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| "Black Widow Miko" Reviews/Comments [ 506 ] | | Pages (34): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: Crazy Mishka [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2008 18:26 EDT
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10!10!10!10!10! *spazzes'blubbers'squeals* OMFG!!!! GAh, Kelly you are killing me here! *chibifies and runs around in circles* Kagome! YEs now we have proof! And the secret is out...sorta...kinda *gurgles*. GAH! Deep breath mishka. OKay. As usual everything darn thing about your work is absolutely effing gorgeous~! Your plot, your description, your development of the characters and then their seperate and very realistic reactions compounded by the beautiful way your writing just reveals things...*sighs* Of course, Hiei and Kagome, as you write them, just work. It was funny that both noticed other wedded couples checking their partners out, and Hiei's idea that Kagome was oblivious to what a little bastard he was (and he wanted to keep it that way thank you very much!) was very cute. So very Hiei and Kagome. I can see now why Kurama was attacked (everyone thought he was her lover) and I applaud (once agian) your brilliant way of weaving the story/foreshadowing together. Damn it, I love reading your stuff because I can't predict everything. Which is wonderful--sometimes I think that's the sad thing about being a bookworm, you learn to read into very small details and predeict most of the plot. Like how the heck is Ginjiro really related to Sesshoumaru~!? Anyway my Dog is doing that antsy dance, so I have to cut this short. Rest assured the chapter was brilliant and I am sure that I could use up the whole word count randomly, sporadically, recalling little tidbits that made me laugh or cry or shout or squeal (really, you turn me into such an emotional mess). Very much looking forward to your next update--even if it's a long wait. Because it's always worth it. Best Regards (and squeals and hugs), Mishka P.S: I can't wait for Hiei to find out there's an aphrodisiac tied into Kurama's bracelet. *giggles*
| Reviewed By: BrokenSouledPoetess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2008 17:33 EDT
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Damn woman! Nice chapter. I figured Kagome would say yes but I hadn't thought you'd actually be kind enough to put the wedding in the same chapter. And then...then! You had to go and fudge everything up by leaving it with a cliffy. You really are evil you know that don't you?
| Title: DAMN YOU!!! TOT
Reviewed By: Sango Tajiya [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2008 14:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WAAAHHHHHHH!!!!! Why do you DO THIS TO ME!!!!* rocking back and forth crying* I'M SO PISSED! THAT WAS THE PERFECT START! I thought we'd finally figure out who the actual killer is and .....YOU ENDED IT! aghhh.... Anyways, it was pretty awesome. I wasn't expecting them to get married, but I thought it was pretty cool. I wonder how they'll react when they learn just how far Hiei's into Kags? hee hee hee, I think Kurama might actually try to kill him^^ ahh, that'll be an awesome fight. I wonder who the killer is though? Does it have something to do with master....master what's -his- name? Her sensei? Oh well I'll know at some point.^^ You never dissappoint when it comes to these stories. Review ya later then!
| Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2008 00:44 EDT
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THE THEORIES: Gotta have them, even if they go down in flames. I truly think I have Ginjiro figured out. I came up with this during the last chapter, but it didn't get into the reviews. This chapter supports my theory. Ginjiro and Eishumaru are related. They are, in fact, half first cousins, but through their GRANDMOTHER, not their GRANDFATHER. It is canon (through the manga) that Sesshoumaru looks more like his mother than his father. In fact, he looks like a somewhat masculine version of his mother. Inutaisho fathered Inuyasha after Sesshoumaru, and there is no reason to think that Sess' mother didn't do the same thing. She had a son who would be Sesshoumaru's half brother, but not at all related to inuyasha. so Daitano and Ginjiro show no matches because they have no genetic relationship to each other. But ginjiro and Eishumaru do show matches because they each have Sess' mother for a grandparent. However, that would obviously not give Ginjiro any claim to the western lands, which belonged to Inutaisho, as he has no genetic relationship to him. ----------------- I really think I am on fairly solid ground on that one. The theory which is a tad out there is this one: I'm still clinging to my theory of the three barriers between the worlds, and that one of each of the three souls went to make up each barrier. I think Kikyou could have killed Inuyasha. I know Kagome says that is impossible as Kikyou loved that part of him, but your Kikyou was a kuromiko, and it is entirely possible, IMO, that she killed Inuyasha, whether in his human form or not. I'm not sure about Sesshoumaru, but it is possible Kagura killed him. It is equally possible that his mother killed him (perhaps in cahoots with Kagura,) or had him killed, in order to make way for her grandson Ginjiro (full youkai, no human miko taint.) We'll go with that for now. On to Kouga. Everyone is asking who Zhang trained, but no one is asking about Zhang himself. I had not realized he was around during Kouga's lifetime. He certainly knows the required attack. He's the one teaching it. As to motive? Well, he does, in Hiei's own estimation, have the ear of the gods. which leads me to the somewhat off the wall theory that the mastermind behind the murders is none other than King Enma, and Koenma hasn't a clue. It is clearly established that King Enma hates youkai. It is clearly established he has no problem with killing even peaceable youkai if he feels there is even a vague possibility of a threat (i.e. sending the SDF to kill Yusuke when he'd done absolutely nothing.) It is canon that King Enma will sacrifice hundreds or thousands of humans for his definition of "the greater good" so he would have no trouble sacrificing Kagome as the supposed 'black widow miko." I have no trouble believing Enma would make a deal with Kikyou, even knowing she was a kuromiko. Zhang, as much as he seems to respect and even love Kagome, also would follow the orders of the gods, IMO. So there you are. Now why then was Kurama attacked? I think Kagura did it because he broke up with her, and she was p_ssed. The other obvious theory is that someone is trying to kill all of Kagome's mates/lovers, but I will go with simple revenge on Kagura's part for now. On second thought, if King Enma is the mastermind as I think he is, it would be a piece of cake for him to let Kikou out of Reikei to go kill Kurama, Kagome's supposed lover. I like that theory better, and it explains why Kurama thought it was Kagome. Kurama is so creepy, and so cold. "I'll have sex, then escort her to her execution." ewwwwww. What a nasty cold personality. He has no right to get so angry when he realizes that Hiei is sleeping with Kagome. Kurama is just p_ssed he lost out. The creep. I did like Yusuke's version of calming the waters. "everybody stop fighting because if I have to stop it, my blood can kick your blood's ass any day of the week." Actually, you've given him some maturity, Yusuke style.
| Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 23:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh dear, oh dear, where to begin? I was truly beginning to worry that you weren't going to finish the book. I have to confess that I did literally camp out yesterday at the computer, or at my new blackberry, which has internet access. A friend of mine calls them 'crackberrys' for their addictive nature. Unfortunately, I kept waiting but the prompts took me to the main mm page. Equally unfortunately, I persevered and instead of going to bed at a reasonable hour, stayed up until midnight or so and then read most of it, even though I had an important work appointment today at 10. Three hours sleep. Such is the nature of an addiction. I tried to write this review on the blackberry, but it didn't want to display the spam letters in a legible fashion, so I couldnt figure out what to put in there. ----------------- on to the main program. I'm really really relieved that Hiei took that bracelet. He'll not let it go on Kagome's wrist. At this point, if it was put on, it could hurt her. Hiei's two little dragons would be bound to react, and what a physical/emotional conflict it would create between Kagome's love and desire for her husband, and the artificial magic creating an aphrodiasiac geared to making her want Kurama. It could hurt her, if the baby dragon marks didn't destroy the magic. The wedding and the honeymoon were so beautifully described. What a brilliant idea of mama's. Such a treasure for Hiei and Kagome, for them to spend the entire evening and night together. I just loved Hiei's thoughts on the train. This was the first time he could let anyway know about them, even if it was just some ningen on their own honeymoons. He was part of a "we" and the people in their immediate vicinity knew it, and Hiei loved it that they knew it. Poor Kuwabara. He doesn't understand his sister, but then, I'm not sure she understands herself right now. Didn't Shu carry her to his room while she was asleep, and then undress her? That was my impression of what happened. Yusuke needs to be smacked into a wall. Where does he get off saying "she's no blushing virgin" How would he know? That was a snotty implication she wasn't choosey, and there isn't a speck of evidence of that at all. I always got the idea from the anime that Shizuru's attitude was a combination of being older than yusuke and kuwabara and faking it. In other words, some of her attitude is real and some is protective shielding. I do think Shu's more than a bit young by youkai standards to decide to mate for life, but it has to be greatly flattering to shizuru, and it looks like he will win, based on this chapter. It was very cute when kuwa said "I have to kill him. sorry, Kagome" just as though he would stand a hope in hell of killing Eishumaru. ------------------------- Finally, finally, its out in the open, just in time to create a huge cliffie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! arghhhh. Kurama is not taking this well. How will Hiei serve the fox? roasted? boiled? shish kabobed? Aside from Sassouta, I wonder whose eyes noticed Hiei's reaction when he caught Kagome. I'll vote for Kuwabara, but that's really just a wild guess. So great of Hiei to figure out a way to get huge concessions from Koenma for something he was resigning himself to already, i.e. tell Yukina the truth. I have an revised set of theories, but will start another review as this one only has about 600 characters left.
| Reviewed By: Seiteki_Tenshi(NSI) On: August 04, 2008 22:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, I have to admit, I've been dying for this chapter! and it MORE than exceeded my expectations! Totally worth the wait...OMG. I cannot say how excited I am to find out what happens next since Hiei and Kagome's secret is out in the air! I wonder what Shippo will say (hehe). This next chapter is gonna be a doozy...please don't keep us waiting too long... With all that you've had going on, you're amazing for continuing this story so soon, so if there are any flames, don't let them get to you, you deserved some time off(though I'm sure you didn't get too much with a bunch of teen boys lol). I hope your vacay was relaxing and enjoyable! I'm glad you're back.
| Reviewed By: Silvermisttaleweaver [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 19:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I;m sorry to hear that things have been so hard family wise, I can empathize, as its been not far different eerily so really. Grats on the family vacation, those get especially important sometimes, ne? No onto the story, I'm still pulling my hair out, trying to figure things out myself. The wedding was beautiful, she gave in more gracefully then i thought she would after everything else. Shu and Shizuru make an adorable oddcouple, and I am ReALLY looking forward to what happens next.. Who took Kags form to try and ice kurama, not that he didn't deserve it, and how are the others going to react to this new revealation. *grin* i got a snicker over all that effort to make new oil and off hiei goes... oops.
| Title: Oo
Reviewed By: Angelwings21 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 09:23 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am so sorry that your Live has taken such a bad turn and hope you are feeling better soon. Now that i know whats wrong I have no Problem to wait for a next Chapter. So take your time and I am very very glad to read this new Chapter. I was only scared that you didn´t want to write anymore. I know so many Sorys that are very good but didn´t make it till the end that I was scared that this awesome Fic would be on the List too. To the Chapter : UHHHH Kurama is getting on my last nerves !!! Hu the hell does he think he is !!! I mean I like Kurama but he goes to far this time. And the Shit is about to hit the Fan now ^^ heheh but now they have prove that Kagome can´t be the murderer ^^ hehehe I think its Naraku becuase hes a Shape Schifter. He survived somehow and is now taking Revenge on Kagome. I hope you update soon. UHHHH and another Cliffie NOOOOOOOOOOOO ^^
| Reviewed By: Raeko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 08:01 EDT
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Aughh!! I'm only a fifth of the way through and I've got to go to work! Damn me for not seeing the notice last night! /shakefist I'll be back, update, I swear! ^_~ Thanks Madmiko, now I've got something to look forward to and fume about all day!
| Reviewed By: selenitypotter [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 06:07 EDT
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I am so glad you updated when you did. I have been reading this while I stay awake keeping an eye on the baby. 11 month old babies and 103 degree fevers are no fun. But her fever seems to have broken so I am going to tell you it was a great chapter, just what I needed and I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. Now off to bed for me because I can hardly see straight.
| Title: For Chapter 15
Reviewed By: Anonymous0 On: August 04, 2008 05:20 EDT
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Wondering if part of Kurama recent Kagome in some way? for not falling for him like the other girls? Has it ever accord to him that Kagome might know abut his times with Kagura? Whoever it was that's framing Kagome, differently didn't count on Hiei being her alibi. Now where would that put Kagome? Not to mention Kurama's accusation, about Kagome trying to kill him? How will the group react when they find out Hiei and Kagome are married? Not to mention expecting little one(s) Wonder if it was Kagura, getting back at Kurama for rejecting her? hmmm. Hopefully this mystery will be over soon. I wonder why Kurama from the beginning argued that Kagome is guilty and Kuwbara argued that she's innocent. Even when they have other suspects he doesn't seem to want to focus on that, wonder why? Please update ASAP I'm really starting to dislike Kurama in this story.
| Reviewed By: SFP [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 04:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Best chapter yet! I love how in-depth you have made the characters and their interactions with each other. The characters actually seem to come alive with you behind the keyboard. Totally loved the parts between Hiei and Kagome. (Have to love the sugary sweetness of fluff. ^_^ Made me want to go give my husband a bath, LOL.) And oh my! The end of the chapter so makes me want to read more! (Though I know, I'll have to wait just like everyone else.) Ha, ha, ha, pore kurama is going to feel like such an ass later. That's another thing I absolutely adore about your stories, you don't make any of the characters into pans waists. I don't know if I've ever told you this, but you are one of my favorite authors, and one of the few, who's extremely talented writing skills, has inspired me to write my own stories to the best of my abilities''. (Imagine my surprise at seeing one of my favorite authors' reviewing my stories! Wow, talk about feeling good!) Any way, I look forward to your next installment, but no rush, family always comes first, and life happens to the best of us. ~SFP~ PS: I probably will not be updating my stories for a little while (hopefully only a short delay). I kind of strained my back and I'm on some pretty heavy pain killers at the moment and I'm almost positive that fuzzy brain function and fan fiction should not go together. ^_^ Oh, bye the way, I liked your idea about a support group for moms who write fan fiction. I can just see it! (Anime Moms Are Us!) LOL.
| Title: Ch. 15
Reviewed By: HalfBlackWolfDemon (nli) On: August 04, 2008 04:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hiei's such a witty basterd *snickers* This chapter was extra long and extra kick ass! YAY! I wonder if The Dog General did have another son :S I kinda hope so, but then again, Sesshoumaru's not my favorite character... But he doesn't strike me as the cheating type *wrinkles nose* Anyhoo, I can't wait for Yukina and Kazuma's wedding! That should be really entertaining *giggle* And with Hiei hopefully standing with her as her family, I can't WAIT!! :D What exactly happened w/ Shizuru and Eishumaru? O.o Did she wait for him in his room and he didn't come to it and she got pissed at him? o.O ROFL! Yay for good comic relief!!! *snickers* I'm blown away by the details of the wedding! *gushes* Even though I'm not japanese, that sounds like a very cool wedding to be witness too! *excited nod* Hiei knows what he wants, and he wanted sex *nods sagely* LOL! "You're not just helping me change, are you?" "No." "Wouldn't you rather wait until we get to the hotel?" "No." ROFL!! Hehe. And the whole bathing thing? *perverse grin* LOVED IT!!!! LOL! Definatly a good lemon, much appreciated too ^///^ "I do like your back-washing method, onna. You can fix me a bath every night." He's such an ass, LOL!!! xD And thats why we love him. "I will take it as a personal insult if you fall asleep," xD You're going to kill me, I swear! I squealed through this whole thing! Did that idiot just break off his non-existent relationship with her?!!? I can't... *laughs hysterically* I can't breath!! "He's too short to breathe down our neck, Red. The spot he'd be breathing on is closer to …" "Go to sleep, Youko." Can I say I'm addicted to this? I loved that scene! Pure perfection, ROFL! And a nice twist with Byakuya and everything. T_T But the turd shouldn't have pushed Kagome over like that, the basterd T_T But now you've got me curious! Who tried to poison Kurama? O.o It's not Byakuya, is it? o.O I thought we just got done with the whole proving he's innocent (kinda) thing! WTF?! And now everyone knows! *pulls at hair* HOLY SHIT! PLEASE POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON!!! I'm dying to know what happens next!!! ARG!!! *grabs chips and soda and camps out by my comp* O.O (,>)
| Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2008 01:19 EDT
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i hope you put up your next chapter soon. i know kurama is pissed and i want to see how hiei reacts to kurama accusing kagome of trying to kill him. especially since they are married and kagome was in bed with hiei at the time. great story. update again soon.
| Reviewed By: Neko1123 On: August 03, 2008 23:54 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awe... i got a email saying you updated this story but its not here...i was so happy you haven't update since i was in the hospital... please please please update soon pretty please
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