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Reviewed By: Pixelgoddess (not logged in) On: February 05, 2006 08:32 PST
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It is so refreshing to see a story where the victims of rape (which includes their families) react in a real way. I wonder how Chichi will react when she learns it was Vegeta? At least Goku isn't denying it anymore - hopefully he will now get the help he needs. I wonder if Vegeta realizes he was raped as well... I'm glad you are keeping the wives loving and supportive.
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Reviewed By: Addict606 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2006 15:40 PST
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This is great! I only just discovered it and read it all in one go. The characterization is perfect as are the relationships. The dialogue flows so easily and seems so natural. Keep up the good work and I'll be always ready for and update.
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Title: thehitchhiker
Reviewed By: thehitchhiker [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2006 15:06 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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aaaaw!! So cute!! I love these family moments you've got going throughout the fic, really well crafted and genuine, i think they've grown to be my favourite bits, real joys to read! But, oooh, there are some twists getting in there now aren't there? Goten could be on the cusp of finding out, Vegeta's getting back to his normal dis-gruntled self and the complete lack of any interaction between our two saiyans has left me wondering if they're due for another showdown soon? Can't wait for the next chapter! Hats off to you and Rowina, though to be very honest, your spelling and grammar mistakes were quite negligible even at the beginning of the fic (where i presume you didn't have a beta?) but now even the most nit-picky of readers would find nothing!! Am completely edge-of-seat waiting for next chap! plz plz update soon!
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2006 18:32 PST
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Interesting tales indeed. And the lies... I guess they need more time to deal with what has happened. But time doesn't wait and I know they will have to face the facts most likely sooner rather than later. Goten certainly was beeing nosy... but what he discovered would keep him thinking about his options if he too hast the features described in the document. Keep up the great work! :-)
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: January 25, 2006 14:24 PST
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Great couple of chapters! Goku certainly has a lot on his mind. And he got sick...I know what that means ;-) Vegeta too, has a lot on his mind. Goten and Trunks know something is up. I like the way you portray all of the charaters. Great job!
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Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2006 17:32 PST
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This just keeps getting better! Your dialogue is wonderful--so many great lines.The exchange between Yamcha and Krillin, plus Goten's comment about Vegeta's origins (so true, it's unreal) --those really stand out in my mind. I'm very glad Goku confided in Chichi; I was actually worrying about that--whew! What a relief! I usually intensely dislike the harpy, but your portrayal is hard to fault (how much did she pay you? hehe). Anyway, Goku's gonna need all the help and support he can get, right? I am on the edge of my seat!
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Reviewed By: SuperSaiyanJoy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2006 05:47 PST
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Man, you are just rolling with the chapters! Great job! Great job on Goku's and Vegeta's feelings through-out this chapter. I think it suits them well. Maybe if Goku ever gets the courage he could talk to Vegeta about it all or Vegeta could go to him about getting the tests done! Can't wait for another update!!
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: January 21, 2006 00:34 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great chapter! I enjoy this story very much. The characters are very realistic. Now after all those years, a big bump in the road has caused Kakarott and Vegeta to misjudge eachother again. As for Trunks and Goten... if the right chemistry develops (a good possibility, they seem close), they would have to deal with the consequences of their actions and Goten's third-class heritage. Gohan also is third class...Daikon....hmmm...maybe not. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Pixelgoddess (not logged in) On: January 20, 2006 20:08 PST
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Thank you for giving Goku some very real reactions. I wonder if he realizes Vegeta is feeling the rage for him more than at him? I suspect the next time they spar is going to be very, very bad - Goku can't continue like this indefinitely. When he finally breaks he can endanger the entire planet with his power. The dollhouse scene was cute - especially with the blue marker clothing and glue - although I think her behavior is younger than 10. Even if she played with dolls at that age, she probably would be making clothes for them. Gohan knows his father well - I wonder if he can detect any changes in him that would lead him to question Goku. I'd offer to beta for you, but I have three writers already, as well as my own stories. I'm looking forward to more of your thoughtful chapters. Vegeta's reaction - his anger - sounded so right. And he's right - Goku has changed forever even if he doesn't realize it.
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Reviewed By: spendragon87 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2006 16:17 PST
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will trunks and Goten get together? that would be fun.
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: January 19, 2006 11:57 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
As always, I like this story a lot. But I have found several spelling errors. There are places where 'our' sould be 'are' and vice versa. There are some other mispellings I'll point them out another time. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Evercool h On: January 17, 2006 10:29 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ba very good
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Reviewed By: Pixelgoddess (not logged in) On: January 16, 2006 20:40 PST
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From the sounds of it, Goku is quietly suffering more than Vegeta is. I'm sure his denial can't last, but when he breaks, is Vegeta going to be the only one to help him? I've recommended this story at the DBZ Fanfic Salon. I'm glad you treat the wives so kindly - they are so often made into villians any time Goku and Vegeta get together in any way. They have such different marriages, but they suit each other well here. Interesting that Vegeta feels secure enough to tell Bulma what happened - but will Goku admit to it? (I am anticipating an awkward pregnancy - please don't make Chichi evil because of it.) Goten seems pretty sharp - wonder if he is aware enough of what happened - or if the Saiyan they rescued will spill the beans.
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 14:12 PST
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Looks like Vegeta has some things to get off his chest, and is making some progress in that department. Goku however may need more time. I wonder if he will get his tail back. I thought both chapters were done. Their feelings were easy to see and the road to recovery may be a long one. Keep ut the good work! :-)
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Reviewed By: SuperSaiyanJoy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 08:08 PST
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I love the new chapters you added, no matter the length! I guess it's a good thing Goku didn't tell Chic Chi what happened. I think she would have freaked!! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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