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| "Pack Law" Reviews/Comments [ 323 ] | | Pages (22): [ « ‹ 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 › » ] | Reviewed By: rhmarie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2008 19:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT.... Can't wait to see/hear Kagome's reaction ... not only to going to Koga's Pack, but what just happened between her and InuYasha (and PLEASE, PLEASE, let her give Miroku a piece--even small one-- of her mind about stopping her from going back early.. I still think he has some nerve --- hey, let InuYasha get wind of that too.) Well, I'll go so you can get back to your writing. Can't wait for the next chapters to come... Rhonda
| Reviewed By: inufan625 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2008 06:29 EDT
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Congratulations! Your fiction has won an award from the Feudal Association for the June 2008 term! Founded in 2005 by author/artist, Dark Avenger, and currently owned by authors, InuGrrrl and Inufan625, the Feudal Association consists of writers, artists, and enthusiasts of the InuYasha fandom. But aside from that, we are also proud to say that we are an awards guild that recognizes fan-fiction and artwork. Several times a year we nominate, vote, and hand out honors to some of the best creations in the fandom. Our official website can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/fa/ Our Yahoo Group, where the nominating and voting occurs, can be found here: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ Links to all of the awards for 2008 can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/fa/pickup.html First place awards will be on permanent display here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/fa/2008art.html Congratulations and feel free to join and/or help us spread the word about our group! Please pick up your award here: http://i286.photobucket.com/albums/ll109/FeudalAssociation/Fiction%20June08 /bestincharacterfiction3rd1.jpg ~ InuGrrrl & Inufan625 Owners of the Feudal Association
| Reviewed By: inufan625 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2008 06:03 EDT
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Congratulations! Your fiction has won an award from the Feudal Association for the June 2008 term! Founded in 2005 by author/artist, Dark Avenger, and currently owned by authors, InuGrrrl and Inufan625, the Feudal Association consists of writers, artists, and enthusiasts of the InuYasha fandom. But aside from that, we are also proud to say that we are an awards guild that recognizes fan-fiction and artwork. Several times a year we nominate, vote, and hand out honors to some of the best creations in the fandom. Our official website can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/fa/ Our Yahoo Group, where the nominating and voting occurs, can be found here: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ Links to all of the awards for 2008 can be found here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/fa/pickup.html First place awards will be on permanent display here: http://feudal-pulpfiction.net/fa/2008art.html Congratulations and feel free to join and/or help us spread the word about our group! Please pick up your award here: http://i286.photobucket.com/albums/ll109/FeudalAssociation/Fiction%20June08 /bestdramafiction3rd2.jpg ~ InuGrrrl & Inufan625 Owners of the Feudal Association
| Reviewed By: S On: July 04, 2008 10:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love your story!!!!! One question.This is a inuyasha and kagome pairing right?
| Title: Love Pack Law
Reviewed By: rhmarie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2008 13:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story...I always get a thrill when I see that you have updated. Just a few thoughts.. I'm hoping that you have Kagome/InuYasha talk, one on one, about why he didn't tell her about Pack Law and what Sess proposed. If I were Kagome I would have a hard time dealing with the fact that he told/asked everyone else, before he even approached me. I'd feel like he was saying I wasn't pack back then - course then he'd have to explain, etc... Also... I think Miroku needs to have his butt kicked too. She wanted to go back before that Saturday and he said no, change time line. I'd be ticked off if I were Kagome, who did he think he was? I'd probably lash out saying stuff like... Seems you moved on, didn't seem to miss me too much if you didn't want things to change, InuYasha have time to grow up?? What we couldn't grow together, you thought I would hurt his growing? What if everything would have been better, easier, InuYasha could have dealt with insecurtiy issues already, etc... Then I'd probably say... For me, it's been a week, for you it's been 500yrs, and all of you are different and have different lives, had more experiences. I'm still 16 without lifes experiences. I'm not sure we can be pack or go back to what we once shared. I will always care about y'all, but I have to take some time and mourn the lose of my feudal family, for to me, they are gone and because of YOU I didn't go back when I could have. The fight would not have occurred if I had gone back and who knows but we may have already taken care of Naraku in the past if I had gone back. If I had known about Pack Law and how I would live to see my family again, I would not have worried about school or the well closing... I'd probably say something like that (feel free to have her have a conversation if you want -hint) I would just LOVE to see her show a mature side of herself cause all her feudal family, even InuYasha, has now outgrown her in maturity levels and she needs to catch up FAST if she wants to stand on her own feet. I do love this story and a good story to me captures my imagination -- the what if's, run thru my mind. What if... she were to leave and (for couple of chapters, covering 5 years or so) have interactions with others, maybe meet other Inu-youkai or other demons, become part of their world... how would InuYasha react, would the bonds still be there (course they would), would InuYasha want to beat Miroku over the head for not letting Kagome go back when she wanted? hmmm, the I wonders get me everytime. Course, if I were Kagome, when they told me I never returned thru the well, it closed and I never came back, I'd have had to go straight home, pack a ton of suitcases and jump right back in... I'm sure she is going to have the "If only I had not listened to Miroku" thoughts. ANYWAY... Thanks for writing and sharing your world with us, update as quickly and often as you can so my mind doesn't explode with "what ifs" and I can turn down the path you take the story and put to rest those what ifs and start others (haha)... hmmm, seems I'm long winded today, so I'll stop typing now and let you get back to work... hint/hint (sorry couldn't resist). Have a great day and thanks again.. Rhonda
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2008 03:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
best line..."I know you've always wanted to change the world… I can't help but wish you would have just gone into medicine instead…" Kagome needs to help InuYasha break down those wall he has up.
| Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 22:56 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooo were getting a limey next... cant wait :P and awwww Inuyasha let something slip out :P i love how that happens :P and i think im alright with the pack laws soo far ^___^ hasnt confused me yet :P
| Reviewed By: Hentai Strumpet [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 22:26 EDT
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very good chapter. but I'm confused about Inuyasha's behavior. can you care to explain it a little bit for me.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 22:22 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like Sesshomaru and Miroku's save about Kagome not being able to join the pack until after she learns Pack Law. This also gives them an additional distraction from her family, the need to learn how to join her other family. Though I do have a question about the pack law explained so far; wouldn't the next beta be the second strongest in the pack, Inuyasha's son when he has one, and not Miroku's son? Granted until Inuyasha has any children Miroku's son could be the second strongest, Hitomu just seemed too confident that he would be the next beta to the Inu no Taisho. I find it funny that they are more worried about Inuyasha's mood then Sesshomaru's. Inuyasha may be the Alpha of the small pack but Sesshomaru is the high Alpha or Alpha's Alpha. It was good to see Inuyasha and Kagome showing that they still know how the other reacts to things after all they have been through. I am rooting for Kagome to forgive Inuyasha for doubting her and Inuyasha relearning how to drop his barriers around Kagome. They managed to get together before they should be able to do it again. The end bit with Kagome's mother wanting her daughter to be normal was so true to what all mothers want for their daughters, to be normal and not have to worry about changing the world until they are older, but Kagome lost what remained of her childhood after she fell down the well. I am looking forward to what happens next.
| Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 18:43 EDT
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i think miroku should teach her pack law, learn from the master. one can persuade (manipulate) to human/youkai by learning how to schmooze and appeal to the baser natures of the individual. hitomu may know and understand the art but miroku works magic (one fanfic i read made him 'kami of deception'). . . yasha needs to grow up a bit and realize that a sixteen year old is still a 'pup' but she is also a young woman who had great responsibility and power thrust upon her. he needs to learn the art of 'persuasion' too. . . mama's got more trust than i ever had, i have threatened to put a hit on my 15 year old's boyfriend if he compromised or hurt her in any way (he lived on a steep hill i could have just cut his brake lines -yes i know how, don't ask). she's 25 now and they have been happily married for 4 years (his life is still forfeit if he hurts her). . . kagome needs to watch the sandra dee movie 'if a man answers' (wonderful movie, the girl's mother suggests she adapt the strategies of a dog-trainer in the care and training of her husband). the strategies also work on children. . . wonderful chapter, i was worried that kagome and yasha's rift was getting too large. at least he made some effort without swallowing his shoes. ~ a delight as always, ginny
| Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 17:57 EDT
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i appreciated the homage you paid to the ending of the manga. she was born to be with him. this chapter was a joy to read. poor inuyasha, having to swallow his pride and open up and admit his feelings to kagome and her mother. and poor kagome, not being able to stay mad when she wants to. they were both born to be with each other. thank you for another great chapter.
| Reviewed By: Phalon (nsi) On: June 30, 2008 16:38 EDT
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XD Oh dear Inuyasha, he's going to end up with a complex. Ha, I was right, it was Kagome's mom who mentioned that thing about school. :P I find it funny how he reacts if Kagome submits too much. He can't handle it and just crashes completely and goes into Hayou panic mode.
| Title: Great!
Reviewed By: CandyEars [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2008 23:58 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just caught up - really liking this story! Inu seems to always be his own worse enemy, ne? How is Inu going to drop 500 years of anger and move on? I hope Kags family pulls through! It's bad enough we lost Rin and Kohaku! Not Souta too! And there's never enough Sesshy! Would've liked to hear that conversation! Well it's late - Thank you for sharing - looking forward to more!
| Reviewed By: kodiaqkitten [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2008 00:40 EDT
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Highly entertaining chapter! I really loved the line about the Olympics! Inuyasha has gotten himself into quite the mess now. I'm curious who's going to come out on top... The hanyou or the spiritualist... Sesshoumaru sounds like he has an interesting mate. Waiting for Kagome to lay the smack down on Inuyasha. Loved her angsty response to Sesshoumaru's comment on mates. Inu has got his work cut out for him. Make amends, reestablish his position and rank, and take down the bad guy. Hope Kags family makes it through... but I'm always one for a darker fic... go figure eh? Excellent work once again!
| Reviewed By: critical eye [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2008 06:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really good and usually I don´t even like the Kagome/Inuyasha pairing! So that should say you something. You wanna know why? Because everyone is in Character; Inuyasha is an Idiot but he really cares for his frieds (others make him cruel and stupid without reason). You didn´t make Kagome wimpy or stupid (or all powerful like a goddess), absolutely IC. The same goes for Miroku und Sango. You are one of the few who clearly sees, that Miroku is closer to Kagome than Sango ever was. He is sharp and insightful whereas Sango is a fighter and more restrained with other people. And thanks for not pairing Sesshoumaru with Rin, that would have been so gross. I don´t get why so many fans of him can´t see, how he really is and think it´s romantic that he cares for Rin. As if there is only one kind of love! The real Sesshoumaru would never mate with a human, dito (even if I´m a diehard Sess/Kag fan, I know that much). I´m convinced that Kohaku is the one for Rin just like in your story. I also love Hitomu, not so suprising because I´m totally in love with Miroku. They are fun, strong, intelligent and compassionate. I wish Rumiko had paired Kagome with him rather than Inu. Maybe Inu would have been better of with Sango, they are very similar. Generally, I like your own characters very much and that´s not normal for me. Very well done!
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