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| "Unlikely Bond" Reviews/Comments [ 466 ] | | Pages (32): [ « ‹ 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 › » ] | Reviewed By: Chloe A. C. On: July 23, 2006 04:04 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's me again! Or the first time... I'm not sure if I've reviewed before. Anyway, I love this story. I check it every day. It's kinda ridiculous, but still, I can't help it. Anyway, I really want Vegeta to somehow let Goku know *why* he won't spar with him. I know it's a good part of the story, but I can't help wanting the confusion to clear up, at least sometime. It's good that you've got Vegeta so in-character, he really is like that, feeling he shouldn't have to/not wanting to explain his reasons for what he does. The real reason behind Vegeta's not sparring would be a big shock to everyone, I would love to read their reactions. Anyway, keep up this story, it's amazing. Yay for your writing skills!
| Reviewed By: Webtester (logged out) On: July 19, 2006 11:07 PDT
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Ooops I chopped off asentence there. "It could just be the pregnacy thinking, but Goku's longing for close friendship (more?) from the saiyan prince." should be It could just be the pregnacy thinking, but Goku's longing for close friendship (more?) from the saiyan prince, has been around for along time.
| Reviewed By: Webtester01 (logged out) On: July 19, 2006 11:04 PDT
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You are such a tease! ;-p The clothing shop was rather neat. I liked how you presented everything in therre, and the reactions of Goten, Trunk and Goku. I get the impression that Goku has a sub consious need for more physical contact with Vegeta. It could just be the pregnacy thinking, but Goku's longing for close friendship (more?) from the saiyan prince. Chichi's reaction to the cost of the clothing was priceless. As for sewing in tail holes in the pants... I think there are already tail holes in the pants. :) I look forward to the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2006 15:25 PDT
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Aha, I thought the tail would grow back! Or I hoped, what with Goku's pains in the lower back. The regeneration scene was great. Interesting method for Vegeta to get his back, too. I'm finally caught up, so now I can read the other reviews and the posts at the Salon. This story is giving me a knot in my stomach when I read it, I feel so sorry for poor Goku. Will we be hearing more of his inner thoughts? Such as how his sense of manhood might be suffering from being treated like a woman, carrying like a woman, not to mention the presence of this belly in the way of his and Chichi's intimate times, or worry about looking like a freak of nature out in public (hmm, he could always tell people that he's wearing one of those prosthetics guys sometimes put on to see what it's like for their wife, but with two kids already people might not buy that. Maybe he could say it's just a beer belly, heh) Is he having any thoughts now on his saiyan status as a third class, now that he knows how lowly they were truly thought of (as "property") and used as "livestock" for breeding, and especially about Horenz's comment to him about how it was in Vegeta's right as prince to take him whenever he wanted? He has to be thinking about this now that he knows, especially when faced with the Briefs always expressing their pride in Vegeta's royal heritage and at being/having royal heirs. Can he abide by that pride knowing how his own people were treated? And I'm still suspicious about Horenz- don't saiyans have regen tanks? You know how it is with villains when you don't actually see the dead body...
| Reviewed By: Chloe C On: July 17, 2006 02:47 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Eeee! I've been reading this since the early chapters and I don't believe I've ever properly reviewed it. (Shame on me...) This is a *wonderful* story! I really am glad that you've updated it, it's currently a favorite of mine. I admit I am a V/G fan, but I will be satisfied even if nothing comes of that. (Can't lie though, the hints of it are adorable.) I just want to say that I hope you continue to post more chapters and to keep up the amazing work. I love how in character *everyone* is, and how you are looking at the story from so many different angles and keeping up with it all. You are a wonderful writer and I can't wait for the next installment of this. ^^
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2006 17:51 PDT
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Done with chapters 21-30. Gah, I'm exhausted from the sheer number of angsty emotional confrontations! *passes out* I was surprised that a debate over whether or not to keep the child was included. Usually in mpregs it's "the baby's coming" and that's that. A lot of people were behind Vegeta on it, eh? Well I say if there were ever a good reason for ending a pregnancy that would be it, but that just wouldn't be Goku. But Vegeta and his tantrum, Jeebus... Maybe I'm being harsh, but pity and heartfelt conversations or not, I felt like Trunks and Goten and the rest and even Bulma let Vegeta off way too easily for his vicious assault on a pregnant person and attempt at do-it-yourself abortion. o.O I'm not feeling particularly sympathetic toward Vegeta or Bulma right now. Vegeta's endless personal angst is tiring (but then I've never been a fan of listening to him rail against his inner demons), and Bulma's constantly making excuses for her man's angry and violent behavior gives me the creeps (this is why I've never been a fan of BV- it just reminds me too much of how spousal abuse happens in real life). I thought Goten's breakdown to Gohan and Goku was well done, and the emotions very true even when they weren't ones he could be proud of (the "I'm glad it wasn't me" part). So no more surfer-boy hairdo for our youngest Son, huh? *sniffle*
| Reviewed By: Rourinu On: July 15, 2006 18:09 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man, you've really gotten me back into the DBZ fandom again. Thanks for that. Your writing seems so flawless to me. Very enjoyable. I feel bad for Goku. Looks like he's getting depressed and Vegeta's seemingly lack of interest in the pregnancy isn't helping matters. I look for updates to your fic almost daily, hehe, and I'm thrilled whenever there's a new chapter to read. Fantastic job and I can't wait for more.
| Title: chap 42
Reviewed By: Venus Legacy (not logged in) On: July 15, 2006 08:46 PDT
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I really enjoyed this chapter, it seemed as if Goku was really going through an emotional roller coaster in this scene, more so than usual, I really felt for him. And the Vegeta and Goku interaction was classic, I wonder what conclusion Vegeta will reach as he reevaluates his relationship with Goku. His closing line was very poignant indeed "I felt nothing." I wonder if he is just referring to the movements of the baby, or if he is also refferring to other things in his life, for that one single line seemed so all-encompassing, like it carried a world of meaning for vegeta.
| Reviewed By: aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa On: July 15, 2006 08:06 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was a great chapter keep em' coming, i thourely enjoyed it.
| Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 06:19 PDT
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How could he be so curel. i understand this is hard for everyone, but damn it's his child too. a true sayian baby 100% and i would at least thought for vegeta that, that was a good thing. i'm torn really on how i feel about both their behaviors. I know if that were me i would be so hurt. thanks for the update. Maria.
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 01:08 PDT
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Okay! I'm up to chapter 20 now. Oh geez, I don't know how I could come up with an adequate review for everything but I'll try. I love how you're doing Goten, he's just like I always pictured him to be at that age-- the sweet and caring Son that he is, yet very modern and a little rebellious and so very much a *teenage boy* hehheh! Daikkon is a great OC, so polite and formal and loyal to the old ways-- he's cute. I understood Daikkon right away, but I had to check my Japanese/English dictionary to get Horenz-- hourensou, spinach. Good one, I love it when people stick with the veggie names. It sounds funny coming from a G/V aficionado, but it's refreshing to see the hate back in their relationship, and to see the guys in solid and loving relationships with their wives; I'm anxious to see how that will all be affected by the pregnancy. With the way Veggie feels about Goku now, I'm envisioning a monster custody battle over that kid. The love scenes were beautifully done, so tender and intimate. I loved the "You are quite vulgar." line, a little in-joke reference to the "vulgar woman" comment, I see.^^ Other favorite lines: "Dude, my dad came back from the dead and wasn't treated like this." (I just love Goten!) and "But Vegeta seemed to hoard misery, as if he didn't have anything to make him feel pain, he might not be able to feel at all." (awesome line) I'm sure there were others too but those are the ones that stand out the most for me at the moment. Well done! I'm off to read more.
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2006 00:26 PDT
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B, I'm really enjoying your fic so far! I'm currently up to chapt 10 and I've just printed out the next 10. And I'm not reading any of the reviews cause I don't want to spoil anything. The plot is compelling, and I'm anxious to see what happens next. The characterization is good (I loved Bunni being Bunni-- look who's here, it's Piccolo! and does anyone want snacks?), and I love the emotions and the angst, and especially Goku and Vegeta's reactions to what they had to do to appease their captors, emotions of horror and revulsion. I thought it was fitting. I'll have to read on and see if their feelings stay that way, ne?
| Reviewed By: SuperSaiyanJoy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2006 06:00 PDT
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Great chapter! You're doing a wonderful job on this story. I like how Vegeta comes across in this chapter. He doesn't show that he cares but deep down we know he does. YAY for Vegeta getting his tail back! And don't you worry about the length, like you said when the chapter is done it's done. Can't wait for the next one!!
| Reviewed By: Webtester01 (logged off) On: June 25, 2006 20:46 PDT
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Both chapters were wonderful! Trunks and Goten realy had some deep thoughts about where they stood as people. Vegeta seems to be loosening up a bit. And Goku continuous reminder of the new life is keeping him in check. His grumyness is funny. His mood swings will be starting soon, as well as the cravings of strange foods, among *other* cravings... anyway loves these. Everyone's response to Vegeta's new 'accessory', especially Bulma keeps things on a warm note. :D Don't worry about chapter length. So far all chapters have been great. Take your time and persevere.
| Title: chapter39
Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2006 17:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay, another one ^^, ~ lol, i loved the scene with Trunks and Goten, that was really funny XD ~ and Vegeta's going to grow his tail back? WOOT! ^_^ ~ keep on going! ^-^
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