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Reviewed By: thehitchhika On: January 12, 2006 14:52 PST
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Yay They've been rescued!!! I'm hoping vegeta went back to finish off that no-good-barely-saiyan general. But then again i hope not....he wasn't gone for long enough to make it a truly painful ending for the guy. *quickly kicks plans for what would have happened to our good general if it was her decision under the desk* Anyways, really am liking where this is going, it's such an original take on the V/G couple! I just love it!! Hope Goku is ok, you've described his reaction to the ordeal very well so far, particularly the, "Putting the past behind us" attitude he displayed in the cell, but how is he going to cope if his friends and family find out what He and vegeta had to do on that ship? If there's anything i could do to help (betaing, sporking etc.) my email is thehitchiker at hotmail.co.uk Look forward to the next chap! xx HH
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: January 07, 2006 22:30 PST
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Yay they are free! I look forward to more. :D
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: December 29, 2005 21:49 PST
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Yes! Goku will most certainly talk with the general. As for Vegeta... I wonder what he is going to do. Your portrayal of the characters is captivating. I will be looking forward to the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Pixelgoddess (not logged in) On: December 29, 2005 18:13 PST
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I think your not going into the sexual details was an excellent decision. It is rare to see stories deal with the aftermath and reactions - nicely done. Vegeta is a much better parent than people give him credit for, and his own protectiveness is well presented here. Nice twist with this chapter - can't wait to see the upcoming butt-kicking.
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Reviewed By: spendragon87 (lazyness dose not allow me to log) On: December 28, 2005 16:52 PST
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WTF? you can't end it there, Is the general going to see if Goten can carry children too? You need to update like realy quick, plz.
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Title: (I hate script bugs)
Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: December 26, 2005 21:58 PST
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Well done! I noticed two word errors: In ââ'¬Å"If the children our safe....does it matter what we had to do...ââ'¬ our should be
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: December 26, 2005 21:56 PST
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Well done! I noticed two word errors: In “If the children our safe....does it matter what we had to do...†our should be
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: December 26, 2005 21:54 PST
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Well done! I noticed two word errors: In ÃÆ'Ã'¢Ã¢'&At ilde;'¬Ã…"If the children our safe....does it matter what we had to do...ÃÆ'Ã'¢Ã¢ ;'Ã'¬ our should be
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Title: keep 'em coming!!
Reviewed By: SuperSaiyanJoy [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2005 18:17 PST
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Love the new chapters, although at first I was disappointed that the lemon wasn't in there but when I read your explanation I couldn't help but agree. So great job!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!
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Reviewed By: Pixelgoddess (not logged in) On: December 21, 2005 15:56 PST
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Wow - nice story so far. I really like your characterization of Vegeta here. He really is a good father. Looking forward to seeing how they deal with this predicament.
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2005 16:41 PST
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So full of angst! I wonder how Vegeta will respond after the General's latest ultimatum. Keep it up. I look forward to more.
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2005 21:03 PST
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I saw that comming... but... Vegeta and Goku/Kakarrot are not going to like that one bit. If Vegeta comes to believe it, then thoughts of what could have been, may pop into his head... or not. Well done. I think that was a great place to stop, but I would have liked to see the looks on their faces after it all sunk in. LOL Looking forward to the next update. :)
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Reviewed By: SuperSaiyanJoy [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2005 13:46 PST
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*gasp* What a cliffhanger!! I can't wait until you update again!! Keep it up!!!
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2005 15:38 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story so far!! Your presentation of mystery and angst is very exciting and captivating. You must continue and finish this wonderful story. Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: SuperSaiyanJoy [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2005 11:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you've got a great start!! And I think the chapter lengths are fine. Keep writing and I can't wait for another chapter!!
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