| "Pack Law" Reviews/Comments [ 323 ] |
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2009 15:19 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol! So kagome is pregnant...she'll probably have sango and miroku look after the little penut while she's at collage. I can't wait for the sequel! ^_^
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Title: *too lazy to log in...*
Reviewed By: Little_Red On: February 12, 2009 13:00 EST
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ok... so i still stand by what i said about the lowsy ending... but the epilog made up for it... a little... problem with that is now i want to know what happens with the kid and all that stuff... cause if i were kagome id put him through as much hell as i could while i was pregnant... my education and life ingeneral come before childeren, i dont care how long im going to live... i have priorities and im sure she does too... but yeah, over all kudos... i take back what i said about not suggesting it, the epilog made it happy, so im happy. yay for you!
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Reviewed By: Deathmvp [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2009 09:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice chapter. Now we need the nice candle light diner that Inu will mess up some how. LOL. I have very much enjoyed this story.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2009 01:06 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! *starts crying* KI!!!! OMG THAT WAS THE LAST CHAPTER!?! THAT WAS IT T_T AWWWWWW!!!!! *runs off crying* .... *comes back* i loved that story all the way through ^_____^ hope to see more :D
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Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2009 00:58 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What a great chapter! I'm sad that pack law is over...I can't wait to read the epilogue! I hope you write more stories! ^_^
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Reviewed By: KayAkuma On: February 11, 2009 21:56 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awe. It's so wonderful, I don't want it to be over!!! *sobs* Love the story, love you, I'm looking forward to that epilogue!
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Reviewed By: Leo-mae On: February 11, 2009 21:22 EST
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Umm....where is the lemon? There better be a lemon in the epilogue. Anyway aside from that this was a very good story and I can't wait for the last part.
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Reviewed By: Ichigohime [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 20:11 EST
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AWESOME CHAPTER! I can't wait for the epilogue! And I'm glad to see things come to a happy ending. I'm just so overjoyed! I know this is one story I'll revisit again and again. You're a wonderful writer. I never expected another jewel to be created! But I'm glad its gone!
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 20:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great chapter I loved it how Ki finally realises and decides to basicly include herself and Naraku into the Shikonotama, creating a way to save the earth.... but this "Shikon no Tama… disappear. Forever." Made me want to have a childish hissy fit... so sad that this story is at its end... and I loved this line... a little slow couldn't the pack have figured this out before??? lol... Miroku grinned. "Well, since it's made from InuYasha's fang, like our talismans are, it's a proper substitute. That means you've actually been a pack member all along, since you got that ring before we had the talismans." Kagome smiled as she listened to Miroku expand on the loophole they'd found.
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 18:16 EST
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what an exciting ending! i loved the action of the battle scene. ki came through well in the end, even forging an even more powerful jewel. and then to find that kagome had been a pack member all along. it was the best possible ending for a wonderful story. i can't wait to read the epilogue, but i will miss keeping up with this story. i do hope that you will be starting another soon.
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Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2009 15:53 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I suspected Naraku would show up as Ki was giving the jewel to Kagome. He probably wanted this to happen so he could infiltrate the pack location and get to Kagome and *kill* the rest of the pack (in his wildest dreams). He underestimated the pack, as usual, and Ki's desires to be free. The only thing about the fight that disappointed me was that Sesshomaru wasn't there too. I think he should have been since he was in the area. Don't get me wrong Arata is nice but there are too many Fluffy fans to make them happy with his absence. I love that she has been pack all along and that is going to be acknowledged by the council. I am surprised that I was wrong about Naraku having a member on the council though, I really thought he did because of the knowledge he had over where they were and what they were deciding. The end bit with Kagome's friends was funny and sad. It showed Kagome how much she grew up while they haven't yet, but they were good friends to her and I hope someday when they get a little more mature they can all be friends again. I look forward to the epilogue and what ever you produce next.
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Title: *too lazy to log in...*
Reviewed By: Little_Red On: February 11, 2009 15:31 EST
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i kinda feel bad... because ive been reading this story for a while now... and mostly ive liked it. i mean, if someone asked what i thought of this story id say that it had a good idea, and that it was well written, but dont read it.. becuase the ending is so unsatisfing... its just like, oh hey, you were pack all along... the end... and the battle was really freaking short... i dont even like battle senes, but as far as full on knock out final battles go... it could use some work... but i dont really know where you could go with it... i dont know what more you could do... so, over all you get an A+ but the ending gets like a C-...
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Reviewed By: NeishaK On: February 11, 2009 15:31 EST
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I read through this last night after our chat- and was up till 430 this morning finishing it. This is wonderful! And then I found todays chapter, and realized that I was bugging you while writing it, lol. Seriously though- this is a wonderful piece of fiction, and the way you've written it is amazing. I can see why it was nominated, and I know it'll win something, lol. Can't wait to see the epilogue. Neisha
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Reviewed By: frpal On: February 11, 2009 13:14 EST
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I've been with the story for ALONG time. I just had to say that I am very happy that you finished it and that I totally LOVED it. You did a very good job...can't believe it's your first. I'll look forward to reading more if you write any more that is....
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Reviewed By: Ichigohime [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2009 20:33 EST
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Wow. Only one chapter and an epilogue? I can't believe that. It seems like I just started reading! I just can't wait until your next update.. but at the same time I don't want it to come too soon! AH! I have a feeling the next chapter is going to be a great one! I really did enjoy reading this chapter as well. I feel bad for Ki but I'm glad she was able to realize Naraku was just using her. And I can't help but wonder just how Kagome plans to purify the jewel. Update soon!
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