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| "Unlikely Bond" Reviews/Comments [ 466 ] | | Pages (32): [ « ‹ 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 › » ] | Title: Chapter 59
Reviewed By: GokuGirl On: March 15, 2007 11:16 PDT
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Wow. It's been a while since I've reviewed. I still very much love this story. Everyone is still very much in character. Even Vegeta, which is awesome! It's good that you're gradually changing his outlook on things instead of rushing. Still awesome. Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: Kurochan21 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2007 09:38 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was so happy when I did a random check and found that you had written a new chappie! I'm very interested in seeing how the living arrangements will pay off. This is one of the few fics I've followed avidly. Good job!!
| Reviewed By: Princess Koriandr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2007 21:51 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another excellent chapter! This is the true highlight of every week for me. I can't wait for the next.
| Title: Chapter 59
Reviewed By: Katiefoolery [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2007 18:29 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Such a wonderfully long chapter with so much to enjoy! I particularly liked the character development that went on this one and the way you managed to focus and explore the relationships Vegeta has with various characters. It was just fascianting and such a rewarding read. I loved the scenes with Trunks and Goten, too. The dialogue you write for them is so much fun to read - it seems so natural and realistic, too. I also like the subtlety with which you're exploring their friendship and the little hints of more that surround it.
| Reviewed By: Kurochan21 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2007 01:54 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well everything was perfect as you can see except I found a few spelling errors but not many. I read the first 8 chpts in Pixellgoddess' website and have been searching for the rest of this fic since. It was definitely worth the search; you cannot imagine my surprise when I saw that there were 50 more chpts I could read. I only stopped to eat and bathe and it is now 5 am... I will wait with bated breath for the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Star-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 20:43 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, while I seem to debate with myself whether or not I appreciate DBZ angstfics or not, I must say honestly, I started reading this fic and stopped around chapter 30. Maybe I found it a little too much for my "original DBZ value" taste. But, I gave it another chance this week and this time got really into it, and am now up to date. I do agree with some people, some chapters seemed to drag and reiterate already founded ideas. Still, the way you write has me captivated and on the edge for the next chapter. It is very well written. As for originality, I have no idea who started the whole, "third class pregnancy" thing, but I never seemed to stomache it, being it just too far away from canon DBZ. But your story is actually telling a good story and less of a bad event, so to speak. I give you major props for tieing many different ends together to create this magnificent story. I very much can't wait to see what you do with the so many opportunities you hinted at in all different chapters. n__n As readers, we can see your writing does indeed have many possibilities for each relationship or plot turn. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: February 28, 2007 14:48 PST
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Another great set of chapters. I finally got a chance to read and review. Anyway, Chichi seems to be living less in denial, now that he has become aware that saiyan lifespans are longer than of human. Reading your latest chapter here, I get the impression that Daikon's estimation was conservative. I wonder if Goku's time with Chichi has become more precious to him, since he knows that his time with her is shorter than he realizes. Perhaps the same thoughts are on the Prince's mind. On another note, I wonder why Trunks has not been actively searching for a girlfriend. Also I think that the saiyan family structure that you mentioned, may be a solution to their current predicament. Both families were closely knit as it was, before the incident. I think Goku, Vegeta, Chichi, and Bulma will get a chance to put all their concerns on the proverbial table, with the upcoming discussion. Well I guess I rambled a bit, but I wait earnestly for the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 00:31 PST
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Piccolo's explanation sounds reasonable. Hmm, tantalizing hints of possible future cohabitation. Workable, but I think both Goku and Chichi would hate leaving the country life.
| Title: Poor Vegeta, how sad.
Reviewed By: LupinGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2007 07:22 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...as King Kai once said. Just what Vegeta may have gone through while in Frieza's service has always been a source of intrigue for me, as it is for many others. There are of course a lot of fics that illustrate such brutual confrontations between the young prince and the tyrant. The empathy arousing manner in which you wrote the sequence has made this the most effectively written take I've ever read, in my opinion. Frieza's diabolically intelligent, calculating, and insidious character shine through like the cold light of Lucifer. Perfectly, villainously evil. Your illustration of Vegeta's short and brutal journey from proud prince to violated victim was expertly done. You just can't help but feel Vegeta's emotions, from trepidation and growing unease, to panic, to abject humiliation. Expertly written. On a different note, I could see a bit of Goten's rougish irreverence show throuh in Uncle Raditz! After all, Goten had to have gotten that personality somewhere! Nice touch. :) That was a nice addition of levity towards the end, too; We realize that when Goku told Vegeta "I don't understand", he meant he really didn't understand! Only Vegeta could bare his soul in such an underhanded manner. Lol!
| Title: Poor Vegeta, how sad.
Reviewed By: LupinGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2007 07:18 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...as King Kai once said. Just what Vegeta may have gone through while in Frieza's service has always been a source of intrigue for me, as it is for many others. There are of course a lot of fics that illustrate such brutual confrontations between the young prince and the tyrant. The empathy arousing manner in which you wrote the sequence has made this the most effectly written take I've ever read, in my opinion. Frieza's diabolically intelligent, calculating, and insidious character shine through like the cold light of Lucifer. Perfectly, villainously evil. Your illustration of Vegeta's short and brutal journey from proud prince to violated victim was expertly done. You just can't help but feel Vegeta's emotions, from trepidation and growing unease, to panic, to abject humiliation. Expertly written. On a different note, I could see a bit of Goten's rougish irreverence show throuh in Uncle Raditz! After all, Goten had to have gotten that personality somewhere! Nice touch. :)
| Reviewed By: Princess Koriandr [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2007 06:15 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't tell you how excited about this fic I am. Seriously, this story is one of the highlights of every week. [I know that means I'm pretty sad in real life, but truth is truth, right?] And every chapter is better then the previous one! Its rare to find great storytelling on fanfiction sites. The majority of it is *coughgarbagecough* but I'm glad to see there are people that takes the art of writing seriously enought to care about what they produce. I can't wait to see more from you in the future. Kenya
| Title: Chapter 58
Reviewed By: Katiefoolery [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2007 01:57 PST
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I like all the little bits and pieces you seem to be setting up here. My head's full of questions after reading this one. I'm wondering what "IAN" is going to reveal after it sorts through that information and I'm also wondering where Daikkon was hiding out for the entire chapter. I love the scenes with Goten and Trunks and the dialogue they have - it's so nicely done and you get a real feel of how close they are to each other. And Goku is just adorable with the twins.
| Title: Saaaay iiit.....
Reviewed By: LupinGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2007 10:39 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Musical Magical Potty Seat!! :D I've been laughing out loud over instances in the last few chapters, but this one had me howling! Lol!! I am amazed how much you managed to endear Goten to me! I am just loving him! I am also impressed by the fact that you can write angst and humor equally well. It has been a pleasure to read up to this point. I regret however that other potentially plot broadening elements that could have been utilized were not. The renegade Saiyans for example: Since there was no concrete evidence of their demise, this would have been a perfect opportunity to bring them back into the fic. Perhaps try to get their hands on the baby? Granted I've not yet finished the story, but the fic is nearing a close and I'm assuming that the Saiyans will not be showing up again. Guess I can always check for a sequel!
| Title: Chapter 39
Reviewed By: LupinGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2007 06:27 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to write a quick review for chapter 39. I was laughing out loud just the whole way through over Goten's and Trunks's shenanigans! (that's right - I used the word 'shenangigans') Their conversation was hilarious, and so very teen male. The content of your character interactions really is among the most enjoyable aspects of this fic!
| Title: Horenz Returning?
Reviewed By: LupinGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2007 05:53 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've really been enjoying the interactions between all the characters, particularly those between Vegeta and Bulla. Conversing with his little princess demands that he step out of his gruff character a bit. Hilarious and oh so sweet! You absolutely excel at writing angst, and your action sequences are exceptional. I'd like to see more of that - some more situations that the appearance of the rogue Saiyans brought about. At this point in the story the chapters have become somewhat cyclic and redundant, and I find myself wondering if Horenz will again make an appearance. Since neither Vegeta or Goku had ascertained his demise, he could very well show up again and attempt to claim their child. That would shake things up a bit. ...pop out that kid, Kakkarot!
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