| "Always A First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 259 ] |
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Reviewed By: Tempest/Tempting On: April 13, 2005 14:56 EDT
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Ohhh Vegeta's pissed. Good, at least we know that he feels something, even if it is only possessiveness. Poor Yamcha. Its gotta suck to be shot down, but hey, I guess he should have gotten on the ball years earlier, eh?
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: April 13, 2005 12:14 EDT
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I loved the tension of that last scene well written and very good...
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegetasei On: April 13, 2005 10:36 EDT
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Wow! Love how we saw the confusion of feelings from Vegeta and Bulma. I'm very curious on how Yamcha is going to find out about VB's "wham-bam" (by the way, loved the line about the thank you ma'am for the wham-bam...for some reason it reminded me of my dad *blinks*). Anyway, caught an error again: "When the woman had invited him to stay had her home" "...stay at her home" is what you meant right? *runs and hides* (just kidding) I want to know what's going through Vegeta's mind now...I hope we get to see that in the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Elenek *in to much pain to log in* On: April 12, 2005 20:42 EDT
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Gods this is so good it's disgusting. I love the way this is slowly building. I also like the interspectives. The writing is pure poetry. The metaphor between the scientist and the thermometer is fantastic.
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Title: awesome
Reviewed By: star-brella (not signed on) On: April 12, 2005 19:49 EDT
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As usual your chapter is great. Short, but good. Very emotional, u know with the whole vegeta thing espically when he saw them go out to dinner. n e ways, i love it! Keep up the great work and update asap!!!
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Reviewed By: Tempting/Temptation On: April 12, 2005 18:25 EDT
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*raises hand* Ohhh I want to be fucked to sleep by Vegeta! Me! Me! I liked Vegeta's thoughts on the aftermath. His thoughts on society and if he would have to fight for Bulma. He approached it without emotion and was very analytical, which of course was completely ruined by the fact that he still wanted her. I almost feel sorry for Yamcha. Almost. Great job, I can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: Tempest/Tempting On: April 12, 2005 18:18 EDT
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That was so sweet, yet at the same time I have a ball in the pit of my stomach like something bad is going to happen. I loved your vivid description of Bulma unbuttoning Vegeta's shirt. It made my mouth water with every button. I can't wait to see how Vegeta is going to respond to this new turn of events.
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Reviewed By: ahorse(offline) On: April 10, 2005 18:37 EDT
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Nice to see Yamcha's not going to be dismissed as a bit player. I love the way you write Vegeta as an actual alien(with the perspective to match), and not just a human with a tail. Keep up the good work!
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not sighed on) On: April 09, 2005 18:51 EDT
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Another great chapter from you! It's nice to hear from Vegeta's pov this is, no matter how short. So is yamcha finally going to propose to Bulma now that he wants to 'get serious' and 'settle down'. Wonder what would happen when Vegeta finds out. N e ways, it's going great, so keep up the awesome work!
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Reviewed By: The Enforcer On: April 08, 2005 11:27 EDT
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I really love this story, I've been reading and writing BVs for years and this one still caught my attetion, Oh and I love that line, "Kill me or fuck me" lol its great, I hope to see more soon. -The Enforcer
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2005 11:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter, I really liked it. Sorry I can't write a long review this time ;) but I'm in business school. Update soon!
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Title: amazed
Reviewed By: star-brella (not sighed on) On: April 07, 2005 20:02 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is a really good story. I love it so far, sorry i havn't reviewed every chapter but i just couldn't stop reading! I hope you update soon! and keep up the great job!
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Reviewed By: ahorse(offline) On: April 06, 2005 13:47 EDT
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That was sweet...Are V&B supposed to be sun&water? Now I have to go check LisaB's account. Keep the updates coming!
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegetasei On: April 06, 2005 13:17 EDT
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Boy I need a cold shower. LOL. Great imagery. I could picture everything that was happening (the way it should be anyway). I saw a potential mistake: "but she never stopped looked at him"...did you mean "but she never stopped looking at him"? I can't wait till the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: April 06, 2005 12:28 EDT
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ok that was awesome... well done chapter... I loved the interaction between the characters... I loved how each character seemed so real and each had their own motives.. and like the stubborn self-centered ppl they are they began for their own goals, but each found something in the other... wow that was good... I loved it deb good work
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