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Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 15:16 CDT
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great chapter. i'm really surprised Kurama could even move around outside for that long. and then Hiei started walking again. two accomplishments in one day. now if only Kurama could get over this sickness. also, despite how good this story is, i was hoping you could speed up the plot just a little. it's great seeing all they go through for each other, but i'm ready for Intaro to return now. i don't know if you're waiting for Hiei to get better or not, but please hurry. update soon!
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Reviewed By: kettricken [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 09:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Fox... It IS quite typical of him, I suppose, not letting anybody know that he's so ill, but I can't believe nobody's figured it out yet! Yusuke and Kuwabara are kind of dense sometimes, but I didn't think they were THAT dense. I've been trying to figure out over the last few chapters who will finally discover how badly he's doing, although I suppose now that he'll be going to school, he could just pass out in public and have his cover blown that way... Don't keep us wondering TOO long!
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 08:59 CDT
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AIYA! Hiei is finally mobile again! Hooray! But now is not the time to celebrate, Kurama is getting sicker with each passing day. Ooh I bet he passes out on the street before he even reaches the school. Or if he does get to take the history test, he passes it and then passes out and gets rushed to the hospital! Am I close, or too far away? It's an even better chapter than the last. Keep updating like this and the story will finished soon.
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Reviewed By: KitsuneSilver [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 22:10 CDT
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That's so depressing, yet uplifting. Well now I'm all confused. It's a good chapter, anyway, and I'm glad to see that Hiei is slowly recovering. Slowly. I wish the best for Kurama. ^.~
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 21:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hurray, another chapter! Bittersweet indeed. Great progress for Hiei, foolish but typical fox not to let anyone know how ill he is. Beautiful scenes of love and friendship. I'm glad we'll see the next chapter soon, I can hardly wait.
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Reviewed By: Sikandra On: April 26, 2005 20:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter. But when's Kurama gonna get better?! I felt sorry for Hiei and now Kurama's down...but hey, it adds drama, and I like a good drama. Update soon, okay? Please? I'll give you candy...or cake...or other sugared substances. Unless you don't eat sugar, in which case I'll just give you a nice virtual plushie...
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Reviewed By: Candy? On: April 26, 2005 20:33 CDT
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*cries* Okay, you;re being nice to Hiei now, but you've switched to being mean to Kurama! Please tell me this story is almost finished--I can't take much more of this!!!
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Reviewed By: Ma-zoku [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 14:00 CDT
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Ooh goodies! I give you chocolate chips for this wonderfully written chapter. Ooh I can't wait to see what happens at the market!
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Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 01:32 CDT
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these last 2 chapters. were great. i'm beginning to worry about Kurama though. all this sickness can't be good. (duh!) update soon! oh, & btw, glad you got the thing with stealing taken care of.
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Reviewed By: yaoikitten [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 21:04 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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it seems your spell check is turning aganist you... durn spell check.. i knew i never liked that thing ^_^ and YAH HIEI IS GETTING BETTER just wait till he relizes how sick kurama is .. i know that wont be pretty... im waiting for yusuke to figure it out as well...
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Reviewed By: Tetsumi(not logged in) On: April 23, 2005 20:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update soon!
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hurray, another chapter! I delighted that Hiei is starting to get better, but I'm not sure how much hope to give that Kurama was able to keep down that glass of milk. At least he'll be with Yusuke and Kuwabara while out, so he should be reasonably safe, yes? As always, the warmth and caring were wonderful. Thank you!
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Reviewed By: sueb262 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:45 CDT
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You are really capturing what it is to have a loved one in this condition, and what one does to compensate. My heart goes out to Kurama, and I dread what lies ahead for him! (oh, and about your spell-checker? i think there's a way to directly edit the word-list so you can remove stuff that's been inadvertently added. following is the "help" that's provided for this. let me know if this doesn't work, and i'll look further: On the Tools menu, click Options, and then click the Spelling & Grammar tab. Click Custom Dictionaries. Select the dictionary you want to edit. Make sure you do not clear its check box. Click Modify. Do one of the following: To add a word, type it in the Word box, and then click Add. To delete a word, select it in the Dictionary box, and then click Delete. To edit a word, delete it, and then add it with the spelling you want.
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Title: Love it!
Reviewed By: SweetMisery1 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:40 CDT
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Glad that you're updating again, I sent an e-mail to whatever admin. @ anime spiral...hope it helped you have a misspelling of a word in this paragraph: Green eyes opened slowly. Kurama had no idea where he was or how he had gotten there. He remembered Hiei smiling in bed. The rest was very fuzzy. Rolling over to look at his lover, Kurama rolled into the coffee table. It took a few moments for the ache of the contact to set in, and a few more moments for the fox to realize he was not in his bed. Blearily, the kitsune looked around, trying to recognize his surroundings. Finally he realized that he was on the floor of his living room. Slowly the events leading up to his collapse came back to him. With a soft groan, he picked himself up off the floor and stumbled to the bedroom door. Hiei was in the bed, still asleep. The evening sun was sinking lower into the horizon. Kurama knew his love xxxxxxxr would be awake very soon, and he dared not leave the fire demon alone right now. Slowly he made his way to the phone to order takeout so they would have something to eat that evening, since he had never made it to the grocery store. the XXXXr i think is supposed to be lover. continue soon, nice chapter
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Reviewed By: Sikandra On: April 23, 2005 16:22 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOOHOO!!! YOU'RE BAAAAAACK! yahoo! *jumps around in circles* great chapter as usual! 26 was great too!!! i love 'em i love 'em i LOVE 'em!!! update this and Bugs soon, yes?!
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