| "Finding Peace" Reviews/Comments [ 325 ] |
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Title: I'm sorry...
Reviewed By: morgansgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2007 19:15 CDT
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I did like your last chapter very much and I'm sorry that more people haven't been reviewing as consistantly as before. I do like the direction this story is going and that you aren't making the story resolve itself in a few short chapters. Keep up the suspense and angst and I say! You're doing a great job!
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Reviewed By: luvyoubraandgoten [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2007 12:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Chapter. sry for everyone that's giving u the silent treatment. ever thought of putting ur story on fanfiction.net? PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
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Reviewed By: Evil-Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2007 06:25 CDT
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waaah you're so mean..I really thought you were going to quit!! you almost shocked me to death girl!! DON'T DO THAT AGAIN!!! It was so mean!! *sniffles a bit and rubs her teary eyes* anyway..if you were thinking that we didn't like your chapters because you got less reviews..think again!! I LOVED THEM AND I LOVE YOU!! I'm waiting each dau for an update and as soon as there is one I read it and love it. So don't you dare to stop writing this or otherwise I'll find you and strangle you!! :P So be good and continue!! Much love EV and oh yeah...don't take my strangle-threat seriously..:P I really am a nice person..I hope :P
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Title: ...
Reviewed By: Ananita (pumpkin) On: September 08, 2007 22:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow....uhm...guess you kindda...well nvm. I love your story, can you keep writing it without freaking me out with this kind of chapters? I really thought someone had hacked your fic and I was about to kill everyone!!! Ok, I really love your work that's why I asked you to continue it with an epilogue, I'm a thirsty reader, please update soon.
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Title: Cruel joke
Reviewed By: Mirena [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2007 21:23 CDT
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You story so far is great. I feel the chapters of Bulma trying to get a glipse of a "normal" human relations were off a bit from the rest. The new Arc I would call redemption arc needs its own space it gotten difficult to scroll. Good luck with the story.
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Reviewed By: desertblue On: September 08, 2007 16:22 CDT
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I can not believe that you did that. I was reading to catch up with the story because it is really good. You have turned Vegeta into a true syfi character and you just drop the story. I wanted to cry because you just stopped. I have had other writers who have just stopped when it was getting good and the fear of that happening scared me. I do not mind cliffhangers but just stopping kills me ever time a writer gets tired. And to top it off I have been reading this story from the very beginning. It is amazing how you have formed it into this amazing story. Please keep witing and Thankyou.
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Title: CH79
Reviewed By: venuslegacy not logged On: August 10, 2007 05:43 CDT
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Will trust work in this environment? Earth is a much different place. I wonder what Gideon has up his sleeve.
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Title: ch78
Reviewed By: venuslegacy not logged On: August 10, 2007 05:31 CDT
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Oh my gosh I can't believe how much has happened, Mischa can't be dead that is too cruel, I hoped she would be there for the whole Journey, it seems that Vegeta will have to encounter Gideon sooner than he expected. I was quite surprised that Vegeta trusted a stranger, I thought it was a bit out of character, not only that but he let Trunks out of his sight, if anything I thought he would be even more guarded than usual. Nevertheless I am very intrigued by these new developments, this seems like it should be a sequal as it has a different tone to the previous chapters in the story. the chapter 'More than words' felt like a conclusion and then everything after that chapter feels like a new story, the next episode. Can't wait to see what happens next.
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Title: ch73
Reviewed By: Venus Legacy On: August 09, 2007 15:05 CDT
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I'm not sure about this chapter, I like where it is heading, but it seems like it would be better if it happened much earlier. The previous chapter felt like a conclusion, this seems like a new beginning. But I am interested to see where you take this, although I'm not sure exactly what Vegeta expects to achieve, not everyone gets the opportunity to revisit their past, repentance must come from within, they usually find peace within themselves, which I thought Vegeta achieved in the previous chapters. To embark on this journey, hmm I don't know, does he want to be villified by people in order to truly move on, to see the hatred, scorn and curses from the mouths of others? Is this not a continuance of the inner torment he experienced with the flashbacks, not letting go of memories in order to punish himself?
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Title: ch72
Reviewed By: Venus Legacy On: August 09, 2007 14:35 CDT
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Ah that's one of my favourite songs Extreme 'More than words' very fitting for how Vegeta feels
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Title: CH69
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy not logged On: August 09, 2007 11:46 CDT
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That was a beautiful chapter, I liked the metaphorical use of demons/dementia to explore Vegeta's inner psyche
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Title: ch65
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy not logged On: August 09, 2007 06:37 CDT
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Oh my gosh, these last couple of sentences really struck, me especially Vegeta's response so poignant and tragic. "But he never won. That should give you some pride that he stole back." "He won." Vegeta sighed turning his back, "If he hadn't I wouldn't need to be here."
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Title: ch51
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy not logged On: August 05, 2007 09:43 CDT
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I really liked the altercation with Bulma and Vegeta towards the end, the heavy silence was so strong between them,and when Vegeta said: ""I am so sick of talking." " That really struck me, it must be tough on him to be doing so much and not feeling any improvement, doing things which he would not normally do, I can understand why he reacted the way he did, I do feel for Bulma though, but I guess because Vegeta is not used to someone acting selflessly for his benefit that he can not help but respond with suspicion and doubt towards that person.
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Title: Ch47
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 02:01 CDT
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Wow, I weren't expecting that, I can't believe Nesa did that, she fooled me, twice lol. The first half of this chapter is very fast paced, a lot happened in one chapter, it kind of gave the impression that the story was concluding, it definitely picked up more towards the end. I really feel sorry for Trunks, though, he's been through tooo much. I thought it was a bit wrong for Bulma to tell everybody else about Nesa's child without telling her son first, I'd imagine it would be embarassing for Trunks finding out something like that, and knowing everyone else discussed it before hand.
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Title: ch46
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 01:40 CDT
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I read this story a while ago, but left off at this chapter I'm not too sure about it,I guess I didn't understand why Bulma would test Vegeta like that, maybe if something like this happened earlier during the the android or cell times, but after all they been through, the therapy meetings, cancer, it seems like such a dramtic and fast U-turn in their relationship. The way Bulma lashed into Trunks when he doubted Vegeta's love was quite harsh, and yet Trunks only doubted because he didn't know Vegeta's whole story; Bulma seems a bit hypocritical here to be doubting when she does know his story. It seems quite cruel considering how fragile Vegeta is at the moment.
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