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Reviewed By: Caitriona695 On: November 06, 2007 13:02 PST
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excellent couple of chapters. I liked that the whole 'family' came to get Kagome when she was at the police station. I have some questions about this whole venom thing though. I hope you go into that more or have Kagome question the nightwalkers about it all. question: are you going to tell us what happens to Inu (or better yet, show us) when he can't get some of his favorite fruit? (that is also a really fun designation - fruit) Thanks for sharing with us. I have really enjoyed this story so far.
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Reviewed By: u ignorent fools [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2007 13:39 PST
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Ahhh love Pink Floyd!!!!
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Reviewed By: Inulover1253 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 17:41 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg i am now nameing you Greatest writer of all time and Leader of the Cliff Hangers please update soon
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Reviewed By: Nikiz bad habit [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 09:57 PST
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This was an interesting chapter. I'm wondering if Kagome will tell Inuyasha about the "anti-venom" that was injected into her. Will it have any effect on him. When will he have to bite her again? It almost seemed he was going to in this chapter. Also I would like to know more about Kagomes looks, how men are more interested in her now that she has been bitten. Even her friends were saying she looked different. Will something come of that info? Kagome grudgingly seems to be getting closer and more feelings for Inuyasha while he has no feelings other than keeping her alive. Will they have any romantic feelings in the story? Or will he just have to wait until she dies of old age? Is Lilliana in love with Inuyasha or just really concerned? Was she in a relationship with Narek? Why is she so sick looking, is there something wrong with her?
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Reviewed By: Kimiko Sakaki [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 08:27 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay! you've updated!!! great chapter, i'm glad lilliana showed some emotions here. this story actually remindes of the Twilight series. xD well, please update soon!!! Kimiko =D
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Reviewed By: Leo-mae On: November 04, 2007 07:56 PST
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Ok I won't say I love this story, oh wait I just did!!! ^.^ lol anyway I agree that Narek is a downright cool bad guy and very very hot. Anyway I love the way u are subtly progressing the relationship between Inu and Kag. However doesn't he need to bite her sometime soon, its been a little while since the last time and we could use some lime or lemon. Well update soon ok ja!!!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 06:20 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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nice update... like the part when kagome was being introduced to the rest of the family... and also the last part where lilliana actually shows concern for kagome... what is lilliana's deal anyway... maybe kagome can finally figure her out... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 03:07 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another good chapter. I really love the stories you are putting behind your OCs. Rukiya's story was really good. And, you're right, Narek is great. Gorgeous.....but evil as all get out. And, after Lilliana's reaction to Kagome's revelation, I find myself likeing her a little more. I still thinks she's arrogant and prejudiced.....but a bit more likable. And Inuyasha and Kagome.......sinking like stones, both of them. The growth of their relationship is slow.....but that makes it more believeable. I look forward to reading more soon.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not log in) On: November 04, 2007 02:14 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
really spelling mistakes... i dont notice a thing XD and omg im loving Narek!!! he sounds like a fricking hottie!!! i hope you can draw, so you can draw me Narek XD and im quite suprised how Sesshy react towards Kagome ^^ or maybe next time he will cracked it ^^ and im proud of Kagome for not spilling everything to Sango, Miroku and Richard....
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 01:40 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ESPECIAL since the other stuff works properly.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 01:39 PDT
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why wont <p> work or <br />?????? SO ANNOYING
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 01:37 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't worry, your story is Great. The WORST things in stories is: Poor spelling (Every 5 words or spelled so wrong you don't understand what they are talking about), Short Hand, Wanna be Film Directors (eg people who try writing like a film script but have never seen one in there life), Bad Grammer, Bad or no Use of the following ' ; : " , . ? ( ) & $ ! and so on or oveer use of them, Lack of Breaks, and No new lines, A mixture of that will basically make me stop reading (unless its only a few and the plot is really great); The following are Plot/Story Line: Out of Character Overload (especially with out reason), Good-start-ok-middle-and-Quick-Bad-Ending, Mary-Sues (aka the perfect, can do anything person, or the other meaning putting you in as a Character), Bad Summary's (if I was going to do a summary for your story all I need is InuYasha/Kagome, Nightwalkers, romance, Comedy, nominated at the Feudal Association, & at war against the False Night King and not some rather blank statement with not a lot of meaning at all (I know I have done this to one of my stories on Quizilla, should re-do it) (OR a better on would be: Kagome finds herself 'tied' with InuYasha, Nightwalker, a blood sucker of the good kind, and finds herself trapped in a war with the False Nightwalker King. Can InuYasha, Sesshomaru and the rest of the Nightwalkers keep Kagome alive and in-turn InuYasha?(How was that???)), Bad Titles, Making Kagome live in Japan but put in American References... Culture references mostly(just not knowing any thing about how the Japanese live and stuff), Japanese Words or others with out any explanation to what they mean, and or an old or weird pop-cultural reference, or history reference, with out any explanation especially if the story hangs on it(a wikipedia link would be great in some cases) Some of the above will make me stop reading.(or not even start). Most wont even get me to vote or review(kinda like with customer service if the product fails or the custermer service was crap the customer is likely to never return(wow I'm learning stuff in Class)).
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Reviewed By: Ro0tin4Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2007 09:43 PDT
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YES!! 100th review right here!! YAY! WEll at least I should be unless someone beat me Which would suck. Well I have to say I loved this chapter. FOr some reason it just captivated me. It was a very nice HAlloween gift! 'Thanks! =D
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Reviewed By: future author On: November 02, 2007 21:43 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this chapter. I wonder what Kag will say to inu about the venom and what the others will say to her once they make it back to the house. Also, what they will do to prevent what happened between Narek and Kag. Even though Narek is the enemy I find myself liking his character. I can't wait to find out what happens next, good luck!!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2007 16:01 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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nice update... seems like the enemy & the nightwalker hunters now know about kagome... wonder what will happen next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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