformathion! Ba-Dow! I wish I could draw! I would grace you with how much you inspire! Your artist did a speechless job! No words, No words. Just beautiful! I'm sure Hiei was not ready for that! Child! I can't wait for the next installment. I must say this chapter was well worth the wait. Outstanding! Peace!
| Reviewed By: Sabriel8 On: November 01, 2007 21:19 EDT
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I know you've probably read this line a hundred times over but...I can't believe it! Another cliffie?!! Ok. I'm good now. I have to say that the beginning really threw me off balance, it never occured to me that KAGURA would go to Kurama. I have to admit I was really relieved when it wasn't Kagome. On an entirely different note, I think my favorite part in this chapter was when Daitano transformed-- I totally didn't see that coming! And I can't say I'm not happy Kikyo was put to rest because, quite honestly, I don't like her, BUT now that she's gone the mystery really does thicken doesn't it? In the beginning, when I first started to read, I kept waiting for the moment that Kikyo would be discovered because then it would really make Kagome innocent, but now that she's finally here and killed off...well it's just mind-boggling! How are you going to make Kagome innocent now? Is she even innocent? I want to hope that she IS because it just wouldn't be like her to kill off anyone, especially Inuyasha. Crazy~ I hope you get around to updating as fast as you use to because I think if I had to wait as long as I did for this chapter I'd pass out from impatience.
| Reviewed By: ebi-chan On: October 31, 2007 10:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god... Another cliff hanger... Ugh!! But hey thats ok, it'll just make me go into withdrawals more, hehe. Anyway glad to see you're doing fine and that you came back with another kick ass chapter!!! I was so not expecting it to be Kagura with Kurama (your intention)! And Kag's is pregant - with twins - HOLY ....!!! Now I need to know why she's attacking Hiei - of course you won't tell us til next chapter, but still you got my curiousity peaked. And please don't kill Hiei, please he's too hot to die (not that InuYasha, Seeshoumaru, and Kouga weren't) just think about him and his panties, lol. Glad to see Kikyou is finally gone. Her character always annoyed me (not just in this story but in the anime/manga as well) - 2 down 1 to go. And it's not looking good for Kags since they found her ceremonial dagger in a chest full of poisons - seriously what was that girl thinking by storing them together like that. She might as well have a neon sign around her that says "hey look I killed him". But that's ok I still believe in her, even though she is now attacking Hiei. It's beginning to make me wonder if for some strange reason her miko/celestrial powers are "possessing" her body and making her do that - I mean every time one of her other mates were killed she was with child... Hmmm... you are definitely making my brain work overtime!! I can't even begin to tell you how much I loved this chapter - this story just keeps getting better and better. Just when I think I might have figured some of it out, you go in and mix things up!! I love it!! I really won't be able to wait for the next chapter now, lol. So please update as soon as you can - I'm sure I'm not the only Pookie addicted to this story (just look at your reviews!!) Anyways like I said I'm glad things are good with you and your family and I am definitely anticipating the next chapter!! Hurry if you can - but don't rush - besides it doesn't matter if you take forever, I'll wait forever!! hehehe Happy Halloween!!!!
| Title: Ch. 13
Reviewed By: halfblackwolfdemon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2007 00:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm going to beat her… she's worrying the crap out of everyone! *smacks own head* omg, Kagome *pokes her arm* Hun, you need to let your sons do this… and I'll give a nice cookie and a gallon of ice cream to make Hiei beg you. And Kurama! *smacks newspaper against hand* You are in for some serious 'No-no' spankings! Wtf?! Sleeping with Kagura? *slap* *slap* *slap* Thinking you'll steal Kagome-chan away from Hiei? *big whack* Being an arrongent turd!! *hit hit hit* *quickly turns away from Kurama* And Daitano, Sassouta, Eishumaru, SHE'S SLEEPING WITH HIEI!!! H-I-E-I!!! Not the dumb fox! *hits Kurama again* I'm still mad at you, you pervert… >,< And, WOO!! Go Zhang!!! You so kick tail! Make Kaggy sleep! :D lol, that made me giggle, and when Hiei distracted himself w/ Yuusuke… Priceless. I so wanted Yuusuke to be all 'Wtf? Hiei, have you been smokin some stuff, b/c ur talkin 2 me' XD LOL!! ---"So soon? That is rather unexpected." Kurama smiled wryly, "I knew you and Yusuke were waiting impatiently to see what we can find out from her, so I presented her with a rather special orchid as a … token of my appreciation. She can always be awakened again." "So hurry up and get your ass down here," Youko grumbled.--- That… I almost died! ROFL!!! *heavy sigh* So much drama… we need a lot of comic relief soon, I swear. Am I going to make a special appearance and just beat people randomly to lighten the heavy mood? XD omg, DARN YOU PLOT BUNNIES!1!! Stupid crack fics, lol. And… AW!! OMG! *clasps hands under chin and giggles* That's so sweet! I luv it! ---Damn it! He was going to kill the fox and the detective, and then use the demi-god's corpse to mop up their blood. They were all working for the kami, and they were conspiring against him!--- Don't blame the kami's Hiei, blame karma… it's come to bite you in the ass for all the times you put Kazuma-kun down *makes tsking sound while wiggling finger in the 'No, no' fashion* ---"I told you he needs a good fuck. Testy little bastard." Youko tch-tched.--- omg, I nearly died again… you have such a way w/ words! XD NOOO!!!! YUKINA-CHAN!!! *sobs* this is horrible! (kinda) Kagome could get killed (not really) and then Hiei would have to shove his sword up Koenma's ass so he could get her back! (I would luv to see that, I would die laughing, I swear to god) I luved the fight scene, but when Kikyou pulled that dirty trick… *growls* I wanted to pop her in the face *angry glare* Poor Hiei, he has to wait longer b/4 he can get w/ his true luv… *snickers* And, good job Kazuma-kun! Keep that faith in Kagome-chan! ---"Hai. In his own bumbling way, he is rather … eloquent."--- *hits Kurama over the head again* T_T your so mean!!!! *drool* *drool* *drool* omg, that was awesome! Yay 4 sex! XD and… twins… *cries* Little hiei demons running around screaming "DEATH TO THE HUMANS" *sniffles* it brings a tear to my eye just thinking about it! *cries in glee* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! DAMN YOU CLIFF HANGER!!!! *sobs* I really enjoyed that chapter, and I hope you can update again soon! *hits Kurama again for good measure* Maybe that'll teach you for the next chapter… I like hitting him, its funny, and I'm glad u find so much enjoyment in it! :D I can't wait until you update! Hope 2 read more from you soon! ---Nanu-chan
| Title: TOT
Reviewed By: Sango Tajiya [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2007 21:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A CLIFFHANGER!!WHHHHHHYYY!!!!!?*Rocking back and forth in the chair and crying* HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO MEEEEEE!!? WAHHHHHHHHH!!!AFTER SO LOOONG! WHY IS THEIR RELATIONSHIP SO COMPLICATED!? And for the love of god can someone just KILL Kurama!!?*Deep breath* Ok, I'm calm now. Yeah, I was just jumping to conclusions when I said it was Kikyou. I was too excited to explain myself. I meant that, since he'd given her those beads he would be too impatient to see who it really was(since Kagome and Kikyou "look alike" to some people) and then she would attack him, Since, of course Kurama and Kagome were supposed to be "lovers"....Like I said, I was jumping to conclusions. ^^ But I'm so happy now! TWINS!! But please....don't tell me Kagome's actually guilty....Then again, she probably isn't since she doesn't think she'll be taken away to Reikai(sp?) If she tells Hiei the truth. Does it have something to do with her having a cursed/possesive pregnancy? Some kinda loophole mystery like that? And I just absolutely love Kuwabara! He's so loyal. Anyways... See ya. P.s.- Don't take so long...it nearly killed me.^^(jk)
| Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2007 11:45 EDT
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*throwsd various sharp objects at you* WHAT THE FUCKING HELL WAS THAT?! HUH?! THAT DAMN CLIFFIE WAS GOOD BUT WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING THRU KAGOME'S MIND?! HUH?! NOW UPDATE AS SOON AS POSSIBLE OR I WILL PERSONALLY HOLD HIEI HOSTAGE UNTIL YOU DO!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Raeko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2007 09:56 EDT
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I am so glad I saved reading this until I had time to read it all. ^.^ If you could have seen what I looked like reading the first few lines of this chapter, you'd have laughed your ass off, and I'm not even kidding. Like somebody slapped me across the face with a wet towel and announced that I was now the queen of England…and that's just an approximation. In my musings as to how that (you know which that) could not have been what it looked like, it didn't occur to me that maybe it just wasn't her. Ugh, do I feel like an idiot now! And since I was then feeling so stupid, I started trying to actively think about what I was reading and because of that, I think I have a couple of inklings about what's happened in the past…but I don't want to spoil it for anybody who reads these things if I'm right, so I'll just keep it to myself. Even so, I did not see the pregnancy bit coming…but I'm glad it did, because hopefully next chapter we'll find out at least some of what the heck happened to the Taiyoukai! Not to mention that it's just sweet. ^.^ A big squishy part of me went "Awwww!" when Hiei had to put aside that serious talk in favor of comforting her-the warm fuzzies practically attacked me. And speaking of attacking, even if Kikyo and/or Ayame didn't kill anybody, it's certainly not making things easier that you keep killing them off! Oh, I don't mean it in a bad way--Kikyo was definitely long overdue for her trip to hell and I was pretty glad to see her go (not to mention surprised by Daitano!), but at the very least anything they knew is gone with them. Or maybe not. Reikai might be able to ask people questions in hell--what do I know? I still haven't gotten my hands on any of those books. Oh, and about "Things to Yell"--very strange fight scenes, or VERY interesting lemons! I think you do a pretty good job with both, even if they insist on not going the way you plan. Um, let's see. As always, I am totally amused by Sassouta's take on things. When he thought that Kagome was feeling guilty about having feelings for Hiei while fooling around with Kurama, I snorted into my hot chocolate. I wish Kagome would listen to Master Zhang. He's a pretty smart guy. I hope he doesn't leave them alone up in her room too long though…I suppose I shouldn't worry. As you said, this IS a Hiei/Kag fic. Can't kill him off or the story's pretty well over! What did Master Z want Kagome to tell Hiei though? I'm guessing it's a big chunk of the mystery right there-she DOES know something, right? …right??! I can't believe she would think Hiei, of all people, would just find somebody else. Stop being so dense, girl! I mean, she knew it wasn't easy for him to open up to her; how often does she think he's going to be in a situation like that? Boy, your chapter title was right on the money. I have some opinions about Kagome's guilty feelings that I'll have to sort through and get back to you later--I'm feeling too disjointed right now to make any sense about that particular topic. Sigh. I'm not going to give you any crap this time about the cliffhanger. I'm starting to accept that it's just how you roll, if you'll pardon the expression. It wouldn't be BWM if I wasn't dying for the next chapter! Back to the hug in the hallway-I think that was my favorite part of this whole chapter, but maybe I'm biased because what she was thinking about only feeling completely free with Hiei sounded so much like what I thought of her a few chapters ago! No, that really wasn't why (although I do think it's awesome). It's that…reading it, it was as if the feeling between them right there just seeped out to wrap around me. Best kind of warm fuzzies around.
| Reviewed By: Yue no Rei On: October 30, 2007 06:11 EDT
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Certainly worth the wait! The ending to the latest chapter was simply a shocker. My thoughts went WILD when I read the last paragraph. Ranging from "WTH?" to " Ooooh maybe..." The cat will be soon out of the bag if I'm correct at least for most of the immediate group. I always like your not-so-little footnotes and I loved the fact you reminded us about how celestial maidens have the legendary robes. Kagome that silly girl! After so many years she is still so naive, you do have to feel a bit sorry for Hiei for that last part. Im sure he must have had a shock! He will probably be very confused when he wakes up
| Reviewed By: VB On: October 30, 2007 01:24 EDT
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One more thing is her being pregnant going to affect Genkai's ability to compare the auras? With Kurama he may just say she got pregnant on purpose (Sooo not liking him right now.)
| Reviewed By: VB On: October 30, 2007 01:22 EDT
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Damn you soooo close !! I'm hating you right now. I was beginning to think you had abandoned this fic and now you leave me with this. EVIL!!! Spawn of Satan. Trice cursed blasphemer!! :P Sorry a tad bit hyper and excited about this update so update soon. Don't make me smite you
| Reviewed By: jen9 On: October 29, 2007 21:32 EDT
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i hate you.... i really really hate you... how the hell could you end it like that????!!!!! grrrrr.... but this is fantastic so far and thankyou for updating.... i have a question.... Is yoko just that conceited that he honestly thinks that he can get Kagome???? is he stupid??? its obivious that Hiei is the perfect guy for her!!! and is Kikyo actually dead? or is she coming back? because she has this habit of returning from the dead... you totally rock by the way! luv jenna
| Reviewed By: Anonymous0 On: October 29, 2007 14:17 EDT
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Yikes. How will her kids handle the news of Hiei being their father? Will Kagura really tell Kagome about her and Kurama's so far one night stand?, I am really hoping that Kagura's child isn't Sesshomaru's, but maybe Yoko's (if possible. hehe) How will everyone react to the babies? What did Koenma do to the one that was bought? Please update ASAP
| Reviewed By: SKnFS [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2007 13:38 EDT
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What a wonderful chapter. After the bomb you dropped on us last time and then just stopping with that cliffhanger of yours I was really happy when I saw you'd updated. This chapter was just awesome. There were so many things happening and once again you leave your readers with an evil cliffhanger. Is there a class for this? Cliffhangers to keep your readers tantalized? Or something along those lines lol. Anyway this was amazing and you've made my day. I look forward to the next chapter. I can't wait to hear Kagome's story.
| Reviewed By: MichiruAOZ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2007 08:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOOOHHHH MMMMYYYY!!!!!!!!! Once again you have done an amazing job at not only portraying the characters but also with their emotions and how they would most likely react to the circumstances thrown their way!! I absolutely love it!!!! ^,~ I swear you have an amazing gift. To be able to write such an inclusive and thrilling story that continuously makes the reader want to come back again and again, well I can only wish that I could do something with even a portion of the talent you have! ^.^ Once again you have managed to throw in quite a few twists and curves that I didn't expect in the slightest, but that just make the story all that much more enthralling and enjoyable. As usual when reading your updates, I absolutely CANNOT WAIT for you to update again!! Having a 3 1/2 yr old and a 5 1/2 month old makes it a bit challenging to be able to sit down and fully read but it is ALWAYS worth it!!!Please keep up the incredible work and the twists that keep us all on the edge of our seats (:p) and I very much hope to hear from you again soon, especially considering you left us with yet ANOTHER cliffie!!!! (AHHHH!!) I have a few ideas as to what I think may have happened but the only one who can answer my questions, and confirm or not, is you so I guess I will TRY to be patient and await your next AMAZING addition to this story... Good luck and happy writing! Ja ne, Michi ^.~
| Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2007 23:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've never been mentioned at the start of a chapter before as someone who helped encourage or advise the author. Thank you so much. In the fic itself, Hiei's lecture to the sons was great. "No one will respect you if you can't even control one woman," as if Hiei has had a lot of success controlling Kagome . It does make sense, though. "AWWWW, look at the big brave taiyoukai, hiding behind their miko mommy's skirts." That would absolutely be the attitude in the Makai. WOW, Daitano, who is technically only 1/4 youkai, can transform. I Did not see that coming and will have to re read the beginning of Black Widow to see what exactly happened to Inuyasha when he became Taiyoukai. Daitano looked full youkai visually, but to be able to transform will certainly make the challenge easier. He can transform and drip acid on his challenger, or just sit on him. On a separate subject, Hiei's frustration was amusing while he had to wait for Kagome to purify the soul part, as well as the line about beating males off his mate for the rest of his life. It sounds like a traditional Japanese fairy tale "the youkai & the celestial maiden." As sexy as Hiei is, those eyes in his full demon form would give me pause if he was on top of me. Kagome didn't even blink. BUT WHAT IS going on? Another horrible cliffie. DID she kill her husbands??? (or rather did her body somehow do it, as she obviously didn't want it to happen.) O.k. Maybe she really just tossed him across the room as an example, to show him what she could do; maybe SHE thinks she killed her husbands. Kurama is convinced of her guilt. Kuwabara is convinced of her innocence. Hiei doesn't care what happened. He knows her well enough at this point to know she loved her husbands, wouldnt deliberately hurt them, and he intends to be her mate regardless of what happened in the past. 58 pages is the half the length of a small book, and all I can say is "ARRGH" darn that cliffie. It was easier reading Hentai Bets as it was finished when I started on it.
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