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| "Unlikely Bond" Reviews/Comments [ 466 ] | | Pages (32): [ « ‹ 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 › » ] | Title: WOW
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2006 21:11 PST
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Wow both chapter took my breath away. this story as taken a life of it's own. i still widh vegeta would open up more. i was also happy that vegeta got one up on chichi.
| Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2006 18:56 PST
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Wonderful chapter!!! I like everyones reactions. And the feelings of the people really made the party more realistic. As far as Goku's conversation with Yamcha, I wonder how much of it Goten overheard. Vegeta really did well to defend Bulma, and to show up. So much for Chichi's simmering in silence. That was nice of Mal, to send those gifts. I look forward to the next chapter. Also there are some spacing errors where two or more words are joined together. Other than that, the grammar is fine.
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2006 00:40 PST
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Wait, Mal is straight? But he's so flamboyant! XD Again, I gotta tell you that I *love* your Goten. The good-buddy interaction with him and Trunks is fantastic. It was interesting how Trunks reminded Bura to be proud of her human side too- you don't often see that in fics. (I'm actually not fond of Bura cause I see her as mucho spoiled, hehheh). I'm glad your and your beta's computer issues are resolved (you got the next chapter out by Thanksgiving weekend, just like I'd hoped!) and I look forward to new chapters.
| Title: amazing
Reviewed By: trynia merin On: November 30, 2006 13:21 PST
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wow, chapter 7 made me shiver. What fantastic emotion here. Sorry I'm taking so long on this, but it's worth it!
| Reviewed By: GokuGirl On: November 26, 2006 22:17 PST
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Wow! I was really excited about seeing this chapter up and once again, I love it! I can't wait for the next one. I'm sure it'll be cute. ...Eheeh..^_^;;; Sorry I'm not really good at reviewing, but at least I'm doing it and showing you that I'm still reading. I'm not gonna stop reading till it's over. I love it that much. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2006 22:04 PST
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Wonderful chapter!!! Yet more insights into Trunks and Goten's behavior. It would seem they are closer than either would admit. But I could be mistaken. Great sequence. The shopping scene was funny; it had me laughing a lot. Bra sure was rubbing it in regarding the new changes she wants. She was also very blunt. I think the "health" statement was just a cover up for what Bulma was really feeling. Goku seems to be having mood swings in full effect. :) Pardon my fragmented review. But it's late and I have to get up early. I really look forward to your next chapter!
| Title: ch 50
Reviewed By: venus legacy On: November 26, 2006 03:53 PST
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Wow, so much to think of in that chapter. I really enjoyed it, i've said this beforeI can't get over how well you portray the characters and the way they interact each other, it reads so vivid and natural it really is a joy to read, I don't want it to end. I was very intrigued with the development between Goten and Trunks in this chapter lol I can't believe Bulla asked Trunks if he was gay, she seems so much older than her years very mature yet she still has that adorable innocence about her at the same time. The camaraderie between Goten and Trunks is just delightful the things Goten comes out with oh my gosh lol you wear the wedding dress since I'm having the babies. I'm not sure if you are hinting that something may happen between the two, or if it is just a symbol of their strong friendship that they can freely discuss such things with each other. The relationship between Goten and Trunks does make for an interesting parallel with Goku and Vegeta, the fact that Goten and Trunks can talk about it whereas Goku and Vegeta can't without complex anxieties, horrors and fears seaping into the discussion. I thought it was really sweet with Vegeta in the end, his anger at the conversation with Goku about 'sex' between them was really an expression of his sensitivity and past hurt. It's also amazing the leaps and bounds Vegeta has come in the way he hesitantly reached out his hand to touch Goku's belly, especially when you think of how he was a while ago the same actions but he had a desire to kill the baby, now he is reaching out in affection and love. And poor Bulma she seems insecure about whether Vegeta will still find her attractive due to the fact she ages quicker than him, but is she also threatened by his relationship with Goku and how the arrival of the baby will impact her marriage. When Goten mentioned that Chi chi will simmer in silence rather than reveal openly how she is feeling about the situation to Goku it made me question how she really feels about Goku's pregnancy I know she is supportive and will be their for him but it will be interesting to see how chi chi, and everyone else reacts when the baby actually arrives. Will the dynamics in the relationships shift, they seem to already be shifting albeit for the better so far, but will this change?
| Reviewed By: update!! On: November 15, 2006 23:37 PST
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two words: UPDATE PLEASE!!!!!!
| Title: Terrific work here!
Reviewed By: StarbearerTM [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2006 18:34 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm making my way through this slowly because it's got a nice complex plot. The characters are well written, and they behave just as I can picture them on DBZ. Bulla and Trunks and Pan I enjoy seeing them fleshed out, and some continuity points addressed here that I don't see in other fanfics. Sorry to have taken so logn to review, but so far I'm very impressed. You've put a lot of work into this!
| Reviewed By: GokuGirl On: November 01, 2006 23:59 PST
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Hi! ^_^ I've been reading this story for a while now and I absolutely LOVE it! I love how you keep all the characters in character and all that (kinda rare in Fanfiction now a days) and I love the plot you have going on. I can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^ By the way, if you've read stories from an author who calls herself GokuGirl, I'm not her just so you now. There are some people who mistaken me with her and if I had known about her beforehand, I wouldn't have made GokuGirl my screen name. Oh well. Keep it up! ^_^ ~GokuGirl (GokuGirl@aol.com)
| Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2006 19:34 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE GOTEN!!... in your fic i mean ^_^;; ~ right well.. what should i says... *rubs tired eyes*... uuumm... i still think this fic is great annnd i really feel bad cause i feel like i'm repeating myself again... *gets annoyed* ok, i'll start again ~ hiya ^^, i really love this fic! i've just read from 42-49 (in the course of... i think 3 dayz) and i like the friend-ship that's developin' between vegeta and goku ~ i also love the humour in this fic, and it's sorta wierd too cause, it's still serious... i don't think that the best explaination but, i hope you done understand to a certain extent ^_^;; ~ i think that's it ^.^
| Title: chapter 40-42
Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2006 19:25 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hiya! ~ just thought i'd drop you a review and tell you i'm still alive ^_^;; ~ sorry for not reviewin before, lots of things have been happenin'... though, i'm a bit tired to write out a list of the 'why's' and i'm reviewin now for that reason... cause i'm tired, heh. ~ so i've got to say, this fic is still going strong and is still continuing to keep me interested with all the new developments... it's just a really cool story, and you can count on another review later on since i got a couple more chapters to go -(7)- before i'm up to date, but keep on updatin' anyway ^_~ ~ now i better get off of this thing before i get in trouble *scratches head* ~ it's 3:25am and i'm actually suppose to go to sleep at 2am... darn you parents! *shakes fist* ~ anywayz, g2g, cya ^-^
| Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: October 20, 2006 10:54 PDT
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It keeps getting better and better!!! I'm cought up to your latest chapter. I'm glad Goku has some clothes that fit him well. I liked the reactions everyone is having regarding the shower. And Goku's dream was interesting. Showing the concerns that have been on his mind, on a subconcious level. I would not be surprised if Vegeta noticed Goku doing a lot of blushing. It would be an eye-opener to hear Vegeta's internal monologue on the most recent events. I also wonder what Goten and Trunks' thoughts are, regarding the shower. I look forward to your next update.
| Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2006 00:22 PDT
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Ooh, a teaser of yaoi! Now I really don't know what you're going to do. I'd been taking for granted that there wasn't going to be yaoi, what with the good relationship they both have with their wives so far in this fic. Well, we'll just have to see. Yamcha shouldn't feel bad about not talking Bulma out of the party-- I don't think there's any way he could have swayed her once she'd made up her mind, heh.
| Reviewed By: Venus legacy not logged on On: October 19, 2006 13:20 PDT
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lol the invitation scenes made me laugh so hard man piccolo is just adorable his reactions are classic I can't wait till the next chapter when the men shop in manternity. Poor Goku, those are some harsh anxieties cropping up in his dreams or should I say nightmares hmm I wonder if Vegeta knew what Goku meant when he said he had been getting confusing feelings, I don't think Vegeta would blatantly admit to knowing. I love the way you show the development of Vegeta and Goku's relationship, the two seem to have a natural rapport with one another, it just seems right that they would have a cave, kind of like their own sanctuary in a way. It also leads me to question the extent of their relationship, it is definitely complex, I mean it seems as if they are subconciously creating a nest for the child a nest for the both of them, which ironically their wives know nothing about, why is that? I hope that this is the first part of a saga, because there seems like so much more that can be written such as after the baby is born and grows up how each person deals with that. A three part saga at least lol no pressure i'm just enjoying the journey you are taking me on with this story.
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